Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Use correct singular/plural forms and reduce filler words (umm, uh).

Exemplo: I enjoy healthy meals, especially grilled chicken with lots of vegetables and fresh fruit. This balanced diet boosts my stamina and provides essential vitamins and minerals, so I feel more energetic every day.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and be specific. Use past tense accurately and avoid repetition. Link past and present with a clear connector (however, now).

Exemplo: When I was young, I often ate fast food such as burgers and fries, which was unhealthy. However, now I follow a balanced diet with plenty of fruits and vegetables, so I have much more energy.

Sugestão: Organize the answer clearly and use linking words. Remove repetition and fillers. Provide one clear example for each season and use commas for lists.

Exemplo: Yes, my food choices change with the seasons. For example, in summer I eat hydrating foods like watermelon and light salads to stay cool, while in winter I prefer hot drinks and warm soups to keep my body warm.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition of ideas already stated. Give a concise contrast using linking words (but, now) and correct collocations (follow a balanced diet). Reduce fillers.

Exemplo: Yes, it has changed. As a child I ate a lot of junk food like burgers and fries, but now I follow a balanced diet to get necessary vitamins and minerals, and I feel much healthier.

× My favorite food is healthy meals and like grilled chickens with plenty of vegetables and fruits.

✓ My favorite foods are healthy meals like grilled chicken with plenty of vegetables and fruits.

The sentence uses incorrect quantifiers and plural forms. 'Food' when listing types should be plural 'foods' or rephrase to 'my favorite food is...'. 'Grilled chickens' incorrectly pluralizes a dish; use 'grilled chicken' as an uncountable food. Also remove extra 'and' before 'like'. Suggestion: use 'My favorite foods are...' or 'My favorite food is...' and keep dish names uncountable when appropriate.

× I am, I do this, umm, sensible eating plan every day because I think these, uh, plan helps me to boost my physical stamina and umm, I can have vitamins and mineral, uh, in this diet.

✓ I follow this sensible eating plan every day because I think this plan helps me boost my physical stamina and get vitamins and minerals from my diet.

The original has disfluent fillers and incorrect pronoun agreement. 'I am, I do this' is awkward; use 'I follow'. 'These plan' mixes plural demonstrative with singular noun; use 'this plan'. 'Helps me to boost' can be 'helps me boost'. 'I can have vitamins and mineral in this diet' should be 'get vitamins and minerals from my diet'. Suggest speaking in concise clauses and ensure demonstratives match noun number.

× When I was young I used to eat a lot of drying food like burgers and fast food and fatty food, but that were really harmful to my health.

✓ When I was young I used to eat a lot of junk food like burgers and fast food, but that was really harmful to my health.

'Drying food' is incorrect word choice; 'junk food' fits context. 'That were' has subject-verb disagreement in past tense; 'that' (referring to singular idea) takes 'was'. Ensure correct past tense verb 'was'.

× But nowadays I follow a sensible and balanced diet with plenty of fruits and vegetables so I feel more energetic and I think these kind of food avoid me.

✓ But nowadays I follow a sensible and balanced diet with plenty of fruits and vegetables, so I feel more energetic and I think this kind of food helps me avoid that.

'These kind of food' mixes plural demonstrative with singular noun; use 'this kind of food' or 'these kinds of food'. 'Avoid me' is incorrect verb-object order; say 'helps me avoid that' or 'helps me avoid those foods'. Also add 'helps' for subject-verb agreement and a comma before 'so'.

× I usually follow a sensible and balanced diet plan eating plan about my food choices changed with the season.

✓ I usually follow a sensible and balanced eating plan, and my food choices change with the season.

The original repeats 'plan' and has incorrect clause order. Use 'eating plan' once and rephrase the second idea as an independent clause. Use simple present 'change' for habitual actions.

× For example, in summer I prefer hydrating foods like watermelon light salads to stay cool, while in winter I drink hot tea and eat, uh, warm dishes such as soup to keep my energy and my body temperature up.

✓ For example, in summer I prefer hydrating foods like watermelon and light salads to stay cool, while in winter I drink hot tea and eat warm dishes such as soup to keep my energy and body temperature up.

Missing conjunction 'and' between 'watermelon' and 'light salads'. Remove filler 'uh'. 'My body temperature' is natural as 'body temperature' without 'my'. Keep parallel structure.

× Yes, of course, when I was a child I used to eat a lot of junk food like burgers, fries and fatty foods which were really harmful to my health.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child I used to eat a lot of junk food like burgers, fries, and other fatty foods which were really harmful to my health.

Add punctuation for clarity. 'Fatty foods which were' is acceptable, but adding 'other' clarifies categories. Use commas in a list for natural speech. Tense 'used to' correctly expresses past habit; ensure commas to separate clauses.

× But now I follow sensible and umm balanced umm eating plan so I can get all necessary vitamins, minerals and nutrients and I feel really much healthier than before.

✓ But now I follow a sensible and balanced eating plan, so I can get all the necessary vitamins, minerals, and nutrients, and I feel much healthier than before.

Remove fillers 'umm'. Insert articles: 'a sensible and balanced eating plan' is correct. Add 'the' before 'necessary' for specificity. 'Really much healthier' is awkward; use 'much healthier' or 'really healthier'. Add commas to separate clauses and list items.