Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise, avoid hesitation and pronoun errors, use a clear topic sentence and up to two supporting details with linking words. For example, start with a direct statement about your hobbies, then briefly explain why you enjoy them or how often you do them.

Exemplo: I don't have many hobbies at the moment. Currently I mainly enjoy reading, journaling and listening to music because they help me relax after work; for example, I read novels on weekends and write in my journal every night.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and use linking words to group related activities. Reduce fillers and be specific about what games you played or how often you did them.

Exemplo: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child. For example, I used to cycle every afternoon and play local outdoor games like tag and hide-and-seek with neighbourhood friends, which kept me active and happy.

Sugestão: Avoid saying 'scrolling my phone' as a proud lifelong hobby—it sounds casual and may be interpreted negatively. Offer a clearer, more positive hobby or explain why this activity matters, and keep it brief and natural without repetition.

Exemplo: I still enjoy chatting with friends, which started in childhood when we played together and later stayed in touch through calls and messages; this helps me maintain close relationships.

Sugestão: Be specific about which hobbies you share with family and explain similarity with a reason. Avoid vague phrasing and repetition; use linking words to connect idea and reason.

Exemplo: Yes, my family and I enjoy listening to music together because we all appreciate the same genres; for instance, we often share playlists and discuss new songs during car trips.

× I don't really have quite a lot of hobbies and even if I do, I don't get so much time for him.

✓ I don't really have many hobbies and even if I do, I don't get much time for them.

The sentence uses the incorrect pronoun 'him' to refer to 'hobbies' (which is plural and inanimate). Use the plural, inanimate pronoun 'them'. Also 'quite a lot of' is awkward with 'don't really have' — 'many' is concise and natural. Replace 'so much time' with 'much time' for better collocation.

× But uh, nowadays, uh, my primary hobbies are, you know, reading books, journaling and listening to music.

✓ But nowadays my main hobbies are reading books, journaling, and listening to music.

This is primarily a style and article/word choice issue rather than a major grammar error. Replace 'primary' with the more natural 'main', remove filler 'uh' and 'you know', and add the Oxford comma for clarity. No tense change needed.

× Yes, I had loads of hobbies when I was a child such as cycling, going outside to play some local games, outdoor games and umm, playing.

✓ Yes, I had lots of hobbies when I was a child, such as cycling, playing local outdoor games, and other activities.

The original repeats 'games' and ends with an incomplete 'playing', causing a sentence structure/listing problem. 'Loads of' is informal; 'lots of' is acceptable but 'many' could work. Reorder 'playing local outdoor games' for clarity and finish the list with 'other activities' to avoid the fragment.

× My personal choice.

✓ That was my personal choice.

The fragment lacks a verb. To be a complete sentence that fits context, add the past linking verb 'was' because the student refers to a past preference. This fixes the sentence structure and tense.

× Yes, I do have a hobby that I've had since childhood that is scrolling my phone and talking.

✓ Yes, I have had hobbies since childhood, such as scrolling on my phone and talking.

The original mixes singular 'a hobby' with plural activities 'scrolling' and 'talking', causing a pronoun/number mismatch. Rephrase to plural 'hobbies' or make the hobby singular and consistent. Also 'scrolling my phone' should be 'scrolling on my phone' for correct preposition usage.

× Yes, I do have a hobby same as my family members which is also scrolling and talking a lot.

✓ Yes, I share a hobby with my family members: scrolling on our phones and talking a lot.

'A hobby same as my family members' is awkward and mismatches singular/plural. Use 'share a hobby with' or make it plural 'hobbies'. Also include the preposition 'on' for 'scrolling on our phones' and clarify possession 'our phones'. This corrects pronoun and phrasing issues.