Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (types of novels, when you read, or what you learn) using linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., enjoy, fiction, learn insights) and keep it to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy reading novels, especially contemporary fiction and historical stories. I usually read in the evenings, and through books I learn about different cultures and improve my vocabulary.

Sugestão: Clarify and organize the timeline and cause-effect more clearly. Begin with a direct statement about your childhood hobby, explain briefly how it began using a linking word (e.g., because, when), and give one specific example of how it helped you. Correct unclear phrases (e.g., 'bad present' unclear).

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I loved reading, and it began when my teacher gave me a book as a reward. Because I read often when I was alone, books improved my concentration and helped me learn new words.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar: give one clear topic sentence naming the hobby and state when you started. Use linking words for sequence (first, then, because) and correct vocabulary ('uncle' instead of 'ankles', 'when I was' instead of 'when I won'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and be specific about learning and where you practiced.

Exemplo: Yes. Another childhood hobby was swimming, which I started because my grandparents lived by a river. At first I couldn't swim, but my uncle taught me, and then I practiced in the river every summer.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement about similarity, then give one or two specific comparisons using linking words (for example, whereas, while). Correct grammar (e.g., 'my father doesn't', 'he prefers', 'my mum doesn't have a hobby') and use specific examples of family hobbies if possible.

Exemplo: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, my father prefers watching movies, whereas my siblings enjoy playing football and video games, so our interests don't overlap much.

× Well, since my childhood I usually spend my days reading new books.

✓ Well, since my childhood I have usually spent my days reading new books.

The sentence describes a habit that started in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect tense ('have spent') is required rather than simple present ('spend'). Use 'have + past participle' to connect past and present. Also keep 'usually' between auxiliary and main verb for natural word order.

× I think I can learn a lot of new things from the books.

✓ I think I can learn a lot of new things from books.

This is mainly a style/definite article issue: 'the books' implies specific books already mentioned; general statement about reading requires no article ('books'). The grammar list includes present tense issue because the sentence expresses general truth; keep present simple 'can learn' but remove the definite article.

× Since my childhood, I enjoyed reading books.

✓ Since my childhood, I have enjoyed reading books.

Using 'since' to indicate a period from the past to now requires present perfect ('have enjoyed') rather than simple past ('enjoyed'). This matches the 'past tense issue' category because the wrong past form was used for a continuing action.

× I think it started from my teacher giving me a book as a bad present.

✓ I think it started when my teacher gave me a book as a present.

The original phrase 'as a bad present' is awkward and 'started from' is nonstandard. Use 'started when' with a simple past clause ('gave me a book as a present'). This corrects sentence structure and idiomatic usage.

× Since then, whenever I'm alone, I study reading.

✓ Since then, whenever I'm alone, I read.

'Study reading' is incorrect collocation; 'read' is the correct verb for the activity. The error falls under verb + -ing form because a wrong verb form/combination was used. Use simple present habitually: 'I read.'

× I think the books helped me a lot.

✓ I think the books have helped me a lot.

If the help started in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect 'have helped' instead of simple past 'helped'. This aligns with present tense/continuing relevance.

× Uh yes I think the same hobby but a different one may be swimming my grandparents they live just beside the river so whenever I won there, I can swim.

✓ Yes, I think I had the same hobby, but a different one may be swimming. My grandparents live beside the river, so whenever I went there, I could swim.

Multiple problems: run-on sentence, incorrect pronoun placement, wrong verb forms ('won' should be 'went', 'can' should be 'could' for past ability). This is sentence structure and tense correction: separate into sentences, use past tense for past situations ('went', 'could'), and fix word order.

× But at first I couldn't swim, but one of the ankles he taught me how to swim.

✓ At first I couldn't swim, but one of the uncles taught me how to swim.

'Ankles' is a wrong word choice (lexical error) and 'he taught' should be combined into a correct noun 'uncle' and past simple 'taught' is appropriate. This falls under past tense issue because past simple 'taught' is the correct tense; also correct the noun.

× My father he doesn't like to read, he prefer watching a movie.

✓ My father doesn't like to read; he prefers watching movies.

Subject duplication ('My father he') is unnecessary; more importantly 'prefer' should be 'prefers' to match third person singular subject 'he'. Also pluralize 'movie' to 'movies' for general preference. This matches third person singular issue.

× And my mum I don't think she has a hobby and also my younger brothers and younger sister.

✓ And my mum — I don't think she has a hobby, and my younger brothers and younger sister don't either.

Original sentence fragments and pronoun references are unclear. Add a clear subject and verb for the second clause ('don't either') to show that siblings also lack the hobby. This corrects pronoun and sentence structure issues.

× Their hobbies are pretty different from me.

✓ Their hobbies are quite different from mine.

Comparison requires a noun or possessive after 'different from'; use the possessive 'mine' rather than 'me'. This addresses singular/plural and comparison construction (listed under singular and plural issue).

× I think the hobbies is really, really different for each person.

✓ I think hobbies are really different for each person.

Subject-verb agreement: 'hobbies' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. Also omit 'the' for a general statement. This matches singular/plural issue and subject-verb agreement.