Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a brief personal reason. Avoid repetition (e.g., “they are so delicious” and “I want to eat them every day” convey similar ideas). Use a linking word to connect the reason to the memory.

Exemplo: I love the local noodles from my hometown. They have a rich, savory broth and handmade noodles that I can’t get anywhere else, and because my grandmother used to make them for me, eating them always brings back warm memories.

Sugestão: Correct word choice and be specific: avoid unclear phrases like “body ship” and “my hairs.” Use linking words and give a concise reason. Keep it to two sentences max and focus on clarity.

Exemplo: When I was young I loved fast food such as hamburgers and pizza because I wasn’t concerned about my health then. However, now I try to eat more balanced meals to stay healthy.

Sugestão: Be direct and add a specific example: explain briefly how the menu changes and why, using linking words (e.g., “for example,” “so”). Correct small mistakes (e.g., “refectory” is acceptable but you could say “cafeteria”).

Exemplo: Yes. I eat different foods depending on the season because the university cafeteria changes its menu. For example, in summer they serve more salads and cold dishes, while in winter there are more soups and stews because seasonal ingredients and prices vary.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repetition: give a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details (specific sensory detail or memory), and a linking word to conclude. Correct small grammar (e.g., “Eating them remind me” → “reminds me”).

Exemplo: No, my favourite hasn’t changed — it’s still the traditional noodles from my hometown. The chewy noodles and aromatic broth remind me of my grandmother’s cooking, so they’re comforting and very special to me.

× But now, you know, it's time to pay more attention on these things.

✓ But now, you know, it's time to pay more attention to these things.

Use 'pay attention to' not 'pay attention on'. The correct preposition after 'pay attention' is 'to'. Suggestion: memorize common verb+preposition collocations and practice with example sentences. ID:11

× I usually eat in the refectory at my university and they just offer me different kinds of food across the year.

✓ I usually eat in the refectory at my university and they just offer different kinds of food throughout the year.

Although 'kinds of food' is correct, 'across the year' is unnatural. Use 'throughout the year' for repeated variation. Also remove 'me' after 'offer' because 'offer someone something' is possible but here 'offer different kinds of food' is more natural. Suggestion: prefer 'throughout the year' to indicate changes during the year and avoid unnecessary objects. ID:1

× I guess it's because the prices of some vegetables or meat varies at different times.

✓ I guess it's because the prices of some vegetables or meat vary at different times.

Subject 'prices' is plural, so the verb should be 'vary' not 'varies'. Suggestion: identify the subject (prices) and ensure the verb matches plurality. ID:27

× Eating them remind me of my grandma who used to cook them for me when I was a child.

✓ Eating them reminds me of my grandma who used to cook them for me when I was a child.

When a gerund phrase 'Eating them' functions as the subject, the verb must agree: 'reminds' (third-person singular). Suggestion: after -ing subject, check verb agreement with singular idea. ID:10

× My first food is always the traditional noodles from my hometown.

✓ My favourite food has always been the traditional noodles from my hometown.

'My first food is always' is awkward and mismatches tense/meaning. Use 'has always been' to express a preference persisting from childhood to now (present perfect). Also 'favourite food' fits question context. Suggestion: use present perfect to describe continuous states from past to present and ensure third-person singular verbs are used correctly. ID:2

× When I was young, I enjoyed fast food very much, like hamburgers, pizzas or something like that, because I didn't worry about my body ship or my hairs.

✓ When I was young, I enjoyed fast food very much, like hamburgers and pizzas, because I didn't worry about my body shape or my hair.

Use 'and' instead of 'or something like that' for clarity; 'body ship' is incorrect — correct word is 'body shape'; 'hair' is uncountable so not plural 'hairs'. Suggestion: learn countable vs uncountable nouns and common collocations like 'body shape' and 'hair'. ID:12

× More importantly, every time when I eat them, they just remind me of my grandma.

✓ More importantly, every time I eat them, they remind me of my grandma.

Use 'every time I eat them' rather than 'every time when I eat them' — 'when' is redundant. Also 'just' is unnecessary; removing it improves fluency. Suggestion: avoid redundant words in time clauses and use concise structures. ID:11

× They are just so special.

✓ They are very special to me.

'Just so special' is informal and vague; adding 'to me' clarifies the personal value. Also avoid 'just' for stronger, clearer expression. Suggestion: add clarifying prepositional phrases when talking about personal feelings. ID:12