Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'favour' -> 'favourite', 'create' -> 'makes'). Remove filler sounds. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: My favourite food is sushi because it reminds me of my mother making it at home and it is healthy. For example, she often makes sushi for us on weekends, and I especially like the fresh fish and vinegared rice.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and give a clear topic sentence followed by a specific reason and brief example. Replace fillers and correct grammar (e.g., 'I liked porridge', 'when I was sick', 'my mother always cooked'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: When I was young, I liked porridge because it helped me recover when I was ill. For example, my mother used to cook rice porridge with shredded chicken as a topping, which always made me feel stronger.

Sugestão: Answer the general question first (yes/no or short statement), then give a clear, specific example about seasonal changes. Avoid irrelevant timing details and correct grammar (e.g., 'in June', 'it tasted bland', 'I needed something I could chew'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'in summer'.

Exemplo: Yes, I do eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in June I preferred steak because I needed something hearty and easy to chew, while in colder months I usually enjoy warm soups and rice dishes.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence comparing past and present tastes, then add a specific reason using correct grammar and linking words like 'but' or 'because'. Avoid awkward phrases like 'rich of protein' and 'like in my stomach'.

Exemplo: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I used to prefer porridge because it helped me recover my energy when I was ill, but now I prefer sushi because it is nutritious and high in protein, and I enjoy how light it feels in my stomach.

× I absolutely favor sushi because it reminds me how my mother made sushi with her hand and it's nutritious.

✓ I absolutely favor sushi because it reminds me of how my mother made sushi by hand and it's nutritious.

Use 'reminds me of' (phrasal verb requires 'of') and prefer 'by hand' rather than 'with her hand' for natural English.

× Uh, usually at the weekend my mother create the sushi for myself, so I got the.

✓ Usually at the weekend my mother created the sushi for me, so I got it.

Context indicates habitual past; 'create' should be past 'created'. Use object pronoun 'me' not 'myself' and add missing object 'it'.

× I like porridge because, uh, it helps me a lot when I got sick.

✓ I liked porridge because, uh, it helped me a lot when I got sick.

Question asked about childhood (past), so verbs should be past: 'like'->'liked', 'helps'->'helped'. 'got sick' is correct past.

× When I sick, my mother always cook the porridge with the chicken as the topping and it uh, it returns my energy.

✓ When I was sick, my mother always cooked porridge with chicken as a topping and it restored my energy.

Past context requires 'was sick' and past 'cooked'. 'Porridge' can be uncountable without 'the', 'chicken' without 'the', 'a topping' is correct, and 'restored' fits past meaning better than 'returns'.

× Absolutely yes. Three months ago I went with my friends to the sushi bar to eat sushi because I felt it like something like undelicious at the June.

✓ Absolutely. Three months ago I went with my friends to a sushi bar to eat sushi because I felt it was unappetizing in June.

Remove redundant 'yes', use article 'a sushi bar', change 'felt it like something like undelicious' to 'felt it was unappetizing' for natural phrasing, and use 'in June' not 'at the June'.

× I ate steak because I need something that I can chew.

✓ I ate steak because I needed something that I could chew.

Past context requires past verbs: 'need'->'needed' and 'can'->'could'.

× Yes, I used to be eat porridge because it assist me to recover my energy but now I prefer sushi because it's nutritious and rich of protein and also like in my stomach.

✓ Yes, I used to eat porridge because it helped me recover my energy, but now I prefer sushi because it's nutritious, high in protein, and feels good in my stomach.

Correct 'used to eat' (remove extra 'be'), change 'assist me to recover' to 'helped me recover' for natural past phrasing, use 'high in protein' instead of 'rich of protein', and 'feels good in my stomach' is natural instead of 'like in my stomach'.