Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobby, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use natural phrasing and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I enjoy keeping fit in my free time. For example, I usually go for long walks in the park, and sometimes I train at an outdoor gym three times a week to build strength and relieve stress.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons or feelings, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases and correct simple grammar (past tense, articles).

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child I collected coins and stamps. I enjoyed this hobby because it felt rewarding to find rare items, and I liked learning about different countries and historical designs.

Sugestão: Answer directly and concisely: state whether you still have the childhood hobby, then explain briefly why it changed using linking words. Keep sentences simple and grammatical.

Exemplo: No, I don't still have that childhood hobby. Over time my interests changed because of new technologies and a busier lifestyle, so now I prefer physical activities such as walking and working out instead.

Sugestão: Be concise and clear: give a direct answer, then briefly compare your hobby with family members' hobbies. Avoid fillers and incorrect word choices; use specific examples.

Exemplo: No, my hobbies differ from my family's. For instance, my parents enjoy gardening and cooking, whereas I focus on fitness and regular exercise to stay healthy.

× Yes, I have for example, I have now I have hobby to go for a extracurricular activities like for a walk or something like that in or using outdoor or indoor gyms. So that's the sum up of my hobby.

✓ Yes. For example, I currently have a hobby of doing extracurricular activities such as going for a walk or using outdoor or indoor gyms. So that's a summary of my hobbies.

The sentence contains article errors and related word choice problems: 'I have hobby' needs an article or possessive and should be 'a hobby' or 'hobbies'; 'a extracurricular activities' mixes singular article with plural noun; 'for a walk' is fine but structure was inconsistent. Also 'the sum up of my hobby' should be 'a summary of my hobbies'. Suggestion: use 'a hobby' for singular, match singular/plural consistently, and simplify the clause order. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Yes, when I was a child I used to collect coins or the stamps because the on that time these things gave me the satisfaction of something and the something is very obvious or in my heart. So yes to collecting coins and the stamps is was my hobby.

✓ Yes. When I was a child I used to collect coins and stamps because at that time these things gave me satisfaction. So collecting coins and stamps was my hobby.

Multiple plural/singular and article errors: 'coins or the stamps' should be 'coins and stamps' (parallel plural nouns), 'the on that time' should be 'at that time', and 'is was my hobby' mixes present and past—use past 'was'. Also remove unnecessary phrases like 'the something is very obvious or in my heart'. Suggestion: keep parallel noun forms, correct temporal preposition 'at', and maintain past tense for past habits. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Not at all because hobbies change with the changing of time I would say. And by the changing of time we were we are on the era which is electronically or very advanced. So yes nowadays I have changed my hobby to for to extract activities like walk.

✓ Not at all, because hobbies change over time. We are in an era that is very advanced technologically, so nowadays I have changed my hobbies to activities like walking.

Tense and word choice issues: 'change with the changing of time' is wordy—use 'change over time'. 'We were we are on the era' mixes past and present and uses incorrect prepositions; use 'We are in an era'. 'Electronically' is an adverb but 'technologically' (adjective/related adverb) is correct here. 'I have changed my hobby to for to extract activities like walk' has many errors: use 'changed my hobbies to activities like walking'. Suggestion: use simple present for general truth, 'in an era', and gerund 'walking'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Uh, not at all because uh, my family members has, uh, different genre or niche, uh, but my niche is to, uh, doing or uh, making my body healthy by attaining some useful exercises or proteins.

✓ Not at all, because my family members have different interests or niches, but mine is staying healthy by doing useful exercises and taking protein when needed.

Subject-verb agreement: 'my family members has' should be 'my family members have'. Word choice: 'genre or niche' is awkward—use 'interests' or 'niches'. 'My niche is to, uh, doing' mixes infinitive and gerund—use 'mine is staying healthy' or 'my interest is doing'. 'Attaining some useful exercises or proteins' is incorrect collocation—use 'doing exercises' and 'taking protein' or 'consuming protein'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject, choose natural collocations, and use consistent verb forms. Grammar problem type ID: 27