Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small errors (place names and article use). Use one clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundant phrases like “as a matter of fact” and repeated city names.

Exemplo: Yes — I walk a lot. I live in Thanwandi, a very crowded neighborhood of Dhaka, so walking is my main way to get around. For example, walking helps me avoid traffic jams and usually gets me to appointments on time.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence, reduce repetition, and correct minor grammar (double 'and'). Add a specific brief example or time phrase to make it vivid.

Exemplo: No, I didn't walk much as a child. Because we had a family car and my parents worried about safety, I only walked when nearby places were within a few minutes’ distance or when traffic made driving impractical.

Sugestão: Give a concise topic sentence, avoid words like “solely” when listing multiple reasons, and use clearer linking words. Provide one concrete specific benefit (e.g., fresh air, exercise) and a short example of social interaction or safety.

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because of the pleasant atmosphere and the chance to meet others. For instance, parks offer fresh air and greenery, and many walkers chat or join group jogs, which also feels safer than walking on busy roads.

Sugestão: Use one clear topic sentence and avoid repetition (‘especially when… when’). Fix the final incomplete phrase. Add a brief specific image or reason to make the answer more vivid and grammatical.

Exemplo: I would walk along a quiet beach, preferably at sunrise when it's peaceful. The sound of waves and the open view help me relax and forget the stress of a busy schedule.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct past-tense topic sentence, correct place name and complete the final clause. Keep it concise and add one specific detail about the walk or the friend to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: Recently I walked in a nearby park that is well known in Dhaka. A friend had just returned from abroad, so we walked together for over an hour while she told me about her trip.

× Yes, I do walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

Using 'do' for emphasis is unnecessary in simple present answers. Native speakers typically say 'Yes, I walk a lot.' Remove the auxiliary 'do' unless you want strong contrast or emphasis.

× As a matter of fact, that is my main means of transportation since the place where I live in Dhaka, Thanwandi.

✓ As a matter of fact, walking is my main means of transportation because I live in Thanwandi, Dhaka.

The original sentence has awkward structure and redundancy ('the place where I live in Dhaka, Thanwandi'). Recast to put the subject 'walking' and give a clear reason with 'because'. Place location as 'Thanwandi, Dhaka' for clarity.

× It's one of the most crowded areas of Taka city, the capital city, and so walking is the best way to avoid any sort of traffic jam and arriving to places on time and being punctual.

✓ It's one of the most crowded areas of Dhaka, the capital city, so walking is the best way to avoid traffic jams and arrive at places on time.

Use 'traffic jams' (plural) and parallel verb forms: 'avoid' and 'arrive' rather than mixing 'avoid' and 'arriving'. Also 'Taka' is likely a misspelling of 'Dhaka'. 'Being punctual' is redundant after 'arrive on time', so remove it for conciseness.

× No, when I was a child I usually didn't go out to walk that often since we had a car and our parents did not really let us go out on the streets alone due to safety concerns and and therefore we walked only when there was a lot of traffic or the place we had to go to was very nearby.

✓ No. When I was a child, I usually didn't go out to walk because we had a car and our parents didn't let us go out on the streets alone for safety reasons, so we only walked when there was heavy traffic or when our destination was very nearby.

Maintain past tense consistently ('didn't', 'didn't let', 'walked'). Remove duplicate 'and'. Use 'because' or 'for' to clarify reasons ('for safety reasons'). Use 'heavy traffic' for naturalness and parallel clauses ('only walked' with conditions).

× The reason why people like to walk in parks is solely because the ambience of the environment and also because there are a lot of other people who come to visit the park and this allows them to socialize and make friends during walking or jogging.

✓ People like to walk in parks mainly because of the pleasant ambience and because many other people visit the park, which allows them to socialize and make friends while walking or jogging.

'Solely because the ambience of the environment' is ungrammatical—use 'because of the pleasant ambience'. Improve pronoun reference by using 'which' to refer to many visitors. Use 'while' to indicate simultaneous activity.

× And not only that, walking parks is also safer in a sense that they do not need to walk on roads with cars.

✓ Also, walking in parks is safer because you do not need to walk on roads with cars.

Use the phrase 'walking in parks' rather than 'walking parks'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'walking in parks is' (singular gerund phrase). Replace 'in a sense that' with clearer 'because'.

× If I had the chance to take a long walk, it would probably be along the sides of the beach or the shore and especially when it's quiet and when it's not crowded since it puts my mind at ease and it's very peaceful and I love the ambience.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, it would probably be along the beach or the shore, especially when it's quiet and not crowded, because it puts my mind at ease; it's very peaceful and I love the ambience.

Simplify 'along the sides of the beach' to 'along the beach'. Use commas for clarity and maintain parallelism ('quiet and not crowded'). Use 'because' to link reason. No tense change needed.

× Not only that, since I'm a beach person, it really helps me relax and distract me from my busy.

✓ Also, since I'm a beach person, it really helps me relax and distracts me from my busy life.

Original mixes verb forms: 'helps me relax and distract me' should be parallel: 'helps me relax and distracts me' or better 'helps me relax and distracts me from my busy life.' Add noun 'life' after 'busy' for completeness.

× Lately I went for a walk to the nearby park which is one of the most famous parks of Taka City and it was with one of my friends who came from abroad very recently and I wanted to talk to her for a very long time and hear stories from her and so we decided to take a long.

✓ Lately I went for a walk to the nearby park, which is one of the most famous parks of Dhaka City, with a friend who recently came from abroad. I had wanted to talk to her for a long time and hear her stories, so we decided to take a long walk.

Use past simple consistently ('went', 'came', 'wanted', 'decided'). Place modifiers ('with a friend') in a clear position. Correct 'Taka' to 'Dhaka' and complete the final phrase to 'take a long walk'. Split into shorter sentences for clarity.