Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, um), and organize supporting details with linking words. Mention 2–3 hobbies and briefly explain reasons using clear connectors (for example, "because", "so", "which helps").

Exemplo: I enjoy several peaceful activities. For example, I go running and to the gym because they help me relieve stress after work, and I also dance, which is a fun way to stay fit and social.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation, and add a specific detail or short example. Use a linking word to show frequency or result (e.g., "usually", "so", "which").

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child I loved playing football with my cousin and neighbors. We usually played after school, which made me feel happy and active, and it also helped us build friendships.

Sugestão: Good clear idea. Improve by removing repetitions and fillers, and expand with a specific example of what you read and how it benefits you. Use one or two linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, reading has been my favorite hobby since childhood. It helps me gain knowledge and keep my mind fresh; for example, I often read historical novels and self-help books that improve my vocabulary and perspective.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and organize details with linking words. Specify one or two shared activities and explain why you enjoy them together (e.g., bonding, trying food).

Exemplo: Yes, my family and I share a love of traveling. We often explore new cities and try local seafood at the beach during summer and winter breaks, which helps us bond and create lasting memories.

× Yes, I love doing, uh, peacefully engaging activities like running, going to the gym, uh, uh, dancing because it's on way helps me uh, getting shared and uh, going down after work.

✓ Yes, I love peacefully engaging activities like running, going to the gym, and dancing because they help me relax after work.

The sentence contains problems with verb + -ing form and unclear phrasing. 'Love doing, uh, peacefully engaging activities' is awkward; use 'love peacefully engaging activities' or 'love doing peaceful activities.' 'Because it's on way helps me uh, getting shared' is ungrammatical: 'it's on way' and 'getting shared' are incorrect. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to multiple activities and the base verb 'help' (present simple) followed by the base verb 'relax'. Remove filler words and organize the list with 'and'. Suggestions: remove fillers, use parallel gerund forms (running, going, dancing), use correct subject-pronoun agreement ('they help'), and use appropriate verb 'relax' instead of 'getting shared' or 'going down'.

× When I was a kid, I loved playing football with my cousin and neighbor. We usually played after school and it helps us, uh, engage and, uh, feel happy and fun, uh, to.

✓ When I was a kid, I loved playing football with my cousin and neighbor. We usually played after school and it helped us feel happy and have fun.

The second sentence mixes past and present tense. The context is past ('When I was a kid'), so use past tense 'helped' not present 'helps'. Also 'feel happy and fun' is incorrect: use 'feel happy and have fun'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistently and use correct collocations ('have fun').

× Reading books is still my favorite hobby since I was a kid. It helps me get more umm, knowledge and also keep my keep my mind umm, fresh and uh.

✓ Reading books has been my favorite hobby since I was a kid. It helps me gain knowledge and keep my mind fresh.

The phrase 'is still my favorite hobby since I was a kid' mixes present simple with a time expression requiring present perfect ('since I was a kid' -> 'has been'). Use 'has been' to show continuity from past to present. 'Get more knowledge' is better expressed as 'gain knowledge'. Duplicate phrase 'keep my keep my' is erroneous. Remove fillers. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions or states that began in the past and continue now, choose appropriate verbs ('gain'), and avoid repetition and fillers.

× Yes, we love traveling together to explore new city, uh, try seafood in at the beach on holiday, especially on summer and winter break is help us uh engage and have uh.

✓ Yes, we love traveling together to explore new cities and try seafood at the beach on holiday, especially during summer and winter breaks; it helps us relax and enjoy ourselves.

Several article and preposition errors: 'explore new city' should be plural 'new cities' or 'a new city' depending on meaning. 'Try seafood in at the beach' has redundant prepositions; use 'try seafood at the beach'. 'On summer and winter break' should be 'during summer and winter breaks'. The clause 'is help us' mixes forms; use 'it helps us'. 'Have uh' is incomplete — use 'enjoy ourselves' or 'have fun'. Suggestions: use correct articles and plurals, correct prepositions ('at the beach', 'during'), maintain subject-verb agreement, and complete phrases ('enjoy ourselves').