Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant phrases and incorrect collocations (e.g. “go for just walking”, “cover up all of my walking”), and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also check numbers—1000–1500 steps is low; clarify if you mean per activity or per day.

Exemplo: No, I don't walk much. I usually play football with my friends at the weekend, so that is my main exercise. As a result, I only walk about 1,000 to 1,500 steps on typical weekdays.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and tidy up the description. Use precise language for distance and avoid hesitations. Add a linking word to show contrast between past and present.

Exemplo: Not very often, but sometimes. For example, my father, brother and I often walked about two kilometres each evening after dinner, which I really enjoyed. However, I rarely go for walks like that now.

Sugestão: Be more concise and use linking words to organise ideas. Remove fillers (uh) and provide specific reasons with examples or results to support your points.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because they are peaceful and help relieve stress. In addition, parks are quieter than busy streets, so walkers can relax or talk with friends without being disturbed.

Sugestão: Be clearer and avoid awkward phrases (e.g. “go for a walk with another”, “release that memory”). Start with a direct statement naming the place, then explain why using coherent linking words and one specific memory or feeling.

Exemplo: If I could, I would take a long walk around the GH6 circle, which is about two kilometres from here. I chose that place because I have fond memories of walking there with a close friend when we were younger, and it would be nice to relive those moments.

Sugestão: Provide a clear past-tense account with one or two specific details. Avoid vague phrases (“we don't know, we just out”) and fill the answer with a linking word to explain purpose or what you did.

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk in the GH4 garden with my friend Abhiraj. We walked slowly and talked about our studies to relax and catch up.

× No, I usually don't go for just walking.

✓ No, I usually don't go for walks.

The phrase 'go for walking' is incorrect; English uses 'go for a walk' or 'go for walks'. Use the noun 'walk' with 'go for' or the gerund with 'going for a walk'. Change to 'go for walks' to match the habitual action described.

× I occasionally play football with my friends at the weekends and so that I try to cover up all of my walking at once and usually I have around 1000 to 1500 steps in a day.

✓ I occasionally play football with my friends on weekends, so I try to do most of my walking then; usually I have around 1,000 to 1,500 steps a day.

Use 'on weekends' rather than 'at the weekends' for general habitual actions. 'So that I try to cover up all of my walking at once' is awkward; use 'so I try to do most of my walking then'. Use numerals with commas for clarity. This corrects preposition and sentence structure to make the meaning clear.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The question is mostly correct, but 'go outside for a walk' is the natural phrasing. This keeps the simple past question form appropriate for childhood habits.

× Not often, but sometimes.

✓ Not often, but sometimes I did.

The original fragment is acceptable in spoken English, but adding 'I did' completes the sentence and clarifies the past reference.

× I remember that I used to go out for a walk at night after my dinner with my brother and my father.

✓ I remember that I used to go out for a walk at night after dinner with my brother and my father.

'Often' is fine omitted; 'after my dinner' is wordy—use 'after dinner'. The past habitual 'used to' is correct for past repeated actions.

× We used to have a walk at almost like 2 kilometers, no, almost like 4 kilometers, 2 kilometers going and coming.

✓ We used to walk almost 4 kilometers in total: about 2 kilometers each way.

Phrases like 'at almost like' are ungrammatical. Express distance clearly: 'almost 4 kilometers in total' and '2 kilometers each way' clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× And I used to enjoy that, but now no.

✓ I used to enjoy that, but not anymore.

'But now no' is ungrammatical in this context. Use 'but not anymore' to indicate a change from past habit to present.

× People like to walk in parks because it's a very calm place to relax, to relieve the, any stress that you have, that people mind their own business.

✓ People like to walk in parks because they are calm places to relax and relieve stress; people mind their own business there.

Pronoun reference and singular/plural agreement: 'parks' plural requires 'they are' and 'places'. Remove filler 'the, any' and streamline to 'relieve stress'. Break into clearer clauses to fix sentence structure.

× They don't, uh, disturb anyone and, uh, atmosphere there is nice in comparison to other places.

✓ They don't disturb anyone, and the atmosphere there is nicer compared to other places.

Insert definite article 'the atmosphere' and use comparative 'nicer' when comparing. Remove hesitations 'uh' and place adverb 'compared' properly for grammatical clarity.

× If I had the chance, I would like to go for a walk with another at the GH6 circle which is almost 2 kilometers far from here, because I want to release that memory that I used to walk with him when we were younger and which I used to love.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go for a walk with him at the GH6 circle, which is almost 2 kilometers from here, because I want to relive the memories of walking with him when we were younger, which I used to love.

Use 'him' instead of 'another' to refer to a specific person. 'Almost 2 kilometers far from here' should be 'almost 2 kilometers from here'. 'Release that memory' is incorrect; use 'relive the memories' to express revisiting past experiences. Clean up relative clauses for clarity.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' and 'recently' are similar; 'recently' is more natural in questions with 'did' in many varieties of English. Both can be acceptable; this change is stylistic to fit the simple past question form.

× Lately I went for a walk at the GH4 garden with my friend Abhiraj.

✓ Recently I went for a walk in the GH4 garden with my friend Abhiraj.

Use 'in the GH4 garden' rather than 'at the GH4 garden' for location inside a garden. 'Recently' fits the past action. Definite article 'the' is appropriate with a named garden.

× We were just talking. We met to relax and we don't know, we just out.

✓ We were just talking. We met to relax, and we were just out.

'We don't know, we just out' is ungrammatical. Use past continuous/past simple consistent tense: 'we were just out' or 'we were just hanging out' to convey the intended meaning. 'Met to relax' is fine; combine clauses for clarity.