Food— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise, use correct grammar and clear organization: start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

Exemplo: I especially like sushi. It is a traditional Japanese dish and I enjoy it because the fish is very fresh and the flavors are delicate. For example, I often eat sushi at family gatherings because it’s both tasty and easy to share.

Sugestão: Remove hesitations and unclear words; give a clear topic sentence and a reason with a specific example. Use correct tense and simple linking words like 'because' or 'when'.

Exemplo: When I was a child I loved ramen. I often went to a small ramen shop near my house because the soup was rich and my parents took me there every weekend.

Sugestão: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and give a brief reason and an example. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to make your response coherent.

Exemplo: No, I usually don’t change my diet with the seasons because I prefer familiar foods. For example, even in summer I still eat sushi and ramen rather than seasonal dishes.

Sugestão: Be specific about change or stability. Give a clear statement and support it with brief details or examples. Use past and present tenses correctly and avoid trailing off.

Exemplo: Yes, my tastes have changed somewhat. As a child I preferred simple flavors, but by junior high I started enjoying a wider variety of foods such as spicy and sour dishes, so my favorite foods became more diverse.

× I have a lot of my favorite food, but especially I like sushi.

✓ I have many favorite foods, but I especially like sushi.

The original uses awkward pronoun ownership and singular/plural forms. 'A lot of my favorite food' is unnatural; use 'many favorite foods' for countable items. Move 'especially' before the verb phrase for correct adverb placement. Also use 'I especially like' rather than 'especially I like' for natural word order.

× Sushi is traditional food in Japan and sometimes I eat them we as a party and my body, yeah, and it is so good taste and fresh.

✓ Sushi is a traditional food in Japan, and sometimes I eat it at parties; it tastes very good and is fresh.

Multiple issues: article needed ('a traditional food'), pronoun agreement ('sushi' is treated as an uncountable or singular noun so use 'it' not 'them'), preposition and phrase errors ('at parties' instead of 'we as a party'), and adjective/adverb order ('tastes very good' and 'is fresh'). Combine clauses with commas/semicolons for clarity.

× We can eat fresh fish.

✓ We can eat fresh fish.

This sentence is grammatical; no change needed. It correctly uses 'fresh' to modify 'fish' and the modal 'can' for ability or possibility.

× Uh, when I, when, when I say Buchanan, uh, I was, I liked, uh, lemon when I was child, uh, because my, I had, uh, my favorite place, favorite ramen shop in nearby my house.

✓ When I was a child, I liked lemon because my favorite ramen shop was near my house.

The original has word order and tense problems. Use 'When I was a child' (correct article and noun order). 'Liked' is past tense and correct; 'was near my house' uses past tense 'was' for location. Remove extraneous words and correct 'in nearby my house' to 'near my house'.

× Ah, but I don't eat different food at different times of the year because I'm I dislike changes and so I my friend I only eat my favorite food on each times.

✓ I don't eat different foods at different times of the year because I dislike changes, and my friends and I only eat our favorite foods at those times.

Fix pluralization ('different foods') and quantifier/phrase ('at different times of the year'). Correct pronouns and agreement: 'my friends and I' and 'our favorite foods'. Replace 'on each times' with 'at those times'. Remove duplicated words and unnecessary 'I'm'.

× So I didn't I I don't eat different foods.

✓ So I don't eat different foods.

The sentence mixes past and present negatives. Keep present tense consistent with previous sentence: 'I don't eat different foods.' Remove duplicated words and the incorrect past negative 'didn't'.

× I can't say accuracy, but maybe I have changed my favorite, My favorite tend to uh, taste uh, I think when I was junior high school student, I can I can eat a lot many foods more than my.

✓ I can't say for sure, but my favorites have changed. My tastes tend to... I think when I was a junior high school student, I could eat many more foods than I can now.

Multiple issues: use 'for sure' rather than 'accuracy'; 'have changed' (present perfect) indicates change up to now. 'Tastes' (noun) instead of 'favorite' in that clause. Use 'could' for past ability (modal past) and 'many more foods' for correct quantifier and word order. Add 'now' for comparison. Correct 'junior high school student' with article 'a'.