Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답한 뒤 간단한 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 예문은 1~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하고 연결어(for, because, so 등)를 적절히 사용하세요. 또한 'lazy person' 같은 표현은 피하고 대신 활동 패턴을 설명하세요.

Exemplo: I don't walk much these days because I prefer staying at home to relax. However, I try to do short indoor exercises or use an exercise bike occasionally.

Sugestão: 시제와 동사 형태 오류가 있습니다. 과거에 대한 답변이므로 과거형을 정확히 사용하세요. 간단한 주제 문장 후 언제, 누구와 갔는지 등 구체적인 세부 정보를 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 문장 수는 1~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I often played and walked around the playground near my house when I was a child. I usually went there with my friends after school and we spent an hour playing.

Sugestão: 답변이 개인 사례와 일반적 이유를 혼동하고 반복이 있습니다. 먼저 일반적인 이유를 제시한 후 개인적 경험을 하나 덧붙이는 구조로 말하세요. 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 적절히 쓰고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because the air is fresher and the surroundings are peaceful. For example, my mother often walks there to relax and enjoy the greenery.

Sugestão: 의도는 이해되지만 문장이 혼란스럽고 단어 선택이 부정확합니다. 가정법 문장을 명확히 사용하고, 장소와 동반자, 이유를 순서대로 말하세요. 불필요한 표현은 줄이고 구체적인 장소 묘사를 추가하면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk around a peaceful lakeside with my boyfriend because it would be romantic and relaxing.

Sugestão: 최근 행위에 대해 과거 시제를 사용해야 합니다(또는 현재완료). 문법과 어순 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 한 문장으로 직접 답한 뒤 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 일정이나 활동을 명시하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Exemplo: I haven't gone for a walk recently because I've been busy working on my portfolio for Charlie College. As a result, I haven't had time to go out for walks.

× I'm not interested in walking in the street because I'm very lazy person and then my hobby is take a risk in my house so I don't like a lot of work this day.

✓ I'm not interested in walking in the street because I'm a very lazy person, and my hobby is taking risks at home, so I don't like doing a lot of work these days.

Grammar problem type IDs: 22 (Article errors), 26 (Sentence structure errors), 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors), 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Errors and fixes: 'very lazy person' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'and then' is unnatural; use 'and' to join clauses. 'my hobby is take a risk' uses incorrect verb form; use gerund 'taking risks' after 'hobby is'. 'in my house' -> 'at home' is the natural prepositional phrase. 'a lot of work this day' is wrong in number and time expression; use 'doing a lot of work these days' for habitual present. Suggestion: add appropriate articles, use gerund after 'hobby is', choose natural prepositions, and correct time phrase for habitual actions.

× When I was a child I usually use in the around the playground. I had to go walk to playground so I was often went to the outside.

✓ When I was a child I usually played around the playground. I used to walk to the playground often, so I often went outside.

Grammar problem type IDs: 6 (Present tense issue) when context requires past, 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions), 5 (Past tense issue), 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors). Errors and fixes: 'usually use in the around the playground' is ungrammatical: use past verb 'played' or 'used to play' and remove extra prepositions; 'in the around' -> 'around'. 'I had to go walk to playground' should be 'I used to walk to the playground' or 'I had to walk to the playground' with article 'the'. 'I was often went to the outside' mixes tenses and auxiliary; use 'I often went outside'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for childhood, use correct prepositions ('around', 'to', 'outside'), include articles before 'playground', and avoid doubling auxiliaries.

× Because my mother is very like a Walker in the park because most people can have fresh atmosphere and the park is very little bit exciting and.

✓ Because my mother really likes walking in the park, most people can enjoy fresh air, and the park is a little exciting.

Grammar problem type IDs: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs), 22 (Article errors), 26 (Sentence structure errors). Errors and fixes: 'is very like a Walker' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'really likes walking' or 'is a keen walker'. 'fresh atmosphere' is unnatural; use 'fresh air'. 'very little bit exciting' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'a little exciting' or 'a bit exciting'. Remove the dangling conjunction 'and' at the end. Suggestion: use correct verb 'likes' with gerund 'walking', choose natural collocations like 'fresh air', and simplify modifiers to avoid redundancy.

× I would like to take a long walk and lake with my boyfriend and then I want to pick a name in the nearby long walk lake.

✓ I would like to take a long walk by the lake with my boyfriend, and then I want to pick a place near the lake for a long walk.

Grammar problem type IDs: 8 (Verb + -ing form), 22 (Article errors), 26 (Sentence structure errors), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions). Errors and fixes: 'walk and lake' is missing preposition — use 'walk by the lake' or 'walk around the lake'. 'pick a name' is incorrect; likely intended 'pick a place' or 'give a name' but context suggests choosing a place, so use 'pick a place'. 'nearby long walk lake' is ungrammatical; reorder and use articles: 'the lake' or 'near the lake'. Suggestion: use gerund correctly and natural prepositional phrases ('by the lake', 'near the lake'), and choose the correct noun ('place' instead of 'name') to match intent.

× This day I usually working on my own portfolio because I have to go to Charlie College so I don't have any time to walk time.

✓ These days I am usually working on my own portfolio because I have to go to Charlie College, so I don't have any time to go for a walk.

Grammar problem type IDs: 6 (Present tense issue), 10 (Verb in the present participle form), 22 (Article errors), 26 (Sentence structure errors). Errors and fixes: 'This day' should be 'These days' for current habitual actions. 'I usually working' needs auxiliary 'am' for present continuous: 'I am usually working'. 'walk time' is incorrect; use 'time to go for a walk' or 'time to walk'. Add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct time expressions for habitual present, include the auxiliary with the present participle, and use natural collocations like 'go for a walk'.