Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and an example. To improve, shorten redundant phrases (e.g., "a lot" repeated), use a linking phrase to connect idea and example, and vary vocabulary (e.g., "many places" → "various places"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and add one specific detail about what you enjoy seeing when walking.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk quite often because I travel to various places. For example, when exploring the streets of Tokyo, I enjoy long walks to browse unique shops and admire traditional architecture and lively street scenes.

Sugestão: Good direct response and reason, but the sentence is long and slightly awkward ("wherein" is formal/inappropriate). Make sentences shorter, use simple linking words ("so", "but", "however"), and add a brief specific example or timeframe to make it more concrete.

Exemplo: Not really. I got tired easily as a child, so walking wasn't a habit. It only became regular in my late teens when I started travelling and exploring cities on foot.

Sugestão: Strong answer: clear topic sentence, supporting details and a personal example. To reach higher score, use more varied vocabulary (e.g., "tranquil", "lush greenery") and a linking word to show consequence (e.g., "therefore"). Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition of "relax and unwind."

Exemplo: People often walk in parks because of the tranquil atmosphere and lush greenery. Therefore, the shade from tall trees and quiet paths make it easy to de-stress; for example, I go to parks when I need some peaceful alone time.

Sugestão: Clear and relevant reply with reason. Improve fluency by tightening phrasing (e.g., "this atmosphere, mix" → "the mix") and replacing informal words like "this" with precise descriptors. Add one concrete image or activity to make it more vivid.

Exemplo: I'd love to take a long walk in Central Park, New York, because the blend of skyline views and wide green spaces is refreshing. For instance, I would stroll along the reservoir path and sit by the lake to relax after a stressful day.

Sugestão: Good answer with place and reason, but avoid vague words like "this" and "even more relaxing than before." Be specific about time and name or describe the park briefly. Use a linking word to connect weather and effect.

Exemplo: My most recent walk was last weekend in a park near my home in Sydney that overlooks a small lake. Because the breeze made the air cooler, the walk felt especially refreshing and relaxing.

× For instance, when I'm exploring the streets of Japan, I like to take long walks to pass by all the stores and the scenery that it offers.

✓ For instance, when I'm exploring the streets of Japan, I like to take long walks to pass by all the stores and the scenery that they offer.

The pronoun 'it' refers back to 'stores and the scenery', which is plural (two items). Use the plural pronoun 'they' to match the plural antecedent and maintain correct pronoun-antecedent agreement. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they replace.

× Not really, I used to get tired easily when I was a child so it wasn't a habit I built until I started to travel frequently wherein I like to explore places on foot.

✓ Not really. I used to get tired easily when I was a child, so it wasn't a habit I built until I started to travel frequently, when I began to explore places on foot.

The original sentence is long and uses 'wherein' incorrectly for a time/condition clause. 'Wherein' is formal and refers to 'in which' locations; here 'when' or 'whereas' is appropriate. Also comma and sentence boundary improve clarity. Suggestion: split complex thoughts into clauses with correct conjunctions ('so', 'when') and use 'when I began' to match past-tense narrative.

× I think people enjoy walking in parks due to its calm and soothing atmosphere.

✓ I think people enjoy walking in parks due to their calm and soothing atmosphere.

The noun 'parks' is plural, so the possessive pronoun should be 'their' not 'its'. Use pronouns that agree in number with their antecedents. Suggestion: check whether the noun is singular or plural before choosing 'its' or 'their'.

× Parks have tall trees and a lot of green, so it makes the place more peaceful and quiet.

✓ Parks have tall trees and a lot of greenery, so they make the place more peaceful and quiet.

There are two issues: 'a lot of green' is nonstandard; 'greenery' or 'green spaces' is correct. Also the subject is 'parks' (plural), so the verb should be 'they make' rather than 'it makes'. Suggestion: use 'greenery' for vegetation and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× For instance, I like hanging out in parks when I want some alone time to relax and unwind.

✓ For instance, I like hanging out in parks when I want some alone time to relax and unwind.

No grammatical error detected that matches the provided list. Sentence is correct as written. Included for completeness.

× If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in Central Park in New York. I like it because it offers this atmosphere, mix of city buildings and nature, which helps me relax and unwind from a particularly hard day.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in Central Park in New York. I like it because it offers a mix of city buildings and nature, which helps me relax and unwind after a particularly hard day.

The phrase 'offers this atmosphere, mix of city buildings and nature' is awkward; 'a mix of city buildings and nature' is idiomatic. Also 'from a particularly hard day' is less natural than 'after a particularly hard day' to indicate recovery. Suggestion: use 'a mix of' and preposition 'after' for temporal recovery.

× My most recent walk was back in Sydney. I went to this nearby park overlooking a lake so the weather was cooler and it made the exercise even more relaxing than before.

✓ My most recent walk was in Sydney. I went to a nearby park overlooking a lake, so the weather was cooler and it made the exercise even more relaxing than usual.

Use 'in Sydney' rather than 'back in Sydney' unless contrasting with elsewhere; 'this nearby park' is conversational but 'a nearby park' is more natural. Also 'than before' is vague; 'than usual' fits better. Suggestion: choose prepositions that match location ('in') and use clearer comparative phrases.