Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: remove unclear terms (e.g. “BA”), correct grammar, finish the last sentence, and avoid listing too many items without grouping. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words.

Exemplo: I have a few hobbies, mainly reading and playing badminton. For example, I play badminton with my sister every weekend, which helps me relax after a busy week of studying and keeps me active.

Sugestão: Complete unfinished sentences and avoid vague phrases like “funny games.” Use linking words to connect ideas and give a final specific detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. I loved drawing and painting because they let me express my creativity, and I often played imaginative games with my siblings after school. I also read comic books a lot, which sparked my interest in storytelling.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and word choice (e.g. “loud reading,” “take libraries,” “I still read in my free time”), and make sentences clear and concise. Use one or two specific examples and linking words to show continuity from childhood to present.

Exemplo: Yes, I have read since childhood. My parents often took me to the library when I was young, so reading has always helped me relax. I still read in my free time, and friends sometimes give me comic or adventure books as gifts.

Sugestão: Good content and structure—clean up minor grammar issues (e.g. “travelling” vs “traveling,” plural agreement) and avoid redundancy. Use one linking phrase to connect examples and a brief result sentence.

Exemplo: Yes, I share several hobbies with my family. For example, we enjoy watching movies and cooking together, and we often go on short trips at the weekends. These shared activities help us bond and make planning family time easier.

× Absolutely, I have several hobbies such as reading, BA, playing badminton, listening to music and watching videos.

✓ Absolutely, I have several hobbies such as reading, badminton, listening to music and watching videos.

The item 'BA' is unclear and seems to be an incorrect abbreviation or typo that does not fit the list of hobbies; remove or replace it. Also keep parallel structure: list items should be similar grammatical forms (gerunds here). Suggestion: use 'badminton' (noun) not 'playing badminton' if other items are nouns, or make all items gerunds: 'reading, playing badminton, listening to music, and watching videos.'

× I find that having hobbies help me relax after a busy day at my studies and it also gives.

✓ I find that having hobbies helps me relax after a busy day of studying, and they also help me unwind.

Subject 'having hobbies' is singular conceptually but treated as plural; verb should agree: 'helps'. Also 'at my studies' is incorrect preposition and noun choice; use 'of studying'. The clause 'it also gives' is incomplete and unclear; replace with a complete clause such as 'they also help me unwind.'

× I also enjoyed playing a lot of funny games with my siblings after school and reading comic books was.

✓ I also enjoyed playing many funny games with my siblings after school, and reading comic books was one of my favorites.

The sentence ends incompletely with 'was.' Provide a complete predicate. Also 'a lot of funny games' is informal; use 'many funny games.' Maintain past tense 'enjoyed' and complete the second clause with 'was one of my favorites.'

× I've loud reading ever since I was a child.

✓ I've loved reading ever since I was a child.

'I've loud reading' contains a wrong word 'loud' instead of the past participle 'loved.' Use present perfect 'I've loved' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. Also follow with the gerund 'reading.'

× My parents encouraged me to take libraries when I was young and reading has always helped me relax my mind every time.

✓ My parents encouraged me to go to libraries when I was young, and reading has always helped relax my mind.

The verb 'take libraries' is incorrect; use 'go to libraries' or 'use libraries.' 'Helped me relax my mind every time' is wordy and awkward; simplify to 'helped relax my mind.' Keep tense consistent.

× I still reading my free time and sometimes my friends gives their comic books, adventure books as gifts to me.

✓ I still read in my free time, and sometimes my friends give me their comic books and adventure books as gifts.

'I still reading' lacks the correct verb form; use simple present 'I still read' for habitual action. 'In my free time' is correct preposition. 'My friends gives' is subject-verb agreement error; plural subject 'friends' takes 'give.' Also use correct word order 'give me their ...' and remove unnecessary commas.

× Having similar hobbies really help us bond and make it easier to plan family activities.

✓ Having similar hobbies really helps us bond and makes it easier to plan family activities.

Subject 'Having similar hobbies' is singular; verbs need singular agreement: 'helps' and 'makes.' Ensure both verbs agree with the singular gerund subject.