Reading— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and relevant to the question, start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and why), avoid unrelated phrases (e.g. 'I don't like eating') and reduce repetition. Use one or two supporting details (what you read and why) and keep it within 2–4 sentences. Also correct small grammatical errors and finish thoughts fully.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially Punjabi poetry. I have a small collection of books by famous poets such as Shiv Kumar and Batali, and I like reading their verses because they capture emotions vividly. Listening to readings of their poetry also helps me appreciate the rhythm and meaning.

Sugestão: Answer directly (I prefer paper/screen) then give specific reasons. Avoid unclear words/phrases (e.g. 'from babies', 'concentrate on me') and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect reason and consequence (because, therefore). Keep it concise.

Exemplo: I prefer reading on paper because screens strain my eyes and often trigger migraines. Therefore I can concentrate for longer when I read printed books, especially for long or detailed texts.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence explaining occasions that require careful reading, then give specific examples and use linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid vague or repetitive phrasing and finish sentences fully. Also correct grammar and choose precise vocabulary (e.g. 'accurate meaning').

Exemplo: I need to read carefully when the text contains unfamiliar Punjabi words or complex sentences, because I must understand exact meanings. For example, when reading classical poetry or legal letters, I read from the beginning of each sentence slowly and sometimes re-read lines to be sure of the meaning.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear direct statement (I prefer detailed reading), then give precise reasons and use linking words (because, whereas, therefore). Avoid filler words and incorrect word choices (e.g. 'retail' should be 'read in detail'). Provide a concise example to illustrate your point.

Exemplo: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand ideas and remember information better. For instance, when I read a novel slowly and pay attention to descriptions and dialogue, I gain more insight into characters and themes than if I only skim the text.

× Well, if I talk about myself, I don't like eating that much, but still I have a little bit small collection of Punjabi books, Punjabi literature that basically consists of the famous poets that Shiv Kumar, Batali and many others.

✓ Well, if I talk about myself, I don't like eating that much, but I still have a small collection of Punjabi books and literature that basically consists of famous poets like Shiv Kumar, Batalvi and many others.

The sentence uses incorrect pronoun/reference and awkward phrasing. 'a little bit small collection' is unidiomatic; use 'a small collection'. 'that' after 'literature' is unnecessary; use 'and' to connect. 'the famous poets that' should be 'famous poets like' or 'such as'. Also the poet's name corrected to 'Batalvi'. Suggestion: simplify phrases, use 'like/such as' for examples and remove extra words.

× I just love to listen the poetry day right and.

✓ I just love to listen to poetry every day.

After 'listen' a preposition 'to' is required before the object: 'listen to poetry'. 'the poetry' is unnecessary unless specific; use 'poetry'. 'day right and' is incorrect; likely intended 'every day'. Also remove extraneous conjunction 'and'.

× Well, as I mentioned earlier I have collection of both, so I prefer from babies only because I'm having a lot of problems such as eyesight and migraines.

✓ Well, as I mentioned earlier, I have a collection of both, so I prefer paper books because I have a lot of problems such as poor eyesight and migraines.

Missing article: 'a collection' required. 'prefer from babies only' is nonsense—likely mis-said; corrected to 'prefer paper books'. 'I'm having' is unnatural here; use 'I have'. 'eyesight' needs modifier 'poor' to clarify. Suggestion: use correct articles and clearer vocabulary.

× So that is why I can't just concentrate on me for a long time.

✓ So that is why I can't concentrate for a long time.

Placement of 'just' and reflexive 'on me' is incorrect. 'Concentrate on me' implies focusing on oneself; the student means 'concentrate' (focus) for a long time. Remove 'just' or place it before 'concentrate' if necessary: 'I just can't concentrate for a long time.'

× I prefer reading from only the paper.

✓ I prefer reading from paper.

'the paper' is unnecessary; English speakers say 'reading on paper' or 'from paper'. 'reading from only the paper' is awkward; 'prefer reading on paper' is best. Suggestion: use 'on paper' or 'paper books'.

× Well, whenever I need to read any Punjabi typical letters or words situated in the sequence in the paragraph.

✓ Well, whenever I need to read certain Punjabi letters or words in sequence within a paragraph.

The phrase 'Punjabi typical letters' is awkward and 'situated in the sequence in the paragraph' is wordy and unclear. Streamline to 'certain Punjabi letters or words in sequence within a paragraph.' Suggestion: use concise, natural word order.

× So sometimes I have to read carefully since the starting of the sentence to just know what that accurate word means and what does it holds.

✓ So sometimes I have to read carefully from the start of the sentence to know what the precise word means and what it conveys.

'since the starting of the sentence' is incorrect; use 'from the start of the sentence'. 'that accurate word' should be 'the precise word'. 'what does it holds' mixes question word order into a statement; correct is 'what it conveys' or 'what it means'. Suggestion: keep declarative word order and use accurate adjectives like 'precise'.

× And that's a difficult task for me and.

✓ And that's a difficult task for me.

The sentence ends with an extra conjunction 'and' and is incomplete. Remove the trailing 'and' to form a complete sentence.

× I prefer detailed reading because that makes our knowledge more wide instead of scanning because when we scan we just, uh, just quickly have a look on the words.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it broadens our knowledge instead of scanning; when we scan we just quickly glance at the words.

'that makes our knowledge more wide' is unidiomatic; use 'broadens our knowledge'. 'have a look on the words' should be 'glance at the words'. Replace filler 'uh' and duplicate 'just'. Suggestion: use idiomatic verbs: 'broaden', 'glance at'.

× But when we go in and retail, we just get more and more information and more and more interest in a book or any kind of novel or article you're reading.

✓ But when we read in detail, we get more and more information and become more interested in a book, novel or article.

'go in and retail' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'read in detail' or 'read closely'. 'more and more interest in' should be 'become more interested in'. Simplify repetition. Suggestion: use 'read in detail' and 'become more interested'.