Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, like) and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I walk a lot, especially after a tiring day at work. Firstly, it helps me relieve stress and clear my mind; secondly, it lets me enjoy the scenery and sometimes meet new people while walking.

Sugestão: Start with a direct statement about frequency, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (tenses, word order).

Exemplo: Yes, I often went outside as a child. Every morning I would find my friends and we would go to our usual hangout to play games, ride bikes, and explore nearby fields.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and two distinct reasons with specific details and correct grammar. Use linking words (for example, furthermore) and avoid hesitations.

Exemplo: People often walk in parks because they offer peace and relaxation after a busy day. For example, parks provide fresh air and pleasant scenery, and furthermore they are good places to observe wildlife or meet other walkers.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give one or two specific reasons. Correct grammar (conditional tense, articles) and reduce hesitation. Use varied vocabulary rather than repeating 'admire' and 'scenery'.

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Gardens by the Bay. I would enjoy the diverse plant displays and colorful flower beds, and I could also explore the futuristic Supertree Grove.

Sugestão: Use correct past tense when asked about recent activity and give a specific detail about location or purpose. Avoid fillers and be concise (one topic sentence plus one detail).

Exemplo: Lately I walked around my neighborhood park and nearby streets. I was exploring local cafés and gardens to decide where I might visit next weekend.

× Yes, I do walk a lot after a tiring day of work because it's also a way of me releasing my stress and also spend uh, looking around, admiring the scenery and also, uh, it's a way also of me of like talking with someone, meeting new people.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot after a tiring day of work because it's also a way for me to release my stress, to look around and admire the scenery, and to talk with someone or meet new people.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. Use 'to' + base verb (infinitive) after 'a way for me' (not 'of me releasing'). Parallel verbs should match: 'to release', 'to look', 'to admire', 'to talk', 'to meet'. Remove redundant 'do' in simple present when not needed. Also simplify repeated 'also'. Suggestion: Use infinitives for purpose and keep items parallel.

× Yes, I can still remember that every morning I just woke up and then right away I will go outside, look for my friends and then we will go to the place we where we always hang out and play there.

✓ Yes, I can still remember that every morning I would just wake up and then right away go outside to look for my friends, and then we would go to the place where we always hung out and play.

The narrative refers to habitual past actions, so use 'would' or past simple consistently (not present/future 'will'). 'Where we always hung out' needs past tense 'hung'. Remove extra 'we' after 'place' and use 'to look for' for purpose. Ensure tense consistency for past habitual events.

× So as a child, really you really like to move around and spend time with your friends, do some funny things together.

✓ As a child, I really liked to move around, spend time with my friends, and do funny things together.

The sentence should describe past preferences, so use past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Use the first person 'I' to match speaker. Maintain parallel verb forms in past tense.

× I think people like to walk in parks because it gives them the peacefulness and the relaxation that they looking for it.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because it gives them the peace and relaxation they are looking for.

Use uncountable nouns 'peace' and 'relaxation' without 'the' in this context. 'They looking for it' is ungrammatical; use 'they are looking for' or 'they want'. Do not use redundant pronoun 'it' at the end. Use present continuous 'are looking' for current desires.

× And also maybe to, uh, admire the natural scenery around them, admire the natural environment and also see people around them.

✓ They may also admire the natural scenery and environment around them and see other people.

Sentence fragment lacks subject; add 'They may' or rephrase. Use consistent nouns and avoid repetition 'natural scenery around them, admire the natural environment'. Simplify to 'natural scenery and environment around them'.

× If I have a chance to take a long walk, I choose to go and visit the Gardens by the Bay.

✓ If I had a chance to take a long walk, I would choose to go and visit the Gardens by the Bay.

The conditional is hypothetical. Use the second conditional: 'If I had...' + 'I would choose...'. Present 'If I have' with 'I choose' mixes tenses. Use 'would' for hypothetical future.

× I think it's has a good natural scenery to admire because right now, uh, it has a lot of beautiful flowers to look into it and admire those scenery.

✓ I think it has beautiful natural scenery to admire because it has a lot of beautiful flowers to look at and enjoy.

Remove extra 'it's has' (incorrect contraction plus verb). Use 'has' only. 'Scenery' is uncountable so use 'beautiful natural scenery' not 'a good natural scenery'. Use 'look at' rather than 'look into it', and 'enjoy' instead of repeating 'admire those scenery'. Ensure noun-verb agreement and correct prepositions.

× Uh, lately I'll just walk around the area of my home. So I just walk around, uh, looking for a good places to visit next time.

✓ Lately I have just been walking around the area near my home, so I walk around looking for good places to visit next time.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been walking' or simple present habitual 'I walk' for recent habitual action; 'I'll' (I will) is incorrect here. 'A good places' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'good places' or 'a good place'. Use 'near my home' or 'around my home' for natural phrasing.