Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g. 'novels' not 'nobles'), fix tense and grammar, and avoid redundant phrases like 'I think so' and 'in my initial time.' Add one or two specific details about the kinds of books and a linking word to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I enjoy several hobbies, but reading novels is my favourite. For example, I often read contemporary fiction and classic novels by authors like Jane Austen and Haruki Murakami, which broaden my vocabulary and understanding of different cultures. Therefore, reading helps me relax and improves my knowledge.

Sugestão: Clarify the hobby (likely 'drawing' not 'drink') and use correct past tense. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details (what you drew, how often, where you displayed it). Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' sparingly and correctly.

Exemplo: When I was a child, my main hobby was drawing. I used to draw every day after school, mainly animals and cartoon characters, and I would hang my best pictures on my bedroom wall. This hobby helped me develop patience and creativity.

Sugestão: Confirm and correct the hobby wording (e.g., 'drawing since childhood'). Use present perfect and present simple correctly: 'I have had' and 'I still enjoy.' Provide specific examples of what you draw and link past to present with words like 'since' or 'therefore.'

Exemplo: Yes, I have drawn since childhood and I still enjoy it. Over the years I have improved from simple sketches to detailed portraits of famous people, and since I practise regularly I have become better at capturing facial expressions.

Sugestão: Answer directly and provide one or two specific comparisons. Avoid repeating 'I think so' and clarify family hobbies if possible. Use correct grammar ('everyone has' not 'everybody have') and keep sentences short and relevant.

Exemplo: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, my mother likes gardening and my brother plays football, whereas I prefer reading and drawing. Despite these differences, we sometimes share activities like going to the park together.

× Yes, I have a lot of hobbies but I think so.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies.

The phrase 'but I think so' is unnecessary and makes the sentence unclear; use 'many' with countable plural 'hobbies'. Keep the sentence simple and direct.

× Reading books is my favorite hobby and I read a lot of books in my initial time.

✓ Reading books is my favorite hobby, and I read a lot of books in my free time.

'Initial time' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'free time'. Add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses.

× Personally, I like to read the nobles book or the famous authors.

✓ Personally, I like to read novels or books by famous authors.

'nobles book' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'novels'. 'Books by famous authors' is the proper phrasing.

× As a result, it is beneficial for me and increase my knowledge.

✓ As a result, it is beneficial for me and increases my knowledge.

Compound verb must agree with singular subject 'it'; use 'increases' not 'increase'.

× I think so when I was a child, I don't have a lot of hobbies, but I remember that when I was a child I I like drink a lot and I think that's my hobby.

✓ I think when I was a child I did not have many hobbies, but I remember that I liked drawing a lot and I thought that was my hobby.

Use past tense 'did not have' and 'liked' for childhood. 'Like drink' is wrong; likely 'like to draw' or 'liked drawing' is intended. Use 'many' with plural 'hobbies'.

× So at that time I usually like to try and whole day.

✓ At that time I usually liked to draw all day.

The original is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'liked' and clarify activity: 'draw all day' instead of 'try and whole day'.

× There are lot of very pictures that are drawing and I hang them on my own.

✓ There were a lot of pictures that I drew, and I hung them up myself.

Use past tense 'were' and correct verb forms: 'drew' (simple past) and 'hung them up myself' (phrasal verb and reflexive pronoun). Also include 'a' before 'lot'.

× Yes, that I already mentioned that I have a hobby of drying in in the chairhood.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, I have had a hobby of drawing since childhood.

'Drying' is a misspelling of 'drawing'; 'in the chairhood' should be 'since childhood'. Use present perfect 'have had' to indicate a hobby continuing from childhood.

× So till now I have that hobby because I think drank is very unique for me.

✓ So until now I have that hobby because I think drawing is very special to me.

'Drank' is wrong form; likely 'drawing'. Use 'special' or 'unique' appropriately. 'Until now' is clearer than 'till now' in formal speech.

× I learnt a lot of new things by drying.

✓ I learned a lot of new things by drawing.

Use 'drawing' (gerund) as the activity and past tense 'learned' for consistency. 'Drying' is incorrect.

× Now I usually like to make a lot of famous people portraits.

✓ Now I usually like to make portraits of famous people.

Correct word order is 'make portraits of famous people' rather than 'famous people portraits'.

× No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members have because I think so.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members.

The extra 'have' and 'because I think so' are unnecessary and awkward. Compare hobbies 'as my family members' without repeating 'have'.

× Everybody have their own and different hobbies.

✓ Everybody has their own different hobbies.

'Everybody' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have'. 'Own different hobbies' is a smoother phrase.

× Uh, personally I do not know about my family members hobbies.

✓ Personally, I do not know much about my family members' hobbies.

Use possessive form 'family members' hobbies' should be 'family members' hobbies' with apostrophe and add 'much' for natural phrasing.

× But yes, I know my own hobby in in the childhood I like to drink, but now I like to read books in my initial time and that's very good for me and encourage me.

✓ But I do know my own hobby: in childhood I liked to draw, but now I like to read books in my free time, and that helps and encourages me.

Use past tense 'liked' for childhood and correct 'draw' instead of 'drink'. 'Initial time' should be 'free time'. Use 'helps and encourages me' for clear result.