Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with a brief reason and time reference using linking words. Avoid repetition. For example, state current habit, then contrast with past and explain why.

Exemplo: Not really. I don't walk much these days because I commute by bike and live far from parks. However, I used to walk daily when I lived closer to my office, which helped me relax after work.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct answer, then add a specific memory and a reason to make it vivid. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I often walked with my grandfather in the evenings because he loved telling stories, and those walks were fun and educational for me.

Sugestão: Avoid filler phrases like 'I think in my opinion.' Start with a concise reason, then add two specific benefits with linking words. Use varied vocabulary rather than repeating 'because'.

Exemplo: People enjoy walking in parks mainly for the greenery and fresh air. Additionally, parks offer a peaceful atmosphere and pleasant scenery, which makes walking relaxing and good for mental health.

Sugestão: Give a single clear topic sentence naming the place, then provide two concise, specific reasons linked logically. Avoid vague adjectives and repetition.

Exemplo: I'd love to take a long walk along Melbourne's waterfront and laneways because the city combines beautiful architecture with riverside parks. Moreover, the clean air and friendly cafés along the route would make for pleasant rest stops.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer naming the place and when, then add brief supporting details linked with words like 'and' or 'so'. Be specific about routine and purpose to enrich the reply.

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk in the large hall on the top floor of my building. I usually walk there for exercise and last time I walked for about an hour while listening to music, which helped me relax.

× No, I don't walk a lot. I used to walk a lot, now I don't.

✓ No, I don't walk a lot. I used to walk a lot, but now I don't.

The original sentence is understandable but lacks a conjunction to connect contrasting ideas. Use 'but' to clearly mark contrast between past habit (used to walk a lot) and current habit (now I don't). This improves sentence flow and coherence. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, I often went outside for a walk when I was a child with my grandfather.

✓ Yes, I often went outside for a walk with my grandfather when I was a child.

The original word order is awkward. The past tense 'went' is correct for a habitual action in childhood. Move the time phrase 'when I was a child' to the end and place 'with my grandfather' next to the verb phrase for natural English word order. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× It used to be very fun.

✓ It used to be a lot of fun.

'Fun' as a noun commonly requires a quantifier in this context: 'a lot of fun' or 'very fun' is informal. 'It used to be a lot of fun' is more natural. This corrects sentence structure and collocation. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I think in my opinion, people like to walk in parks because of the greenery and because it's enjoyable and because of the fresh air.

✓ In my opinion, people like to walk in parks because of the greenery, the fresh air, and because it's enjoyable.

'I think in my opinion' is redundant; choose one. Use parallel structure when listing reasons and maintain consistent prepositions: 'because of the greenery, the fresh air, and because it's enjoyable' or better 'because of the greenery, the fresh air, and the enjoyment' for full parallelism. This fixes redundancy and improves parallel structure (sentence structure / preposition use). Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I would like to take a long walk on the roads of Melbourne because it's very pretty in.

✓ I would like to take a long walk on the streets of Melbourne because it is very pretty there.

Use 'streets' rather than 'roads' for walking context and replace the incorrect ending 'pretty in' with 'pretty there'. 'There' correctly refers to the place. This fixes preposition/location reference. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× The scenery is also very amazing.

✓ The scenery is also amazing.

'Very amazing' is redundant because 'amazing' already expresses a high degree. Use 'very' sparingly: 'very beautiful' or simply 'amazing'. This improves adjective use and concision. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× The air is also pretty fresh and nice, and the people are really sweet.

✓ The air is fresh and pleasant, and the people are very friendly.

'Pretty fresh and nice' is colloquial and slightly awkward; use 'fresh and pleasant'. 'Really sweet' is informal — 'very friendly' is more natural in this context. This refines adjective choice. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× We have a big hall at our home. It's on the last floor.

✓ We have a big hall in our home. It's on the top floor.

Use 'in our home' rather than 'at our home' when referring to a room inside a house. 'Last floor' is nonstandard in English; use 'top floor' for the highest floor. This corrects preposition use and article/word choice. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I usually walk there and last time I walked there for an hour.

✓ I usually walk there, and last time I walked there I stayed for an hour.

Mixing present habitual 'I usually walk' with a past event 'last time I walked there for an hour' is acceptable, but the second clause benefits from clearer structure. Use 'I stayed for an hour' or 'I walked there for an hour last time' for natural flow. This improves tense clarity and sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× It's pretty fun. I enjoy a lot by listening to music.

✓ It's pretty fun. I enjoy listening to music a lot.

'Enjoy a lot by listening to music' is ungrammatical. The verb 'enjoy' is followed directly by a gerund: 'enjoy listening to music'. Place 'a lot' after the verb phrase for correct adverb placement: 'enjoy listening to music a lot.' This fixes verb+ing usage and adverb placement. Grammar problem type ID: 8}]} (end)