Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and finish your ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “greenery” and “greenery of nature” are redundant) and complete your final clause. Use varied vocabulary like “exercise” or “stroll.”

Exemplo: No, I don't walk a lot, but I do try to walk regularly to stay healthy. For example, I often take a 30-minute walk in the morning to get fresh air and enjoy the trees, which helps boost my energy for the day.

Sugestão: Provide a clearer, more relevant answer about walking. The current reply focuses on finances and working rather than walking habits. Begin with a direct topic sentence and then explain how circumstances affected your walking, using linking words and fewer hesitations.

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked as a child. Because my family couldn't afford transport, I walked long distances to school every day, which meant I spent a lot of time outdoors and became used to walking.

Sugestão: Complete your answer and avoid abrupt endings. Give 1–2 clear reasons and connect them with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Be specific about benefits (exercise, relaxation, socializing) and avoid exaggeration or unsupported claims.

Exemplo: People like to walk in parks because they offer greenery and cleaner air, which is healthier than busy streets. Also, parks are peaceful places to relax and exercise, so walking there can reduce stress and improve fitness.

Sugestão: This answer is relevant but a little repetitive. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add a specific reason or personal detail. Replace repeated phrases (e.g., “greenery” and “green space”) with varied vocabulary and keep to 2–3 sentences total.

Exemplo: I'd like to walk around Thakuria Lake near my home because it has lots of trees and peaceful paths. Walking there gives me fresh air and helps me relax, so it's great for both my energy and my mood.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and finish your sentences. Be specific about what you felt or gained from the walk (e.g., relaxed, refreshed, less stressed). Use linking words to sequence events and limit to 2–3 sentences without filler words like “uh.”

Exemplo: Recently I walked at Thakuria Lake with my boyfriend. We spent a quiet hour there, which felt very relaxing, and I returned home feeling refreshed and less stressed.

× Not a lot, but I think I work enough to keep myself healthy.

✓ Not a lot, but I think I walk enough to keep myself healthy.

The student uses 'work' which conflicts with the question about walking. This is a lexical choice tied to present tense meaning; replace with 'walk' to match the intended habitual action. Use simple present for habitual actions.

× I usually work in the morning so that I can take in fresh air and I can also experience the greenery of the nature which can boost my energy and.

✓ I usually walk in the morning so that I can breathe fresh air and enjoy the greenery of nature, which can boost my energy.

Multiple issues: 'work' should be 'walk' to match context (verb choice). 'Take in fresh air' is acceptable but 'breathe fresh air' is more natural. 'Experience the greenery of the nature' is wordy and ungrammatical; use 'enjoy the greenery of nature'. The sentence ended with 'and.' so it was incomplete; finish the clause. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to take a walk when you were a child?

The original question is fine, but 'have a walk' is less natural in many varieties of English; 'take a walk' is the preferred collocation. Keep past tense auxiliary 'did' with base verb 'go'.

× Yeah. When I was a child, the financial condition of my home was not uh, well, so I used to work a lot in order to reach my school. So yes.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, my family's financial situation was not good, so I used to work a lot to get to school.

'The financial condition of my home was not uh, well' is awkward; use 'my family's financial situation was not good.' 'Reach my school' is not idiomatic; use 'get to school.' 'Used to work' is okay for habitual past. Maintain past tense.

× The park provides people with greenery and with fresh oxygen.

✓ The park provides people with greenery and fresh air.

'Fresh oxygen' is unnatural; we usually say 'fresh air.' 'Greenery' is fine as an uncountable noun; remove redundant 'with.'

× Nowadays, pollutions are increasing so much that people are getting diagnosed by several respiratory diseases.

✓ Nowadays, pollution is increasing so much that people are being diagnosed with various respiratory diseases.

'Pollutions' is incorrect; 'pollution' is an uncountable noun. Use present continuous 'is increasing.' 'Getting diagnosed by' is wrong preposition; use 'being diagnosed with.' 'Several' is acceptable but 'various' sounds more natural here.

× To get rid of such diseases, people tend to.

✓ To avoid such diseases, people tend to walk more in parks.

Original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb/complement. Provide a complete structure that fits the context: subject 'people' + verb 'tend to' + verb phrase 'walk more in parks.'

× I would like to take a long walk in Thakuria Lake nearby my house.

✓ I would like to take a long walk at Thakuria Lake near my house.

Use preposition 'at' or 'around' for places like lakes; 'nearby my house' is awkward—use 'near my house.' The conditional 'would like' is appropriate.

× It is a place which is full of greenery and the green space provides fresh air and oxygen which helps to boost energy and keeps the health well.

✓ It is a place full of greenery, and the green space provides fresh air, which helps boost energy and maintain good health.

Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'greenery.' 'Helps to boost energy and keeps the health well' mixes structures; use parallel verbs 'helps boost energy and maintain good health.' 'Oxygen' is not needed after 'fresh air.'

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

The examiner's sentence is fine, but 'lately' is acceptable; 'recently' is slightly more natural with 'did you go.' No grammatical error but 'recently' recommended.

× As I said before, I went for a walk lately at Thakuria Lake with my boyfriend.

✓ As I said before, I recently went for a walk at Thakuria Lake with my boyfriend.

'Went for a walk lately at' is awkward word order; place 'recently' before the verb and use 'at Thakuria Lake.' Maintain past tense.

× We spent some alone time there.

✓ We spent some time alone there.

'Alone time' is acceptable informally, but 'some time alone' is more natural word order: quantifier + noun + adjective.

× It felt really relaxing and calm and I went I came back to home with a lot of.

✓ It felt really relaxing and calm, and I came back home feeling refreshed.

Original contains repetition 'I went I came back to home' and an incomplete ending 'with a lot of.' Fix by combining clauses, remove redundant 'to' before 'home,' and complete idea with 'feeling refreshed.' Use past tense consistently.