Reading— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조를 더 명확히 하고 중복되는 표현(예: like, because)을 줄이세요. 주제 문장을 가볍게 말한 뒤 구체적 이유와 직업과의 관련성을 간결하게 연결하면 자연스럽습니다. 또한 문법 오류(‘be more creativity’ → ‘be more creative’, 관사/복수 등)를 고치세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially novels. I find that novels boost my creativity because they expose me to different ideas and storytelling techniques. As a freelancer who creates videos for an audience, I often draw inspiration from characters and plots when planning my content.

Sugestão: 지루한 말버릇(umm, like)을 줄이고 문장을 더 정확히 표현하세요. 핵심 이유를 먼저 말한 뒤, 두세 개의 구체적 이유를 연결어로 이어 자연스럽게 설명하세요. 문법(‘use my pencil to highlighting’ → ‘use my pencil to highlight’, ‘the sound when I pass the passage’ 모호성)을 바로잡으세요.

Exemplo: To be honest, I prefer reading on paper. I can use a pencil to highlight sentences and make notes, which helps my understanding. Also, turning pages gives me a physical sense of progress, which I find satisfying.

Sugestão: 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. ‘eradicate’는 잘못된 단어이므로 문맥에 맞는 어휘(예: read, study)를 사용하세요. 물건의 소유(도서관/친구 책 vs. 내 책)에 따른 행동 차이를 명확한 구조로 설명하고 연결어를 쓰세요. 문법(‘books is’ → ‘books are’)도 수정하세요.

Exemplo: If a book is borrowed from the library or from a friend, I read it very carefully because I need to return it in good condition and I don't want to miss anything important. However, for books I own, I usually skim and just highlight useful parts or write short notes.

Sugestão: 아이디어는 괜찮지만 표현을 더 간결하고 정확하게 하세요(예: ‘wander to the outline’ → ‘skim the outline’). 이유들을 연결어로 정리하고 반복 표현(‘many time’, ‘long for long time’)을 제거하세요. 시제·단수·복수 오류와 어휘 선택을 고치면 점수가 오릅니다.

Exemplo: I prefer scanning or skimming rather than detailed reading. I usually skim the outline and main points because it saves time, and I often don't have long periods to concentrate on reading in detail.

× I enjoy like reading and especially novels because I think reading novels can help me be more creativity.

✓ I enjoy reading, especially novels, because I think reading novels can help me be more creative.

'Enjoy' is followed by the gerund (reading), so 'like' is unnecessary and incorrect here; use 'enjoy reading'. 'Creativity' is a noun; the sentence needs the adjective 'creative' to describe 'me'. Also add commas for clarity. (수정 제안: enjoy 다음에는 동명사 형태가 와야 하며 'creative'는 형용사이므로 사람을 수식할 때 사용합니다.)

× Because I'm working as a a freelancer, I have to create videos to audience.

✓ Because I'm working as a freelancer, I have to create videos for an audience.

Use singular 'a freelancer' (only one 'a' was duplicated). Use the preposition 'for' with 'audience' and include the article 'an audience' or plural 'audiences' depending on meaning. Here 'an audience' fits. (수정 제안: 관사 중복 제거, 전치사 'for' 사용, 'audience' 앞에 관사 필요.)

× Umm to be honest I prefer to read on paper because I like umm use my pencil to highlighting some good sentence and also I have the sound when I pass the the passage.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to read on paper because I like to use my pencil to highlight good sentences, and I like the sound when I turn the pages.

After 'like' you can use 'to' + verb or gerund; here 'to use' is natural. 'Highlighting' should be infinitive 'to highlight' or gerund; use 'highlight' after 'to'. 'Some good sentence' should be plural 'good sentences'. 'Pass the the passage' is incorrect; use 'turn the pages' for the sound when reading. (수정 제안: like 다음에는 to부정사 사용 가능, 명사는 복수 형태로, 'turn the pages'로 표현.)

× Oh, some books are from library or from my friends.

✓ Oh, some books are from the library or from my friends.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'library' when referring to a specific place. 'From my friends' is acceptable. Articles with institutions often require 'the'. (수정 제안: 'the library' 사용.)

× I usually eradicate very carefully, but the books is my own.

✓ I usually read very carefully, but if the books are my own, I think I can just highlight and make some notes.

'Eradicate' is incorrect verb choice; intended verb is 'read'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'books' plural requires 'are'. Also clarify second clause with conditional 'if' and natural phrasing 'highlight and make some notes'. (수정 제안: 잘못된 동사 선택을 'read'로 수정, 주어-동사 일치 적용, 조건문 사용.)

× I usually eradicate very carefully, but the books is my own.

✓ I usually read very carefully, but the books are my own.

Plural noun 'books' requires plural verb 'are' rather than 'is'. Also 'eradicate' is wrong verb; use 'read'. (수정 제안: 주어-동사 수 일치 적용 및 적절한 동사 사용.)

× I think I can just umm highlighting like highlight and to do some sign.

✓ I think I can just highlight and make some marks.

After 'can' use the base verb 'highlight', not the '-ing' form. 'To do some sign' is unnatural; use 'make some marks' or 'make notes'. (수정 제안: 모달 동사 다음에는 동사원형 사용, 자연스러운 표현 선택.)

× To be honest, I prefer scanning. I usually just wander to the outline of the story because it save more time.

✓ To be honest, I prefer scanning. I usually just go over the outline of the story because it saves time.

'Wander to the outline' is incorrect collocation; use 'go over' or 'skim'. 'It save' must be 'it saves' for subject-verb agreement. 'More time' is unnecessary; simply 'saves time'. (수정 제안: 올바른 동사 표현 사용, 주어-동사 일치 적용.)

× More time I don't have many time to read and also I cannot concentrate on reading long for long time.

✓ I often don't have much time to read, and I cannot concentrate on reading for a long time.

'More time' is incorrect; use 'I often' or 'sometimes'. 'Many time' should be 'much time' (uncountable). 'Reading long for long time' word order and redundancy wrong; use 'concentrate on reading for a long time'. (수정 제안: 부사 사용과 불가산 명사 표현 수정, 올바른 어순 적용.)