Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and sentence fragments, correct grammar (e.g., 'oftenly' -> 'often'), and combine related ideas. Add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I often play basketball with my friends because it helps me stay fit and improve my teamwork skills. For example, we practise drills twice a week, which has noticeably improved my shooting accuracy.

Sugestão: Clarify tense and meaning: answer directly with a topic sentence, use correct past tense, avoid fragmented sentences, and explain briefly why you enjoyed it. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about the hobby (e.g., computer games or basketball).

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child, I used to play computer games every day because they were exciting and helped me relax. For instance, I often played puzzle and adventure games that improved my problem-solving skills.

Sugestão: Give a clear, organized answer: state the hobby and duration, use correct grammar, and explain why you continue it with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I have played computer games since childhood because they were a fun way to connect with my friends. Even now we meet online on weekends to play co‑operative games, which helps us keep in touch.

Sugestão: Be natural and correct: respond directly, fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'should' -> 'often' or 'usually', 'Andy' unclear), and give a specific example of how you share the hobby. Use a linking word to show result or reason.

Exemplo: Yes, my brother and I usually play computer games together after work because it helps us relax. For example, we often play co‑op strategy games on Friday evenings to unwind and chat about our week.

× I play basketball with my friends oftenly.

✓ I play basketball with my friends often.

The word 'oftenly' is not a standard adverb in English. Use 'often' as the correct adverb of frequency. Place it after the verb phrase 'play basketball' or before the main verb: 'I often play basketball with my friends.'

× I enjoy playing basketball because.

✓ I enjoy playing basketball because it is fun and helps me stay active.

The conjunction 'because' should introduce a reason and cannot end a sentence alone. Provide a complete clause after 'because' to state the reason. Ensure the sentence is complete by adding a subject and verb for the reason clause.

× It's helped me to improve my skills.

✓ It has helped me improve my skills.

Contraction 'It's' can mean 'it is' or 'it has'. Here the present perfect 'has helped' is appropriate to show an effect up to now. Also, omit 'to' after 'helped' when following with a bare infinitive: 'helped me improve.'

× Yes, I had that. Hobbies.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies when I was a child.

Fragmented response 'I had that. Hobbies.' is incomplete. Combine into a full sentence that answers the question, keeping past tense 'had' for childhood.

× I play basketball on computers when I'm young and enjoy it.

✓ I played basketball on the computer when I was young and enjoyed it.

The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'played' and 'was' instead of present 'play' and 'I'm'. Also 'on computers' is awkward; use 'on the computer' or 'computer games.' Match verb tenses and use singular/plural appropriately.

× While I'm playing.

✓ I used to play for hours while I was young.

'While I'm playing.' is a fragment and mixes present progressive with past context. Replace with a complete past-time clause to match the question: 'I used to play for hours' or 'I played while ...'.

× Yes, yes, I have I. Play computer games with my childhood friends.

✓ Yes, I do. I played computer games with my childhood friends.

The original has repetition and fragments and mixes present perfect 'have' with incomplete clause. Answering about childhood requires past tense 'played.' Use 'I do' to confirm if needed, then give past tense description.

× We enjoy it because we help us.

✓ We enjoyed it because we helped each other.

The phrase 'we help us' is ungrammatical. Use 'helped each other' to indicate mutual action in the past. Also match tense to past 'enjoyed' if referring to childhood.

× Yes, my brother and I, we should play computer games.

✓ Yes, my brother and I play computer games together.

'Should play' implies obligation or recommendation, not habitual action. For stating a shared hobby, use simple present 'play' to indicate regular activity. Remove extra comma and redundant subject repetition.

× We enjoy it and we play it often after work.

✓ We enjoy it and play it often after work.

Redundant 'we' is unnecessary; streamline to 'we enjoy it and play it often after work.' Use simple present for habitual actions. This corrects slight redundancy rather than a strict grammatical error.

× Andy, help us to relax and chill after that.

✓ And it helps us relax and unwind afterwards.

'Andy' appears to be a typo for 'And it' or 'And it helps.' Correct to 'And it helps us relax.' Use 'unwind' or 'relax' instead of 'chill' for more natural phrasing, and 'afterwards' or 'after that' as one word/phrase. Use third-person singular 'helps' to agree with 'it.'