Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the food, correct word choice and grammar (e.g., 'pho', not 'fur'), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: My favourite food is phở, a famous Vietnamese noodle soup. I eat it almost every morning because it’s tasty and nutritious, and I can grab it quickly before going to school. For example, I usually order a bowl with beef and fresh herbs to feel full and energized.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons for the change. Use linking words (e.g., 'but', 'however', 'because') and avoid filler sounds like 'umm'. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

Exemplo: When I was young, I loved eating candy and sweets. However, as I grew older I changed my habits because too much sugar affected my teeth and energy levels. Now I prefer fruits or yogurt instead.

Sugestão: Good idea but improve grammar and specificity. Use present tense consistently for habitual actions, link contrasting seasons with words like 'in contrast' or 'whereas', and give one concrete example for each season.

Exemplo: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In summer I prefer cold dishes such as salads or iced fruit drinks to stay cool, whereas in winter I usually have warm soups and hot tea to keep warm.

Sugestão: Give a clear statement about change and reason. Correct grammar and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'changed' not 'had chain', 'affected' not 'aged'). Use one linking word like 'because' and one specific effect or example.

Exemplo: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since childhood. I used to love chocolate and other sweets, but now I avoid them because they are too sugary and have caused problems with my teeth and energy levels.

× My favorite food is fur is one of the most famous food in Vietnam.

✓ My favorite food is phở, which is one of the most famous foods in Vietnam.

The sentence has article and noun number errors and a fragment. 'fur' is likely 'phở' (proper noun) and needs comma and relative clause 'which is' to connect ideas. 'Food' should be plural 'foods' when referring to types in Vietnam. Use 'which is' to join clauses for clarity.

× I use everyday because it's very delicious and nutrition, especially in the morning when I just have a little time to grab something quickly for I'll go to school.

✓ I eat it every day because it's very delicious and nutritious, especially in the morning when I have only a little time to grab something quickly before I go to school.

'Use' is incorrect for eating; use 'eat'. 'Everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). 'Nutrition' should be adjective 'nutritious'. 'When I just have' should be 'when I have only' and 'for I'll go to school' should be 'before I go to school' to show purpose/time. Ensure present simple tense for habitual actions.

× When I was young, candy was my prior priority.

✓ When I was young, candy was my top priority.

Phrase 'prior priority' is redundant and unnatural; use 'top priority'. The past tense 'was' is correct for a past habit.

× A small kid always lives with and I'm not exception umm.

✓ As a child, I always lived with sweets, and I was no exception.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'A small kid always lives with' lacks an object; clarify as 'lived with sweets'. Use past tense 'lived' and 'was no exception' for consistency. Remove filler 'umm'.

× But now my habit is changing and I don't like something too sweet and it's make me umm.

✓ But now my habits have changed and I don't like things that are too sweet because they make me feel unwell.

Use present perfect 'have changed' to indicate change from past to present. 'Something too sweet' should be plural/general 'things that are too sweet'. 'It's make me' incorrect subject-verb agreement and form; use 'they make me'. Clarify 'umm' as 'feel unwell'.

× It's not umm good for my health.

✓ They are not good for my health.

Referent is plural 'sweets/things', so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Avoid filler 'umm'.

× Yes, I ate different foods depending on the season.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season.

Question asks about general habit, so use present simple 'eat' instead of past 'ate' to describe habitual action.

× In summer I prefer something cold like salads or it to stay cold, while in the winter I eat healthier warmer meals as soup or hot tea to keep warm.

✓ In summer I prefer cold foods like salads or iced drinks, while in winter I eat healthier, warmer meals such as soup or drink hot tea to keep warm.

'Something cold' is vague; specify 'cold foods'. 'It to stay cold' is incorrect pronoun usage; replace with 'iced drinks' or remove. Add 'such as' for examples and commas for adjective order. Maintain present simple for habits.

× When I was a child my favorite foods were sweet, especially chocolate.

✓ When I was a child, my favorite foods were sweet, especially chocolate.

Add comma after introductory phrase for correct sentence punctuation. Past tense 'were' is correct.

× Now it's had chain because I find them too sweet and they give me too aged so I avoid them.

✓ Now that has changed because I find them too sweet and they make me feel tired, so I avoid them.

'It's had chain' is incorrect; correct expression is 'that has changed' or 'it has changed'. 'Give me too aged' is unintelligible; likely meaning 'make me feel tired' or 'age me'—choose 'make me feel tired'. Use present simple 'make' for general effect and add comma and conjunction for clarity.