Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small word mistakes ("talking" → "walking" or remove). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "vibrant streets", "architecture", "coffee shops").

Exemplo: I enjoy walking in my city because the streets are vibrant and full of life. For example, I often stroll past interesting architecture and cosy coffee shops, which makes the walks relaxing and exciting. Because the area is well-lit and busy, I feel safe and entertained during my walks.

Sugestão: Give a direct opening sentence and then add a specific example. Reduce hesitation words and improve grammar ("I used to" instead of "I have"). Mention one clear consequence briefly. Use a linking word like "especially" or "for example" to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to enjoy playing games with my friends and my brother when I was a child. For example, I loved adventure games and would often play for hours, which sometimes annoyed my mother because I missed my chores.

Sugestão: Provide a clearer structure: a direct answer followed by reasons with linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Explain briefly what changed (study demands, new interests) and give a specific example of a hobby you stopped or tried.

Exemplo: No, I don't have a hobby that has lasted since childhood because my interests changed as I grew up. For instance, I used to enjoy drawing, but when I started focusing on my studies I gradually stopped and tried different activities instead.

Sugestão: Answer directly and give brief contrasting details with linking words such as "however" or "while". Avoid fillers like "umm" and "yeah". Give one specific example of a family member's hobby and why it differs from yours.

Exemplo: No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family. For example, my brother enjoys riding trains and exploring stations, while my parents are too busy to pursue hobbies; I prefer walking around the city instead.

× Yes, I like walking umm, I live in urban city, so there is a lot of attractive attractive street, then there is a lot of excitement, so I like talking there.

✓ Yes, I like walking. I live in an urban city, so there are a lot of attractive streets and a lot of excitement, so I like walking there.

Errors: repeated word 'attractive', incorrect article before 'urban city', singular/plural mismatch for 'street', wrong verb 'talking' instead of 'walking'. Type 13 covers adjective/adverb misuse and 1 covers plural — here the main fixes are adjective repetition and wrong word choice. Use 'an' before a vowel sound (urban), pluralize 'street' to 'streets' to match 'a lot of', and use 'walking' consistently. Suggestions: remove duplicates, use correct article, ensure nouns agree in number, and check the intended verb.

× Umm yes I have, yes I did. I like playing games with my friends or brother umm especially like adventure games so I play game too long so my mother got angry.

✓ Yes, I did. I liked playing games with my friends and my brother, especially adventure games, so I played games for too long and my mother got angry.

The student mixed present and past tenses. Use past tense 'liked' and 'played' because the question asks about childhood. Also use plural 'games' and add 'for' in 'for too long' for duration. Suggestions: keep tense consistent for past events, pluralize where appropriate, and include prepositions for duration.

× No, because I'm often bored. Hobbies and as I grew up I have to study and I stop doing good hobby so I change my I often change my mind.

✓ No, because I often get bored. As I grew up I had to study and I stopped doing hobbies, so I often changed my mind.

Tense inconsistencies: 'I'm often bored' can be 'I often get bored' but because the rest refers to growing up, use past tense 'had to', 'stopped', 'changed'. Also unclear phrase 'good hobby' removed and 'hobbies' pluralized. Suggestions: decide whether describing present or past and keep verb tenses consistent; use clear nouns and plural/singular correctly.

× I think no umm, my parents are too busy to have any hobbies and my brother likes riding the train but I don't like it and yeah.

✓ I don't think so. My parents are too busy to have hobbies, and my brother likes riding the train, but I don't like it.

Pronoun and sentence-structure issues: 'I think no' is unnatural; use 'I don't think so.' Removed 'any' before 'hobbies' for naturalness but 'any' is acceptable—main issue was phrasing. Also improved punctuation and conjunction use. Suggestions: use natural negative constructions and connect clauses clearly with conjunctions.