Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 先直接回答并列出两三个爱好。原回答中的“playing competition”和“I know with friends”表达不清，可能想说“playing competitive sports”和“hanging out with friends”。说明最喜欢的爱好时，补充具体原因；例如解释粤语电影如何与自己的文化背景相关。避免把多个想法挤在一个句子里。

Exemplo: Yes, I have a few hobbies, including playing basketball, hanging out with friends, and watching films. My favourite is watching martial arts movies, especially Cantonese ones, because they remind me of my culture and childhood.

Sugestão: 回答内容切题，也提到了和朋友一起玩这一具体细节。删去重复的“enjoyable”，并注意“it made me excited and enjoyable”应改为“it was exciting”或“it made me feel excited”。可以举一个游戏类型或说明和朋友一起玩的情景，让答案更具体。

Exemplo: Yes, I loved playing computer games when I was a child. I usually played adventure games with my friends after school, and we had a lot of fun trying to complete the levels together.

Sugestão: 先明确说出从小保持至今的爱好是打篮球，再解释原因。原回答中的“our campus were forbidded”语法错误，可改为“we weren't allowed to bring digital devices”；“the only way for us to leisure”不自然，可说“a way to spend our free time”。此外，小学和高中跨度较大，可以说“从上学时起”，并补充现在是否还打篮球。

Exemplo: Yes, I’ve played basketball since I was at school. We weren’t allowed to bring digital devices to campus, so basketball was a popular way to spend our free time. I still play whenever I get the chance.

Sugestão: 回答应直接说明你和哪些家人有共同爱好。原回答后半部分较难理解；如果想表达父母年纪较大、兴趣不同，可以说“我和父母的爱好不太一样”，再补充你和妹妹都喜欢K-pop，并说明你们会一起做什么。注意不要同时使用“Because”和“So”连接同一个句子，也要避免重复“we used”。

Exemplo: Not really. My parents are over sixty, so we don’t have many hobbies in common. However, my sister and I both enjoy K-pop, and we often talk about our favourite singers and songs.

× among those hobbies I like the most is watching martial movies because I'm a Cantonese.

✓ Among those hobbies, the one I like most is watching martial arts movies because I'm Cantonese.

原句中“among those hobbies I like the most”结构不完整，后面的“is”缺少清楚的主语。可改为“the one I like most is...”，让主语和谓语结构完整。

× When I was a child, I really enjoyed the process of playing computer games because it made me excited and enjoyable and it's enjoyable.

✓ When I was a child, I really enjoyed playing computer games because they made me feel excited and the games were enjoyable.

“excited”描述人的感受，而“enjoyable”描述事物；原句的“made me ... enjoyable”把描述事物的形容词用来描述“我”，搭配不当。可以说“made me feel excited”，并用“the games were enjoyable”描述游戏。

× When I was a child, I really enjoyed the process of playing computer games because it made me excited and enjoyable and it's enjoyable.

✓ When I was a child, I really enjoyed playing computer games because they made me feel excited and the games were enjoyable.

这句话讲的是童年经历，使用过去时更一致。原句中的“it's enjoyable”是现在时，应改为“the games were enjoyable”。

× Because my parents are all over sixty. So I don't have many senior hobbies with my parents...

✓ My parents are both over sixty, so I don't share many hobbies with them.

“Because”引导原因从句，不能单独构成完整句子；同时“Because... So...”重复表达因果关系。可以保留“so”并把原因和结果合并成一个完整句子，或使用“Because...”作为句首并接上主句。

× ...our campus were forbidded to to bring digital device.

✓ When I was in elementary school or senior high school, we were forbidden to bring digital devices onto campus.

这里泛指不止一台电子设备，应使用复数“devices”。建议留意可数名词在表示泛指或数量不止一个时通常需要使用复数形式。

× ...our campus were forbidded to to bring digital device.

✓ When I was in elementary school or senior high school, we were forbidden to bring digital devices onto campus.

“forbid”的过去分词是“forbidden”，不是“forbidded”。被动结构“be forbidden to do something”中，be动词后应使用过去分词。

× ...our campus were forbidded to to bring digital device.

✓ When I was in elementary school or senior high school, we were forbidden to bring digital devices onto campus.

原句把“our campus”写成了被禁止携带设备的对象，但实际应是学生被禁止携带设备。可用“we were forbidden to bring...”表达“我们被禁止携带……”。

× ...bar, me I and my sister do love K pop culture...

✓ ...but my sister and I both love K-pop culture...

“me I”重复使用代词，而且“me”是宾格，不能在这里充当主语。与他人共同作主语时，应使用主格“I”，例如“my sister and I”。

× ...we are used to talking a lot of culture relationships.

✓ ...we are used to talking a lot about culture and relationships.

表示“谈论某个话题”时，talk后面应使用介词“about”，即“talk about something”。此外，这里将“culture”和“relationships”作为谈论的话题并列表达。

× ...we used we are used to talking a lot of culture relationships

✓ ...we are used to talking a lot about culture and relationships.

“we used we are used to”重复出现了两种表达，句子结构混乱。表示“习惯于做某事”时使用“be used to + 名词或动名词”，因此应保留“we are used to talking”。