Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence naming one or two favourites, then add one or two specific reasons or a brief example. Avoid repetition like “so delicious” and phrasing such as “all the time whenever I can.” Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “because” or “so”).

Exemplo: My favourite foods are Palo and shashlik. I especially enjoy shashlik because the meat is well-marinated and smoky, and Palo is comforting with its rich rice and spices. For example, I often have shashlik at weekend barbecues with friends because it’s social and tasty.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence such as “As a child, I liked…,” then give one or two specific details (flavours, occasions, or memories). Avoid vague phrases like “full of ingredients” and repeat words (delicious). Use a linking word to add a memory or reason (e.g., “because” or “so”).

Exemplo: As a child, I loved home-cooked dishes like fluff and salsa. My mother often made them after school because they were quick and flavorful, and I remember sitting at the kitchen table enjoying the spicy salsa with warm bread.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with contrasting seasonal specifics using linking words (e.g., “in summer… whereas in winter…”). Correct minor grammar (e.g., “hot weather” not “hot weather condition”) and be specific about examples and frequency without overgeneralising.

Exemplo: Yes — I eat different foods depending on the season. In summer I prefer light meals like salads and fresh fruit because it’s hot, whereas in winter I often eat hearty soups and stews such as plum soup, which are warming and traditional in my family.

Sugestão: Give a clear contrast sentence (e.g., “Yes — it has changed from X to Y”) and explain briefly why the change happened using a linking word like “because” or “now.” Avoid unclear words like “free” and vague phrases like “full of ingredients.” Provide one concrete reason or example.

Exemplo: Yes, it has changed: as a child I preferred simple soups, but now I usually choose shashlik and plov because I enjoy richer flavours and grilled meat. For example, I now like plov’s complex spices and the charred taste of shashlik at family gatherings.

× There are several foods that I like actually.

✓ There are several foods that I like, actually.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma before 'actually' for natural phrasing. This is a punctuation/clarity correction to improve fluency. Suggestion: add the comma to separate the discourse marker from the clause.

× I really like traditional dishes such as Palo and shashlik and they are so delicious.

✓ I really like traditional dishes such as palo and shashlik, and they are very delicious.

Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Also 'so' is informal; 'very' is more appropriate in formal responses. Suggestion: add a comma and use 'very' for clearer, more formal emphasis.

× I eat them all the time whenever I can.

✓ I eat them all the time whenever I can.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present simple to express habitual action. No change needed.

× When I was a child I really liked home cooked meals such as fluff and salsa and my mom cooked them for me whenever I asked and they were so delicious and full of ingredients.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked home-cooked meals such as fluff and salsa; my mom cooked them for me whenever I asked, and they were very delicious and full of ingredients.

Add commas to separate clauses and a hyphen in 'home-cooked' (compound adjective). Replace informal 'so' with 'very' for formality. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses for clarity. Suggestion: punctuate clauses and hyphenate adjectives for correctness and readability.

× Because of hot weather condition I can't eat hot meals and I prefer to eat fresh foods and salads.

✓ Because of the hot weather conditions, I can't eat hot meals, and I prefer to eat fresh foods and salads.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'hot weather conditions' and use plural 'conditions' or keep singular with article. Also add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: say 'because of the hot weather' or 'because of the hot weather conditions' for natural phrasing.

× In winter I eat all the time soup and plum which are traditional food.

✓ In winter I eat soup and plums all the time, which are traditional foods.

Word order: place the adverbial 'all the time' after the verb phrase for natural English. 'Plum' should be plural 'plums' if referring generally. Use 'foods' plural and add a comma before the relative clause. Suggestion: reorder phrase, pluralize nouns, and punctuate the relative clause.

× Yes, it has changed.

✓ Yes, it has changed.

This sentence is correct: present perfect 'has changed' appropriately connects past to present. No change needed.

× When I was a child I liked more soup and free, but nowadays I prefer to eat shashlik and plove, which are full of ingredients and they are quite delicious.

✓ When I was a child I liked soup and fries more, but nowadays I prefer to eat shashlik and plov, which are full of ingredients and are quite delicious.

Several issues: 'liked more soup and free' is unclear—likely meant 'soup and fries' and adverb placement 'more' should follow the object or be 'liked...more'. Correct 'plove' to 'plov' (or 'pilaf/plov') and remove the redundant 'they' after 'which are' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: correct vocabulary, place 'more' properly, and avoid redundant pronouns.