Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'toppings', 'crust', 'spicy' or 'cheesy') and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: My favourite food is pizza. I especially enjoy thin-crust pizzas with spicy tomato sauce and lots of mozzarella because the contrast of a crispy base and gooey cheese makes it perfect for a quick lunch.

Sugestão: Avoid hesitations and incorrect phrases; correct vocabulary (e.g., 'sweet treats' not 'sugary trees'). Begin with a clear topic sentence and add one supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it concise and accurate.

Exemplo: When I was young, I loved sweet treats such as chocolate cake and ice cream. For example, during summer my parents often took me to the park on weekends where I would enjoy a cone of vanilla ice cream.

Sugestão: Good idea and structure; reduce repetition and use correct adjectives and linking phrases. Say why the seasonal choice suits you and include one clear reason. Use words like 'refreshing' instead of 'freshen'.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. For example, I eat refreshing fruits like watermelon in summer because they help me cool down, whereas in winter I prefer hot soups such as chicken or vegetable soup to keep warm.

Sugestão: Be direct and avoid filler words and repeated words. Give a clear contrast using a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'now'). Provide a specific example of vegetables you prefer and a reason.

Exemplo: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. As a child I preferred sugary treats like chocolate cake, but now I prefer salads and steamed vegetables such as broccoli and spinach because they are healthier and make me feel more energetic.

× While I reckon my favorite food is pizza, I used to eat a lot of pizza in my daily life.

✓ While I reckon my favorite food is pizza, I eat a lot of pizza in my daily life.

The phrase 'used to' indicates a past habit; the student means a current routine. This is a present tense issue: replace 'used to eat' with 'eat' to match the present context. Suggestion: Use simple present for current habitual actions (I eat, I go, I like).

× I prefer pizza with a very rich taste and I think they are my top choice for lunch.

✓ I prefer pizza with a very rich taste and I think it is my top choice for lunch.

The noun 'pizza' is singular, so the pronoun must be singular ('it') and the verb must agree ('is'). This is a subject-verb agreement / pronoun number issue. Use 'it is' when referring to a single food item. Suggestion: Match pronouns and verbs to the noun number (singular->it/is, plural->they/are).

× If if I remember rightly, when I was young I loved chocolate cake because sugary trees always brightened my mood.

✓ If I remember rightly, when I was young I loved chocolate cake because sweet things always brightened my mood.

'If if' is a duplication error; 'sugary trees' is incorrect word choice and likely meant 'sweet things'. This falls under incorrect use of words and prepositions/phrasing. Replace duplicated word and incorrect noun with appropriate vocabulary. Suggestion: Avoid accidental repetitions and choose collocations: 'sweet things' or 'sweets' instead of 'sugary trees'.

× I also enjoyed eating ice cream. During the summer, my parents would take me to the park for for most every weekend.

✓ I also enjoyed eating ice cream. During the summer, my parents would take me to the park for most weekends.

There is a duplicated word 'for for' and the phrase 'most every weekend' is awkward; 'most weekends' or 'almost every weekend' are correct. This is a sentence structure/word choice issue. Remove duplication and choose a standard time expression. Suggestion: Use 'most weekends' or 'almost every weekend' for frequency; avoid duplicate words.

× For example I eat a lot of fresh fruits like watermelon in summer because they are freshen and in winter I prefer I prefer hot soups such as chicken or vegetable soup.

✓ For example, I eat a lot of fresh fruits like watermelon in summer because they are refreshing, and in winter I prefer hot soups such as chicken or vegetable soup.

There is tense consistency and word choice errors: 'freshen' is incorrect; use adjective 'refreshing'. Also 'I prefer I prefer' duplicates. Keep present tense for habitual actions. This is a present tense/word choice issue. Suggestion: Use adjectives correctly (refreshing) and avoid repeated phrases; ensure parallel structure with 'in summer ... and in winter ...'. Use commas for clarity.

× Well, to be honest, my taste in food has changed a lot. When I was young I loved eating eating sweet, sweet food like chocolate cakes because I think it it can brighten my mood.

✓ Well, to be honest, my taste in food has changed a lot. When I was young I loved eating sweet food like chocolate cake because I thought it could brighten my mood.

There are duplicated words ('eating eating', 'sweet, sweet', 'it it') and tense inconsistency: referring to past feelings should use past tense 'thought' and 'could' instead of present 'think'/'can'. This is a present/past tense issue and repetition errors. Use past tense when describing past preferences. Suggestion: Remove duplicates and keep past tense for past situations: 'I thought it could brighten my mood.' Use singular/plural consistently for countable nouns ('chocolate cake' or 'chocolate cakes').

× But now I prefer some fresh, fresh vegetables. I think it it's healthy for me.

✓ But now I prefer fresh vegetables. I think they are healthy for me.

Duplicated adjective 'fresh, fresh' should be a single 'fresh'. 'Vegetables' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should be 'they are' not 'it it's'. This is a present tense/subject-verb agreement and pronoun number issue. Ensure pronoun number matches noun. Suggestion: Avoid repetition, match plural nouns with 'they are' and keep present tense for current preferences.