Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is natural and relevant, with clear topic and supporting details. To improve, avoid minor grammar errors and redundancy ("the the"), use more varied vocabulary (e.g., "commute" instead of "public transport") and add one linking phrase to connect ideas. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes — I enjoy people-watching when I commute on buses or the MTR. I like observing how people style their outfits and how they interact with friends, because it tells me about different personalities and trends. For example, I often notice subtle gestures that reveal friendships or moods.

Sugestão: Good content and clear reason, but phrasing is slightly awkward ("possessed this hobby"). Use simpler, more natural expressions and a linking word to show consequence or additional detail. Add a brief specific example of a crocheted item to make it more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes. As a child I enjoyed crocheting because I liked making unique items. For example, I made small toys and scarves, which taught me patience and allowed me to personalise gifts for family members.

Sugestão: Clear and relevant with good reasons, but there are grammar issues ("hadn't gave up" should be "haven't given up"), and a couple of repetitive phrases ("keep fit and stay in a healthy shape"). Use one or two linking words and a concise example of how it benefits you now.

Exemplo: Yes, I haven't given up ballet — I've been training since I was four. It appeals to me because it teaches discipline and grace, and it also keeps me physically fit; for example, regular classes improve my posture and stamina.

Sugestão: Good, specific and natural response with personal detail. Improve cohesion by combining short sentences using linking words (e.g., "Moreover," "We also"). Avoid starting sentences with "And" or "Like" in formal speech and limit to two or three sentences total.

Exemplo: Yes, my sister and I both do ballet, and we often share our experiences and tips. Moreover, we swap outfits — for instance, I lend her my leotards and skirts, which makes practising together easier and more fun.

× Yes, one of my biggest hobbies is to people watch whenever I'm on any kind of public transport such as bus, minibus or MTR.

✓ Yes, one of my biggest hobbies is people-watching whenever I'm on any kind of public transport such as the bus, minibus, or the MTR.

The verb phrase 'people watch' functions as a noun (a hobby) and should be in the gerund form 'people-watching' to be grammatically correct. Also add definite articles before specific transport types and commas in a list for clarity.

× I love to observe the way people put together their outfits or the the way people interact with their friends.

✓ I love to observe the way people put together their outfits or the way they interact with their friends.

Repeated 'the the' is a typographical error; replace with a single 'the'. Also replace the repeated noun 'people' with the pronoun 'they' for smoother, less repetitive phrasing.

× When I was a child, I possessed this hobby of crocheting because I enjoy creating stuff that is one-of-a-kind.

✓ When I was a child, I had a hobby of crocheting because I enjoyed creating things that were one-of-a-kind.

Use simple past 'had' instead of 'possessed' for natural speech. Maintain past tense for 'enjoy' -> 'enjoyed' and 'is' -> 'were' to keep consistent past narration. Replace informal 'stuff' with 'things'.

× I also love the creativity that it provides me with, like the possibilities to do whatever I want.

✓ I also love the creativity it provides me, like the possibilities to do whatever I want.

Remove unnecessary preposition 'with' after 'provides' (provide someone something or provide someone with something; here 'provides me' is more concise). Present tense 'love' and 'want' are appropriate because this describes a general feeling that still applies.

× I think the hobby that I hadn't gave up on is doing ballet, which I've been doing since I was four years old.

✓ I think the hobby that I haven't given up on is ballet, which I've been doing since I was four years old.

Use present perfect negative 'haven't given up' not past perfect 'hadn't gave' and correct past participle 'given' instead of 'gave'. Also 'doing ballet' can be shortened to 'ballet' for natural phrasing.

× I am still such a big enthusiast of it because I love the grace and discipline it teaches me, and doing it also helps me keep fit and stay in a healthy shape.

✓ I am still a big enthusiast of it because I love the grace and discipline it teaches me, and doing it also helps me keep fit and stay in good shape.

Use 'a big enthusiast' (not 'such a big enthusiast') for natural phrasing. 'In a healthy shape' is unidiomatic; use 'in good shape'.

× My sister and I both enjoy doing ballet and I particularly love how we get to share our personal experiences with each other.

✓ My sister and I both enjoy ballet, and I particularly love how we get to share our personal experiences with each other.

'Enjoy doing ballet' is acceptable but 'enjoy ballet' is more concise. Add comma before 'and' joining independent clauses. Pronouns are fine; correction is stylistic.

× And we can also swap our outfits with each other.

✓ We can also swap outfits with each other.

Avoid starting a sentence with 'And' in formal responses; remove it and streamline 'our outfits' to 'outfits' for conciseness.

× Like I can lend her my leotards and skirts and she can also wear mine.

✓ For example, I can lend her my leotards and skirts, and she can wear mine.

Begin with a transitional phrase ('For example') rather than 'Like' for clarity. Add a comma before 'and' joining clauses. 'She can also wear mine' is fine but 'also' is unnecessary; remove for smoother flow.