Walking— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 文法と語彙の選択を改善し、より自然で簡潔な表現を使いましょう。例えば「work around nearby park」は不自然なので「walk around a nearby park」や「go for a walk」を使います。また、一文をトピック文と補足文に分け、接続語を使って流れを良くします。具体的には時制や前置詞（in/at/around）を正しく使う練習をしてください。

Exemplo: Yes, I often go for a walk in a nearby park when I have spare time, because it helps me relax and take my mind off work.

Sugestão: 過去形の使用と発音の明瞭さを改善しましょう。現在形や助動詞の誤用（cannot）を過去形に直し、冗長な繰り返しを避けます。例えば「I couldn't go outside by myself when I was a child, so I rarely walked alone.」のように短く明確に答える練習をしてください。また接続語（so, but）を適切に使って理由を示すと良いです。

Exemplo: No, I rarely went for walks alone when I was a child because I couldn't go out by myself.

Sugestão: 問いに直接答え、曖昧な表現や繰り返しを避けましょう。主語の一致（refresh him → refresh themselves）と表現の自然さに注意してください。理由を2点程度具体的に挙げ、接続語でつなげる練習をしてください。例えば健康やリラックス効果を理由にするなどです。

Exemplo: People walk in parks mainly to relax and enjoy nature, and also to exercise, which helps them feel refreshed and recharged.

Sugestão: 単語の誤用（work → walk）と時制・長さの表現を直しましょう。仮定法の構造は良いので、それを維持しつつ具体的な理由や情景を一文追加して詳しく述べる練習をしてください。時間の表現は自然に述べられるように練習しましょう。

Exemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to walk along the seaside for about two hours because I enjoy the ocean views and fresh air.

Sugestão: 場所を述べるときの前置詞や修飾語を正しく使い、冗長な語句を減らしましょう。例えば「nearly nearby shrine」は不自然なので「a nearby shrine」や「the local shrine」を使います。過去形で簡潔に描写し、なぜ爽やかに感じたか具体例を1つ加えると良いです。

Exemplo: Recently I went for a walk to a nearby shrine that has a lot of green space, and it felt very refreshing because the area was quiet and full of trees.

× Yes, when I have spare time I often work around nearby park and it allows me to take my mind off the work.

✓ Yes, when I have spare time I often walk around the nearby park and it allows me to take my mind off work.

The student used 'work around nearby park' which is incorrect; the verb should be 'walk' to match meaning and 'around the nearby park' requires the definite article 'the'. Also 'take my mind off the work' is more natural as 'take my mind off work'. Use of verb 'walk' (base form) is correct with 'often' in present simple. Improve by replacing 'work' with 'walk', adding 'the', and removing the unnecessary article before 'work'.

× Well, no, not quite often, but when I was, when I was a child, I cannot go outside by myself. So and it is really to have a walk by myself.

✓ Well, no, not very often, but when I was a child, I could not go outside by myself, so I could not take a walk by myself.

The context is past time, but the student used present 'cannot' instead of past 'could not'. Also 'not quite often' is better as 'not very often'. 'So and it is really to have a walk by myself' is ungrammatical; replace with 'so I could not take a walk by myself'. Use past modal 'could' for ability in the past.

× I think it depends on the person and reason is what reason is it? It allows them to umm, refresh him, uh, recharge themselves.

✓ I think it depends on the person and the reason. It allows them to refresh and recharge themselves.

The sentence mixes pronouns 'them' and 'him' inconsistently. Use a single plural neutral pronoun 'them' and make the verbs parallel: 'refresh and recharge themselves'. Also add 'the' before 'reason' and simplify the question fragment. Ensure pronoun agreement and parallel verb forms.

× Well, if I had the chance I would like to work around the seaside and it will take two hours.

✓ Well, if I had the chance I would like to walk around the seaside and it would take two hours.

The student used 'work around the seaside' instead of 'walk' which changes meaning. Also in the conditional 'if I had the chance', the result clause should use 'would' rather than 'will', so 'it would take two hours'. Use correct verb 'walk' and consistent conditional modality.

× Well, recently I went for a walk. It's nearly nearby shrine which has a lot of green spaces and it it is very refreshing.

✓ Well, recently I went for a walk. It's the nearby shrine which has a lot of green spaces and it is very refreshing.

The phrase 'nearly nearby shrine' is incorrect; use 'the nearby shrine'. Also there is a repeated 'it'. Use 'it is very refreshing'. Ensure correct article 'the' and remove duplicate word. The past action 'I went' is fine with the present description of the shrine.