Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, group similar activities, avoid filler words (umm, et cetera), correct word choice (e.g., 'pocketbooks' and 'sweatpants' are odd here), and finish your idea. Use 2–3 supporting details with linking words. Also watch grammar (plural/singular) and sentence endings.

Exemplo: I enjoy several active hobbies, especially volleyball, pickleball and badminton. In addition, I like reading short novels because they help me relax. These activities make me feel energized and refreshed after a busy day.

Sugestão: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, use correct noun phrases (play on swings/slide, not 'playing swings'), avoid fillers, and give specific reasons or examples. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and choose accurate adjectives ('active' not 'active and convert my energy').

Exemplo: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. I enjoyed playing on the swings and sliding down the slide, and running around the playground with my friends because these activities kept me active and helped me burn off energy.

Sugestão: Answer directly in present perfect or present simple, avoid repetition and fillers, and give a brief reason or specific memory to support the statement. Use correct singular/plural and smoother phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes, I still enjoy using swings and slides; I've loved them since I was a child. Even now, they make me feel carefree and remind me of fun times with friends at the park.

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatical: use natural expressions like 'the same hobbies as my sister' and correct verbs and articles ('play on the swings and slides'). Add a linking phrase to show frequency and a specific example of a recent activity. Avoid fillers.

Exemplo: Yes, I share hobbies with my younger sister — we both like volleyball and playing on the swings and slides. We often go to the park together in our free time and play volleyball or spend time on the playground.

× Yes, I have a lot of hobby umm, I like playing volleyball, I like playing pickleball, I like playing badminton umm, I like reading pocketbooks, sweatpants and et cetera.

✓ Yes, I have a lot of hobbies; I like playing volleyball, pickleball and badminton. I also like reading pocketbooks and wearing sweatpants, etc.

The student used the singular noun 'hobby' with the quantifier 'a lot of', which requires a plural noun 'hobbies'. Also the list items were inconsistent; 'reading pocketbooks' and 'sweatpants' need parallel structure ('reading' vs 'wearing'). Suggestion: use plural after 'a lot of' and keep list items parallel.

× It makes me feel umm, energized when I.

✓ It makes me feel energized when I do.

The sentence is incomplete because the verb is missing after 'I'. Adding the verb 'do' completes the clause referring to the previously mentioned activities. Suggestion: always finish clauses with an explicit verb or repeat the action verb for clarity.

× Yes, I have a several hobbies when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had several hobbies when I was a child.

The action refers to the past, so 'have' should be past tense 'had'. Also 'a several' is incorrect; use just 'several' without the article. Suggestion: use past tense for past-time statements and avoid combining 'a' with 'several'.

× I like playing swings, umm slides and umm running with my friends because it helps me energize and active and also convert my energy.

✓ I liked swinging on swings, going down slides and running with my friends because it helped me feel energetic and channel my energy.

The sentence mixes present tense with a past time frame; when talking about childhood use past tense ('liked', 'helped'). 'Playing swings' and 'playing slides' are unnatural; use 'swinging on swings' and 'going down slides'. 'Energize and active' are incorrect word forms; use 'feel energetic' and 'channel/convert my energy'. Suggestion: match tense to time frame and use correct verb/noun forms and collocations.

× Yes I I still like umm swing and slides because I don't know why I like this, but since I am old now I still like it.

✓ Yes, I still like swings and slides because I don't know why, but even now I still enjoy them.

Use plural nouns 'swings and slides'. 'Since I am old now' is awkward and unnecessary; use 'even now' or 'still' to express continuity. Also maintain consistent present tense. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and smoother phrasing for current preferences.

× Yes, I have the same hobbies with my little sister.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobbies as my little sister.

'Same ... as' is the correct structure for comparison; using 'with' is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'the same ... as' to compare shared hobbies.

× She loves also playing volleyball, do swings and slides.

✓ She also loves playing volleyball and using swings and slides.

Word order and verb forms are incorrect. Place 'also' before the verb phrase and use gerunds 'playing' and 'using' for activities. 'Do swings and slides' is ungrammatical; use 'using swings and slides' or 'playing on swings and slides'. Suggestion: keep parallel gerund forms and correct word order.

× We played a lot. Umm right now when we have a free time we go to a park and we just do their swing and slides.

✓ We played a lot. Right now, when we have free time we go to a park and use the swings and slides there.

Problems: 'a free time' should be 'free time' without the article; 'do their swing and slides' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Their' is incorrect reference; use 'there' to indicate location. Use 'use the swings and slides there' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, correct pronoun to 'there', and use natural verbs for playground equipment.