Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct minor grammar (e.g., "going to the gym", "keep me engaged"). Aim for natural phrasing and no more than 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I enjoy physically active hobbies such as running, swimming and going to the gym. These activities help me relax after work and reduce stress. For example, I usually go for a 30-minute run in the evening because it clears my mind and improves my sleep.

Sugestão: Start with a direct statement, avoid filler words, and use past tense consistently. Provide one concrete detail about how the hobby affected you (e.g., skills or memories) and connect ideas with linking words like "and" or "which".

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child I often played football with my cousins and neighbors. Playing together helped us build strong friendships and improved my coordination and teamwork skills. I remember we would meet every afternoon after school until sunset.

Sugestão: Clarify the hobby and correct grammar: use a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Reading has been my hobby since childhood"). Give specific examples of what you read and why, and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words ("because", "for example") to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Reading has been my favorite hobby since childhood. I enjoy visiting libraries and bookstores because I can find books on many topics, especially self‑development and biographies. For example, I regularly read motivational books that help me set goals and improve my daily habits.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and use specific examples. Remove hesitations and correct phrasing (e.g., "We love exploring new cities and trying local food"). Add one or two details about a recent trip and use linking words like "for example" or "also".

Exemplo: Yes. Traveling is a hobby my family and I share; we enjoy exploring new cities and trying local food. For example, last summer we visited a coastal town where we sampled seafood dishes and relaxed on the beach. These trips help us bond and create lasting memories.

× I love doing physically engaging activities like running, swimming, going through a gym, uh, and going for a walk.

✓ I love doing physically engaging activities like running, swimming, going to the gym, and going for a walk.

Use the gerund correctly: 'going to the gym' is the correct expression, not 'going through a gym'. Keep parallel gerund forms (running, swimming, going to the gym, going for a walk). Use consistent structure for clarity.

× These activities help me wind down after work and uh, it's also a stress reliever to keep me engaged stay and.

✓ These activities help me wind down after work and are also stress relievers that keep me engaged.

Original mixes singular and plural and has incomplete clauses. 'These activities' is plural so use 'are'. Remove redundant words 'stay and' and restructure to 'are also stress relievers that keep me engaged' for grammatical completeness.

× When I was a kid, I loved uh, playing football with my cousin and neighbors.

✓ When I was a kid, I loved playing football with my cousins and neighbors.

Pluralize 'cousin' to 'cousins' if more than one was implied; if singular, 'my cousin and neighbors' is still acceptable but grouping as 'cousins and neighbors' is more natural. No tense change required; this corrects noun number.

× Uh, it allows us to umm, release stress and umm, hard time after school is also uh, have us uh, build friendship.

✓ It allowed us to release stress after a hard day at school and helped us build friendships.

The sentence mixes present and past. Since referring to childhood, use past tense: 'allowed' and 'helped'. Use 'a hard day' instead of 'hard time', and plural 'friendships'. Ensure verb forms match past context.

× Variable has been my favorite hobby since try hard.

✓ Reading has been my favorite hobby since I was young.

Original sentence is unclear and uses wrong words. Replace 'Variable' with the hobby (likely 'reading'), use present perfect 'has been' correctly with timeframe 'since I was young'. Provide clear subject and time expression.

× I love going to library, uh, and bookstore.

✓ I love going to the library and the bookstore.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'library' and 'bookstore' when speaking about the places you visit generally. English requires articles before singular countable nouns in this context.

× This activity helps me uh get more knowledge.

✓ This activity helps me gain more knowledge.

Use a natural collocation: 'gain knowledge' rather than 'get more knowledge'. Keep verb form 'helps me gain' (base verb after 'helps me').

× For example, I love reading self.

✓ For example, I love reading self-help books.

'Self' alone is incorrect. Specify 'self-help books' and include the plural noun. Also include article if singular ('a self-help book') or use plural for a general habit.

× Traveling is one of uh, my family's hobbies. We love, uh, explore exploring new cities, try trying local food.

✓ Traveling is one of my family's hobbies. We love exploring new cities and trying local food.

Maintain parallel gerund forms 'exploring' and 'trying' after 'love'. Remove duplicated words 'explore exploring' and 'try trying'. Keep pronoun use consistent.

× We also local to the beach on uh, summer break.

✓ We also go to the beach on summer break.

Original omits verb and misuses 'local'. Use 'go to the beach' with preposition 'to' and the verb 'go'. 'On summer break' is the correct time phrase.

× Uh, it has us engaging and uh, have.

✓ It keeps us engaged and relaxed.

Original is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use a clear verb phrase: 'keeps us engaged and relaxed' to express the effect of traveling. Ensure objects and complements are present.