Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 「No, not really.」のように直接答えた後、歩かない理由と普段の選択を簡潔に説明してください。「work」は文脈上「walk」または「exercise」の誤りと思われます。また、「work is a type of water」は意味が不明確なので削除し、「I’d rather...」を使って自然に好みを述べましょう。内容を2〜3文に整理し、becauseやinsteadなどの linking words を使うと、より効果的です。

Exemplo: No, not really. I’m often too busy with work, so I usually take public transport instead of walking. When I have free time, I’d rather stay home and take a nap.

Sugestão: 過去の習慣について聞かれているため、「No, I didn’t」を最初に置き、過去形を一貫して使ってください。「my life has been occupied」はこの文脈では不自然なので、「I was busy with...」と表現できます。また、「outdoor lessons」と「not healthy」の関係が不明確です。歩く機会が少なかった具体的な理由を1つ述べ、becauseやsoでつなげましょう。

Exemplo: No, I didn’t walk outside very often when I was a child. I was busy with school and extracurricular lessons, so I usually spent my free time studying or relaxing at home. I only went outside for special activities with my family.

Sugestão: 「I’m not a park person」は自然ですが、「I have no idea」と矛盾しないように、一般的な理由を2つ挙げてください。「switch their environment」は「change their surroundings」、「somewhere no one can disturb」は「a peaceful place where they won’t be disturbed」が自然です。長くつながった文を分け、for exampleやalsoを使って具体性と明確さを高めましょう。

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they offer a peaceful environment away from traffic and noise. Walking among trees can also help people relax and reduce stress. For example, some people go to a park after work to clear their minds.

Sugestão: 質問は「どこで歩きたいか」を尋ねていますが、現在の回答は歩きたくない理由に偏っているため、まず「I wouldn’t really choose to take a long walk」と直接答え、その後に代案や具体的な場所を述べるとよいでしょう。「long walk」は可算名詞なので「a long walk」、「It always made me」は一般的な習慣なら「It always makes me」とします。「no hope for my whole journey」は不自然なので、「I get tired before I reach my destination」と表現できます。

Exemplo: I wouldn’t normally choose to take a very long walk because I get tired easily. However, if I had the chance, I’d walk along the waterfront in Sydney, where I could enjoy the views and stop at cafés along the way. I’d prefer a short, scenic walk rather than a difficult hike.

Sugestão: 最近の具体的な出来事を聞かれているので、場所・時期・目的を明確に述べてください。「go to a world」「work together with the other」は意味が伝わりにくいため、「go for a walk」「show them around」と言い換えます。「other than that」などのつなぎ方を整理し、暑さを理由として最後に加えると自然です。少なくとも1つの実際の場所を挙げることで、内容の具体性が大きく改善します。

Exemplo: The last time I went for a walk was a few weeks ago in Hong Kong. Some friends were visiting, so I showed them around the waterfront and a nearby shopping area. It was very hot, but we enjoyed the views and stopped for drinks along the way.

× I don't think so when I was a child, my life has been occupied by a lot of different outdoor lessons and I need to use my time to study more than enjoy working outside.

✓ I don't think so. When I was a child, my life was occupied by a lot of different outdoor lessons, and I needed to use my time to study rather than enjoy working outside.

Use was occupied and needed because the speaker is describing a past period. The expression study rather than enjoy also creates a clearer parallel structure. For past experiences, make sure all related verbs are consistently in the past tense.

× I don't think so when I was a child, my life has been occupied by a lot of different outdoor lessons and I need to use my time to study more than enjoy working outside.

✓ I don't think so. When I was a child, my life was occupied by a lot of different outdoor lessons, and I needed to use my time to study rather than enjoy working outside.

The present perfect has been occupied and the present-tense verb need do not fit the specific past time expression when I was a child. Use the simple past: was occupied and needed.

× Actually, I have no idea about that because I'm not a part person, but maybe they just want to switch their environment to somewhere no one can disturb and just to stay staring at something and doing nothing for a whole day which is already relaxing.

✓ Actually, I have no idea about that because I'm not an outdoor person. Maybe they just want to change their environment to somewhere where no one can disturb them, stare at something, and do nothing for a whole day, which they find relaxing.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined together without a clear structure. Dividing it into two sentences and using parallel verbs—stare and do—makes the sentence easier to understand. Use where after somewhere when referring to a place.

× Actually, I have no idea about that because I'm not a part person, but maybe they just want to switch their environment to somewhere no one can disturb and just to stay staring at something and doing nothing for a whole day which is already relaxing.

✓ Actually, I have no idea about that because I'm not an outdoor person. Maybe they just want to change their environment to somewhere where no one can disturb them, stare at something, and do nothing for a whole day, which they find relaxing.

The verb disturb needs an object. Use them to refer to the people who want to relax. When a pronoun receives the action of a verb, use the object form, such as them rather than they.

× No, I really hate long walk.

✓ No, I really hate long walks.

The noun walk is countable. Because the speaker is talking about long walks in general, use the plural form walks. Use a singular noun only when referring to one specific walk, such as a long walk.

× I'm not the type of person that would like to go hiking and that I don't like to take long walk without any transportation.

✓ I'm not the type of person who likes to go hiking, and I don't like to take long walks without any transportation.

The original sentence incorrectly repeats the relative-clause structure with and that. Use who likes to describe the person, then begin a separate clause with I don't like. This produces a clear and grammatical sentence structure.

× I'm not the type of person that would like to go hiking and that I don't like to take long walk without any transportation.

✓ I'm not the type of person who likes to go hiking, and I don't like to take long walks without any transportation.

Use the plural noun walks when speaking generally about taking walks. Also, the relative pronoun who is more appropriate for a person than that in this sentence.

× It always made me feel like no hope for my whole journey and made me even want to give up at the beginning.

✓ It always makes me feel as if there is no hope for the whole journey and makes me want to give up at the beginning.

The adverb always describes a general or repeated feeling, so use the present tense makes rather than the past tense made. The phrase as if there is no hope is also needed to complete the comparison grammatically.

× It always made me feel like no hope for my whole journey and made me even want to give up at the beginning.

✓ It always makes me feel as if there is no hope for the whole journey and makes me want to give up at the beginning.

The noun hope needs a grammatical structure showing that it exists or does not exist. Use there is no hope. Remember to use there is or there are when introducing the existence or absence of something.

× I don't like to go to a world. It's only the case maybe my friends come to Hong Kong and I need to be a tour guide and I definitely need to work together with the other than that I don't want to go outside at all, outside is super hot.

✓ I don't like to go for walks. The only time I do so is when my friends come to Hong Kong and I need to be their tour guide. Apart from that, I don't want to go outside at all because it is super hot outside.

Use walks in the plural when discussing the activity in general. The pronoun their is also needed before tour guide because the guide is for the speaker's friends. Separating the ideas into sentences prevents a run-on sentence.

× I don't like to go to a world. It's only the case maybe my friends come to Hong Kong and I need to be a tour guide and I definitely need to work together with the other than that I don't want to go outside at all, outside is super hot.

✓ I don't like to go for walks. The only time I do so is when my friends come to Hong Kong and I need to be their tour guide. Apart from that, I don't want to go outside at all because it is super hot outside.

The original response is a run-on sentence with several incomplete or incorrectly connected clauses. Use The only time I do so is when to introduce the condition, and use Apart from that to introduce the exception. Clear sentence boundaries will make the answer more natural and accurate.