Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid unnecessary repetition and correct basic errors (e.g., "I was six" not "at the age of 6", "I have ankle pain" not "a my ankle pain").

Exemplo: No, I don't walk a lot these days. I used to walk long distances as a child — for example, I walked about three kilometres to school when I was six — and that led to chronic ankle pain, so now I avoid long walks.

Sugestão: Organise into a clear topic sentence plus specific supporting details. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) correctly and correct grammar (past tense: "I often had to walk"). Remove unclear phrases ("So for easy please to go any other").

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked as a child because I grew up in a small village in eastern Nepal. There were no cars or public buses, so I usually had to walk to school and to visit friends, which made walking a normal part of daily life.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and then two specific reasons with examples. Use correct grammar ("People like", "mentally and physically"). Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid vague phrases like "any other thing."

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because it benefits both their physical and mental health. For example, walking improves cardiovascular fitness and reduces stress, and many people also enjoy the fresh air and peaceful scenery, so parks are popular places to exercise and relax.

Sugestão: Respond with a concise topic sentence naming the place, then give specific reasons and correct tense/word choice ("trekking", "one of my dreams"). Be precise about distance and use linking words (because, so). Avoid fillers like "umm" and grammar errors ("I live to see" → "I would love to see").

Exemplo: I would like to trek the Mardi Himal if I had the chance because my friends recommend it and it is a beautiful mountain route. The trek is about 80 kilometres, and I would love the challenge and the chance to enjoy the scenery and fresh mountain air.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear past tense topic sentence naming the place and when you went. Provide two specific details (distance walked, what you enjoyed) using correct grammar ("outside the valley of Kathmandu", "I walked six or seven kilometres"). Avoid unclear expressions ("woke once again", "the plea the day").

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk in Chitlang, a village outside the Kathmandu valley. I walked about six or seven kilometres that day and enjoyed the peaceful countryside and fresh air, which made me feel refreshed.

× To be honest, I really don't walk that much.

✓ To be honest, I don't walk that much.

The original sentence used a contraction 'don't' correctly but included 'really' which adds emphasis but is not incorrect; however for clarity and natural speech 'I don't walk that much' is preferable. Keep present simple to describe habitual action.

× I have walked enough in my childhood days, travelling 3 kilometres when I was at the age of 6 just to go to school.

✓ I walked a lot during my childhood, travelling 3 kilometres when I was six just to go to school.

Use simple past ('walked') to describe a specific past period ('childhood' and age six). 'Have walked' (present perfect) is inappropriate because it links past actions to the present. Also simplify 'at the age of 6' to 'when I was six.'

× That makes me still tired and exhausted till now and I kind of have a my ankle pain also so I do not walk that much.

✓ That still makes me tired and exhausted, and I also have ankle pain, so I don't walk much.

Maintain present simple for a current state ('makes me tired'). Remove redundant words ('a my') and correct word order. Use 'I don't walk much' for habitual negation.

× Yes, 'cause I grew up in a small village called Cadbury in the east side of Nepal.

✓ Yes, because I grew up in a small village called Cadbury on the east side of Nepal.

'Grew up' correctly uses simple past for a past life event. Replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because' for formality and change preposition to 'on the east side.'

× So I often have to walk wherever I have to go because there's no such facilities of car or any public vehicle going from one place to another.

✓ So I often have to walk wherever I go because there are no cars or public vehicles going from one place to another.

Use simple present for habitual action ('I often have to walk' or 'I often walk'). 'There are' matches plural 'cars or public vehicles' (subject-verb agreement). Remove 'such facilities of' which is unidiomatic.

× So for easy please to go any other.

✓ So it's easier to walk to other places.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Recast with clear subject and predicate: 'It's easier to walk to other places.' Use comparative 'easier' and specify 'to other places.'

× So it's easy to walk.

✓ So it's easy to walk there.

Add 'there' to clarify location. Keep present simple describing a general truth.

× People likes to walk in parks because of the physical benefits also mentally and physically it helps people for their health issues or any other thing.

✓ People like to walk in parks because of the physical and mental benefits; it helps their health in various ways.

Subject 'People' is plural so use 'like' not 'likes.' Combine and reorder phrases for clarity: 'physical and mental benefits' and use 'their health' instead of 'people for their health issues.'

× I believe that walking can make such a good habit in a person for themselves and most people enjoy walking through so they walk in parks.

✓ I believe walking can become a good habit for a person, and many people enjoy it, so they walk in parks.

Simplify and correct reflexive/confusing wording: use 'become a good habit for a person' and 'many people enjoy it.' Avoid 'for themselves' and 'walking through.'

× If I had the chance to take a long walk, I want to go to the Maudi Himal trigging.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would want to go trekking in the Maudi Himal.

In a hypothetical conditional ('If I had'), use 'would' + base verb in the result clause ('would want'). Use 'trekking' instead of 'trigging' and place 'Maudi Himal' after preposition 'in.'

× Most of my friends are probably suggesting me to go there, so I believe it's one of my hobby or dream to go there while walking along distance of 80 kilometre.

✓ Most of my friends have probably suggested I go there, so I believe it's one of my hobbies or dreams to walk the 80-kilometre route there.

For completed suggestions use present perfect 'have suggested' or simple past 'suggested.' Use correct verb pattern 'suggested I go.' Use plural 'hobbies or dreams' and 'walk the 80-kilometre route' for idiomatic expression.

× The place is not only just of scenery, it's a beautiful and umm good mountains that I live to see there.

✓ The place is not only scenic; it's a beautiful mountainous area that I would love to see.

Correct word choice: 'scenic' instead of 'just of scenery.' Use singular 'area' or 'mountains' consistently and 'would love to see' instead of 'live to see.' Remove filler 'umm.'

× The place where I want to walk lately is called a destination called Chitlang.

✓ The place where I walked recently is a destination called Chitlang.

Use simple past 'walked' for a recent completed action. Remove duplicate 'called' and 'want to walk lately' which mixes tenses; use 'walked recently.'

× It is outside value of Kathmandu.

✓ It is outside the valley of Kathmandu.

Correct noun is 'valley' not 'value,' and use 'outside the valley of Kathmandu' with article 'the.'

× It was one of the best place I've ever been there.

✓ It was one of the best places I've ever been to.

Use plural 'places' with 'one of the' and correct preposition 'been to.' Remove redundant 'there.'

× The nature made me feel woke once again.

✓ The nature made me feel awake once again.

Use 'awake' for the adjective meaning alert. 'Woke' is usually an informal past of 'wake' or an adjective with different meaning. 'Made me feel awake' is natural.

× I've walked around six to seven kilometer the plea the day when I went there.

✓ I walked around six to seven kilometres that day when I went there.

Use simple past 'walked' for a specific past event; 'I've walked' (present perfect) is less appropriate. Use plural 'kilometres' and correct phrase 'that day.' Remove 'the plea.'

× So I think I really love walking there.

✓ So I think I really loved walking there.

If referring to a past visit, use past 'loved.' If speaking generally about present preference, 'I really love walking there' is acceptable; here context refers to a past trip, so use past tense.