Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and accurate: answer directly, use correct tense and vocabulary, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details linked logically. Correct verb choices (walk, not work) and past vs present tense matter.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to school and around department stores because regular walking keeps me fit and reduces stress.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and shorten sentences to avoid run-ons. Give one clear reason and a brief specific example. Use linking words like "because" appropriately and keep sentences to a maximum of about three.

Exemplo: Yes, I often went for walks as a child because it made me happy. For example, I walked to the park with my friends or my parents almost every weekend.

Sugestão: Finish your thought and avoid repetition. Start with a clear general reason, then add a specific supporting detail. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example." Expand slightly to show range of vocabulary (e.g., atmosphere, fresh air, peaceful).

Exemplo: People like walking in parks because the environment is peaceful and the air is fresh. For example, parks have many trees, quiet paths and places to sit and relax.

Sugestão: Answer the hypothetical clearly and use correct words (walk vs work). State one place and one reason, avoid irrelevant detail about treadmill unless it directly answers where you'd walk. Keep sentences short and use conditional past/modal correctly ("If I had the chance, I would...").

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along a seaside promenade because I enjoy the sea view and listening to music while walking.

Sugestão: Answer in clear past tense and be specific: name one recent place and give one brief reason. Avoid hesitations and irrelevant comments about traffic unless relevant. Keep to two sentences maximum.

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk at the city center gym because it is convenient and has good treadmills. I sometimes walk in nearby department stores when the weather is bad.

× Yes I do. I walk a lot, especially when I went to school as well as the department stores because I know working a lot is efficient for my health.

✓ Yes, I do. I walk a lot, especially when I go to school and when I go to department stores, because I know walking a lot is good for my health.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses ('I walk' with 'when I went to school'). Use present tense consistently for habitual actions ('when I go'). 'Working a lot' is incorrect context; use 'walking a lot.' Also add commas and 'when I go to department stores' for parallel structure.

× When I was a child I always went to outside to walk a lot because I felt happy when I walk with my friends or my father or mother I really love.

✓ When I was a child, I always went outside to walk a lot because I felt happy when I walked with my friends or with my father or mother, whom I really loved.

Use past tense consistently for past habits: 'walk' should be 'walked.' 'Went to outside' is incorrect word order; use 'went outside.' Add commas for clarity and use 'whom I really loved' or rephrase to avoid awkward relative clause.

× I think many people love the atmosphere of park because in the park there are a lot of trees and the atmosphere of.

✓ I think many people love the atmosphere of the park because there are a lot of trees and the air feels peaceful.

Use the definite article 'the park' when referring to a specific place. The original ends abruptly with 'the atmosphere of.' Complete the thought with a clear noun phrase like 'the air feels peaceful.'

× If I have a chance to have long work, I would like to work in fitness because I love walking on the running machine. I am able to listen to listen to the radio during my walk.

✓ If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would like to do it at a fitness gym because I like walking on the treadmill. I can listen to the radio while I walk.

The conditional mixes forms: for an unreal or hypothetical situation use 'If I had the chance... I would.' 'Have long work' is incorrect; use 'take a long walk.' 'Running machine' is better expressed as 'treadmill.' Remove duplicated words and use 'can' for ability and 'while' for simultaneous actions.

× It would be the gym in the city center, especially in the department stores. Uh, does, uh, it's very crowded and traffic congestion.

✓ Recently I went to the gym in the city center, and also to department stores. They are very crowded and there is a lot of traffic congestion.

Use past tense for 'lately' ('recently I went' or 'I have gone recently'). 'It would be' is incorrect here. 'Does, uh, it's' is filler and ungrammatical; replace with clear clauses. Use 'there is' for traffic congestion.