Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence naming your main hobbies, correct any misused words, avoid repetitions, and keep to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and give one specific detail (how often or why you enjoy them).

Exemplo: I have a few hobbies, mainly reading novels and playing badminton. Because of my busy schedule I usually play badminton only at weekends, while I read for about 30 minutes each evening because it helps me relax and learn new things.

Sugestão: Good structure and specific detail. Improve by removing filler words, using one strong topic sentence and one linking phrase to show frequency or result. Keep it within three sentences and vary vocabulary slightly.

Exemplo: Yes — I loved swimming as a child and took lessons near my house. My brother and I practiced every weekend, which helped us become more confident in the water and build endurance.

Sugestão: Correct minor errors and be more specific: give the exact type of novels or an example and quantify frequency. Use a clear topic sentence then one reason with linking word to strengthen coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I have read novels since I was about ten. For example, I often read historical fiction and I still read almost every week because it relaxes me and broadens my understanding of different cultures.

Sugestão: Be precise and correct word choice: say “physical books” instead of “physical posts.” Start with a direct topic sentence, then contrast with a linking word and provide a brief example of each family member's hobby to add specificity.

Exemplo: Not really — I prefer reading physical books, while my parents usually watch movies or Korean dramas. For instance, I might spend an evening with a novel, whereas they often watch a drama series together.

× Of course, yes, I do have some hobbies that I like to do in my free time, such as reading voice or playing badminton, but since I have busy schedules, I don't have enough time to follow them on a daily visit. But if I get free time I like to do then.

✓ Of course. I have some hobbies that I like to do in my free time, such as reading novels or playing badminton, but since I have a busy schedule, I don't have enough time to do them every day. However, if I get free time, I like to do them.

Errors: 'reading voice' is incorrect word choice and likely meant 'reading novels'; 'busy schedules' should be singular 'a busy schedule'; 'follow them on a daily visit' is incorrect collocation — use 'do them every day'; sentence fragments and awkward connectors. Suggestion: use correct noun 'novels', use singular 'a busy schedule' to refer to the student's schedule, replace 'follow them on a daily visit' with 'do them every day', and join clauses with appropriate connectors. (Grammar problem type ID: 8)

× Well, of course, yes. I think I used to love swimming a lot when I was younger, so I swam a lot and took swimming lessons near my house with my brother.

✓ Well, of course. I used to love swimming a lot when I was younger, so I swam a lot and took swimming lessons near my house with my brother.

Errors: unnecessary present-tense phrase 'I think' weakens the past-time reference 'used to'. For a clear past habitual action, use 'I used to' without 'I think'. Suggestion: remove 'I think' to clearly indicate habitual past action. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× So we practiced there every weekend and we both enjoyed being in the water and improving our skills.

✓ We practiced there every weekend, and we both enjoyed being in the water and improving our skills.

Error: starting with 'So' is conversational but can be unnecessary; the main issue is sentence flow and redundancy. Suggestion: remove 'So' and join clauses with a comma and coordinating conjunction for correct sentence structure. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× Well yes, I think I've enjoyed reading Nobles since I was about 10 and I still read almost every week because I find novels a bit relaxing and they help me learn more about the outside world.

✓ Well yes, I think I've enjoyed reading novels since I was about 10, and I still read almost every week because I find novels relaxing and they help me learn more about the outside world.

Errors: 'Nobles' is a typo for 'novels'; 'a bit relaxing' is acceptable but 'relaxing' is more natural. Suggestion: correct the noun to 'novels' and maintain parallel structure with commas. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× Not really because I tend to read physical posts in my free time while my parents usually watch movies or Korean dramas so our hobbies don't really overlap.

✓ Not really, because I tend to read physical books in my free time while my parents usually watch movies or Korean dramas, so our hobbies don't really overlap.

Errors: 'physical posts' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'physical books'. Missing commas for clarity. Suggestion: replace with 'physical books' and add commas to separate clauses. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× I enjoy getting lost in a novel but they prefer visual entertainment.

✓ I enjoy getting lost in a novel, but they prefer visual entertainment.

Error: missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'but' joining two independent clauses. Also ensure pronoun 'they' clearly refers to 'my parents' from previous sentence — context helps but keeping both sentences linked is better. Suggestion: add a comma before 'but' and ensure antecedent is clear. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)