Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Keep answers natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), avoid filler words (uh, because repeated), limit length to 2–3 sentences, and add one specific detail. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' correctly.

Exemplo: No, I don’t walk much now because my studies keep me very busy. However, I used to walk 30–60 minutes daily when I was on a sports team to stay fit.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly: say Yes/No then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct words (e.g., 'neighbourhood' not 'surrounding of the society') and avoid vague phrases like 'most favorable part'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because I enjoyed exploring my neighbourhood. It helped me relax and meet neighbours while playing.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and specific reasons. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'parks have trees and open spaces') and correct grammar. Avoid unclear words like 'papa's' and keep to 2–3 sentences with linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore'.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because the trees and open spaces provide fresh air and a calm atmosphere. Therefore, many find it therapeutic and good for both physical and mental health.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear sentence stating the place you prefer, then give one or two concise reasons. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'go hiking in the mountains', 'leave a lasting impression') and avoid fillers. Keep within 3 sentences.

Exemplo: I would like to go hiking in the mountains with family or friends because the scenery is refreshing. It would be a memorable experience and good exercise.

Sugestão: Start with a simple past topic sentence (e.g., 'I went for a walk with my cousin last week'), then add a specific detail (where you walked, what you talked about). Use correct phrases ('with one of my cousins', 'around the neighbourhood') and avoid redundancies.

Exemplo: I went for a walk with one of my cousins last week around our neighbourhood. We enjoyed a peaceful walk and used the time to catch up on family and studies.

× 'Honestly, nowadays because of my education and hectic schedules, I do not have plenty of time and minimal of time to uh, to walk for my physical well-being.'

✓ 'Honestly, nowadays because of my education and hectic schedule, I do not have much time to walk for my physical well-being.'

'Errors: incorrect use of plural "schedules" given context and awkward quantifiers "plenty of time and minimal of time". Use present simple for habitual present. Suggestion: use singular "schedule" when referring to overall busy routine and replace quantitative phrase with "much time" for negative sentences.'

× 'But before the time, I usually uh have around half to half an hour to one hour for walking because, uh, because at the time I was a part of a sports team and having a maintained physical body was.'

✓ 'But previously, I usually had around half an hour to one hour for walking because at that time I was part of a sports team and wanted to maintain my physical fitness.'

'Errors: awkward phrase "before the time" and mixed tenses "usually have" with past context. Redundant "because, uh, because" and incomplete clause "having a maintained physical body was". Suggestion: use past simple "had" for past habitual actions, replace awkward phrases with "previously" and "maintain my physical fitness".'

× 'When I was a child at that time, my most favorable part was work, working in the surrounding of the society because it gives me sense of relaxation and I can also communicate with the neighbors.'

✓ 'When I was a child, my favourite activity was working in the local community because it gave me a sense of relaxation and allowed me to communicate with the neighbours.'

'Errors: tense mismatch (present "gives", "can" used with past "was"), awkward phrasing "surrounding of the society" and "most favorable part". Suggestion: use past simple verbs "gave" and "allowed", use "local community" and "favourite activity".'

× 'Because papa's usually preserve lush greeneries and plants and drains and every individual like to visit parks on day on their daily basis as they feel fresh air and also feel as a therapeutic effect.'

✓ 'Because parks usually preserve lush greenery, plants and paths, and people like to visit parks daily as they enjoy the fresh air and find it therapeutic.'

'Errors: incorrect word "papa's" (should be "parks"), wrong plural/uncountable "greeneries", incorrect prepositions "on day on their daily basis" and awkward "feel as a therapeutic effect". Suggestion: use "parks", uncountable "greenery", "visit parks daily", and "find it therapeutic".'

× 'If I have any chance to take a long walk at the time, I most preferable would be to take uh to go on a mountain climbing with my family members or with my friends because it would be a great experience as it gives uh uh elastic lasting impression and also uh keeps me.'

✓ 'If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would prefer to go mountain climbing with my family or friends because it would be a great experience, leave a lasting impression and keep me fit.'

'Errors: conditional tense incorrect (mix of present and modal), awkward phrasing "most preferable would be to take uh to go", and unclear phrase "elastic lasting impression" and incomplete clause "keeps me". Suggestion: use second conditional "If I had... I would...", simplify to "prefer to go mountain climbing", use "lasting impression" and complete idea "keep me fit".'

× 'Last week I went to a walk with my one of my cousin and at the time we were both eagerly wanted to have some precious time with each other and for communication.'

✓ 'Last week I went for a walk with one of my cousins; we both wanted to spend some valuable time together and talk.'

'Errors: incorrect phrase "went to a walk" (should be "went for a walk"), article and number agreement "my one of my cousin", unnecessary past continuous "were both eagerly wanted" mixing forms. Suggestion: use simple past "went", correct noun phrase "one of my cousins", and "wanted to spend... and talk".'

× 'So we prefer to have a one walk around the society. Uh, so it was a uh, peaceful and relaxation work and also a good communication with.'

✓ 'So we decided to take a walk around the neighbourhood. It was peaceful and relaxing and allowed us to have a good conversation.'

'Errors: tense/verb choice "prefer" (should match past context), incorrect article "a one walk", wrong noun "society" for neighbourhood, awkward "relaxation work" and incomplete "good communication with". Suggestion: use past tense "decided" or "took", "a walk", "neighbourhood", adjective "relaxing" and complete phrase "good conversation".'