Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be careful with fluency and sentence completeness. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct small grammatical errors. Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. For example, combine ideas: "I don't walk much because I prefer cycling, which is more convenient and saves time."

Exemplo: I don't walk much. Instead, I usually cycle because it's faster and more convenient, especially when I need to commute short distances.

Sugestão: Improve verb tenses and clarity. Use past simple consistently for past habits, avoid filler words, and finish sentences fully. Add linking words to show cause and effect. For example: "When I was a child, my family had little money, so we often walked to buy food."

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child, my family had little money, so we often walked to the market to buy food and I spent a lot of time walking.

Sugestão: Work on sentence structure and linking words. Start with a clear reason, then add a second supporting point with a linking phrase. Use more natural expressions such as "relieve stress" and "calm your nerves."

Exemplo: People walk in parks to relieve stress because the green surroundings calm the nerves. In addition, walking in a park is a pleasant way to exercise and improve health.

Sugestão: Be precise and use appropriate tenses. Use conditional and avoid vague phrases like "a lot of characteristics." Give specific reasons why you'd choose that place and link ideas. For example: "I would love to walk around Tokyo Disneyland because of its lively atmosphere and varied attractions."

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk around Tokyo Disneyland because the park is huge, the atmosphere is lively, and there are many different themed areas to explore.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and repeating words. Give a clear topic sentence and add specific sensory details briefly. Use linking words to connect duration and description. For example: "Yesterday I walked in the garden downstairs for about 30 minutes; the plants and flowers made the view very pleasant."

Exemplo: Yesterday I took a 30-minute walk in the garden downstairs. The path is lined with many plants and colorful flowers, so it was very pleasant and relaxing.

× I prefer using my.

✓ I prefer using mine.

The original sentence ends with 'my' which is a possessive determiner that must modify a noun; 'mine' is the correct possessive pronoun to stand alone. Use 'mine' when the noun is implied or omitted. Suggestion: Use 'mine' when not stating the noun, or say 'my bicycle' to specify.

× I prefer riding my bicycles.

✓ I prefer riding my bicycle.

'Bicycle' should be singular when referring to the one you personally ride. Using the plural 'bicycles' suggests multiple bikes belonging to you, which is unlikely here. Suggestion: Use singular nouns when referring to a single item you use regularly.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

No correction needed; the sentence correctly uses past simple 'did' for a past habit. Included here to show tense is appropriate.

× Yes, when I was a child, my family has had limited income so we don't have much money for the transportation.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, my family had limited income so we didn't have much money for transportation.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'has had' and present 'don't' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. For past contexts, use simple past 'had' and 'didn't'. Also 'transportation' does not need 'the'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense for events in the past.

× We usually uh, go to the went to place, buy food.

✓ We usually went to places to buy food.

The original mixes present 'go' and past 'went' and has awkward phrasing 'went to place'. For past habitual action, use simple past 'went' and plural 'places' or 'a place'. Suggestion: Use 'went to places' or 'went to a place' with past tense for habitual past actions.

× So I spend most of the time walking when I was a.

✓ So I spent most of the time walking when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present 'spend' with past 'was'. For a past time reference, use past tense 'spent'. The phrase 'when I was a' is incomplete; add 'child'. Suggestion: Keep verb tense consistent with time reference and complete the clause.

× I think walking in the parks is a good way for releasing your stress.

✓ I think walking in parks is a good way to relieve stress.

'Walking in the parks' is awkward; plural 'parks' without article is fine. 'A good way for releasing your stress' is unnatural; use 'a good way to relieve stress' (verb infinitive 'to relieve'). 'Your' is unnecessary in general statements. Suggestion: Use 'a good way to + verb' and omit 'your' in general observations.

× You are surrounded by this good environment can really smoothen your nerves and for other things it's a good way to exercise.

✓ Being surrounded by a pleasant environment can really calm your nerves, and it is also a good way to exercise.

Original is ungrammatical: 'You are surrounded by this good environment can...' mixes structures. Use a gerund phrase 'Being surrounded...' or rephrase. 'Smoothen your nerves' is nonstandard; 'calm your nerves' is natural. 'For other things' is vague; 'and it is also' connects ideas. Suggestion: Use clear subject and verb structure and standard collocations like 'calm your nerves'.

× I would love to go to the Disneyland in Japan.

✓ I would love to go to Disneyland in Japan.

'The Disneyland' is incorrect because 'Disneyland' as a proper name does not need 'the'. Use 'Disneyland in Japan' or 'Tokyo Disneyland'. Suggestion: Do not use the definite article with most proper names of parks.

× It's a very big theme park, so I have a very long way to walk.

✓ It's a very big theme park, so there is a very long way to walk.

Saying 'I have a very long way to walk' is grammatically possible but in context about the park itself, 'there is a very long way to walk' is more natural. If the speaker means personally, keep 'I have' but 'a very long way' refers to distance in singular correctly. This suggestion improves clarity. Suggestion: Choose phrasing that matches intended meaning; use 'there is' for describing places.

× But I loved the atmosphere and environment there.

✓ But I love the atmosphere and environment there.

If speaking about a general feeling or present preference, present tense 'love' is better. If referring to a past visit, 'loved' is acceptable; ensure tense matches context (previous sentence used conditional 'would love' implying hypothetical future visit, so use present 'love'). Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with the hypothetical/future context.

× I got to see a lot of characteristics.

✓ I got to see a lot of interesting features/attractions.

'Characteristics' is an odd choice when describing a theme park; 'features' or 'attractions' is more natural. Pronoun 'I got to see' is fine; change the noun for idiomatic usage. Suggestion: Use collocations like 'features' or 'attractions' when describing places.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

This is examiner's sentence; 'lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural in past question. No student correction needed.

× Yesterday I went for a walk, uh, in my, in my, uh, garden downstairs.

✓ Yesterday I went for a walk in the garden downstairs.

Remove filler words and repeated phrases. 'My, in my' is redundant; simple past 'went' is correct. Suggestion: Avoid fillers and repetition for clarity.

× It took about 30 minutes to finish a circle of it.

✓ It took about 30 minutes to walk around it.

'To finish a circle of it' is awkward. Use 'to walk around it' or 'to complete one lap around it'. 'Took' correctly uses past tense; rephrase for naturalness. Suggestion: Use idiomatic expressions like 'walk around' or 'complete a lap'.

× Umm, the view is quite good because we got a lot of, uh, plants and flowers.

✓ The view was quite nice because there were a lot of plants and flowers.

Consistency: if describing yesterday's walk, use past tense 'was' and 'there were'. 'Got' is colloquial; use 'there were' for existence. 'Quite nice' is a more natural collocation. Suggestion: Use 'there was/were' for existence and maintain past tense for past events.