Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문법과 의미 전달이 혼동되어 있습니다. ‘work’와 ‘walk’가 혼용되어 있어 정확한 단어 선택이 필요합니다. 응답은 직접적으로 질문에 답하는 주제문으로 시작하고, 한두 문장의 구체적이고 관련된 세부사항(예: 얼마나 자주, 주로 어디를 걷는지)을 연결어로 덧붙이세요. 문장은 최대 5문장으로 자연스럽고 간결하게 유지하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk quite often, especially when the weather is nice. For example, I usually take a 30-minute walk around my neighborhood in the mornings to get some fresh air and exercise. I find walking helps me feel more energetic and clear-headed for the day.

Sugestão: 문장 구조가 어색하고 시제 사용이 혼재되어 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. ‘Guess what’ 같은 구어체는 피하고, 과거 시제로 직접 답하세요. 장소와 활동(누구와, 무엇을 했는지)을 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어(ifnecessary) 또는 이유를 적절히 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because the Han River was behind my house. I used to go there with my friends to talk and play, and sometimes we had picnics by the water. It was a favorite place for us to spend free afternoons.

Sugestão: 아이디어는 괜찮지만 표현이 부정확하고 단어 선택이 어색합니다. 이유를 두세 개 제시할 때는 연결어(first, also, finally)를 사용하고 각각을 구체적으로 서술하세요. ‘sound and noise’처럼 중복되는 표현을 피하고 더 적절한 어휘(예: peaceful sounds, fresh air)를 사용하세요.

Exemplo: In my opinion, people like walking in parks because they offer peaceful sounds like birds singing and leaves rustling. Also, parks have fresh air and green scenery, which help people relax and reduce stress. Finally, parks provide open space for exercise and socializing.

Sugestão: 문법(조건문과 관사)과 단어 선택('work' 대신 'walk')이 틀렸습니다. 가정문은 정확하게 만들고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 어떤 풍경을 보고 싶은지, 어떤 활동을 할지). 또한 ‘Central Park’에 대해 알고 있는 구체적 정보나 기대를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Central Park in New York. I would walk for more than two hours to enjoy the various landscapes, such as the lakes, open lawns, and tree-lined paths. I also want to see famous spots like the Bethesda Fountain and relax in a lively urban green space.

Sugestão: 응답이 모호하고 문법(부정문, 전치사, 동사 형태)이 정확하지 않습니다. 최근 행동에 대해 말할 때는 현재완료 또는 단순과거 시제를 적절히 사용하고, 구체적인 빈도와 경로를 명확히 하세요. 예를 들어 언제, 얼마나 자주, 어느 경로로 걸었는지를 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: Lately I haven't had much free time, so my walks have been short. For example, I often walk to the nearby library and then walk back home, which takes about 10 minutes each way. I hope to find more time for longer walks soon.

× Yes, I love working when it is sunny. I always try to work a lot around my town.

✓ Yes, I love walking when it is sunny. I always try to walk a lot around my town.

The student used the noun/gerund 'working' which changes the meaning (working = doing a job). The question is about walking, so 'walking' is correct. Use the base verb with -ing to describe habitual activities in present tense. Suggestion: replace 'working' with 'walking' to match meaning and context.

× Guess what, I was a little there is Han River behind my home. That's why when, uh, when it is my free time, I go out to Han River and talking to my friends and working along the river and so on.

✓ Guess what, I was a little child and there is the Han River behind my home. That's why when I had free time, I went out to the Han River, talked to my friends, and walked along the river, and so on.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'I was a little' is incomplete; we need 'a little child' (noun). Mixing present 'there is Han River' with past narrative is incorrect; use 'there is the Han River' for location or keep past consistently. Free time in past should be 'had free time'. Actions in past should be simple past: 'went', 'talked', 'walked' (not 'talking' or 'working'). Also add definite article 'the' before 'Han River'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct noun phrases.

× In my opinion, first to sound there is a lot of sound and noise like singing birds and the windy and the dancing leaves.

✓ In my opinion, firstly there are a lot of sounds and noises like singing birds, the wind, and dancing leaves.

Word choice and countability: 'sound' and 'noise' should be plural 'sounds and noises' when referring to multiple sources. 'The windy' is incorrect; use 'the wind' (noun). 'First to' is awkward; use 'firstly' or 'first'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'there are' for plural. Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct noun forms and order.

× If I had chance, then I'd go to the Central Park in New York and work several times over 2 hours because I heard that there is a great park and symbol to the New York.

✓ If I had the chance, I'd go to Central Park in New York and walk for more than two hours because I heard that it is a great park and a symbol of New York.

Articles and word choice: add 'the' before 'chance'. 'Central Park' does not need 'the' in this context; 'the Central Park' is acceptable but common usage is 'Central Park'. 'Work' is wrong meaning; use 'walk'. 'Several times over 2 hours' is unclear; use 'for more than two hours'. 'There is a great park and symbol to the New York' needs correction: use 'it is a great park and a symbol of New York' and remove unnecessary 'the' before 'New York'. Suggestion: correct articles and idiomatic prepositions ('of' not 'to').

× These days I have not much time to walk around and take a walk, so lately I've been walking to library and to come back to my home.

✓ These days I do not have much time to walk around, so lately I've been walking to the library and back home.

Use standard negative form 'do not have' rather than 'have not much time'. 'Walk to library' needs the article 'the library'. 'To come back to my home' is awkward; use 'back home'. 'Lately I've been walking' is OK present perfect continuous, but follow with correct objects. Suggestion: use correct negative construction, include articles, and use natural phrasing like 'back home'.