Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar/repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words, and use linking words for clarity. Also correct article use and word order (e.g., 'watching movies', 'I especially listen to').

Exemplo: I enjoy listening to music and watching movies. For example, I usually listen to pop while I work because it helps me concentrate, and I watch comedies on weekends to relax.

Sugestão: Fix tense and article errors, remove repetition, and use linking words to list activities clearly. Use past tense and correct gerunds/infinitives: 'I liked outdoor activities such as hiking, riding bikes, and swimming.'

Exemplo: When I was a child, I liked outdoor activities. For instance, I often went hiking, rode my bike, and swam at the local pool.

Sugestão: Use correct tense (present perfect) and fluent phrasing, remove hesitations and fragments. Give a clear reason and one supporting detail. For example: 'Yes, I've been swimming since childhood because I want to stay healthy, and it became a regular exercise habit.'

Exemplo: Yes, I've been swimming since childhood because I wanted to stay healthy. As a result, it became a regular habit and I usually swim twice a week now.

Sugestão: Correct verb forms and remove repetition. Combine sentences and use linking words to show frequency. For example: 'Yes, both my parents enjoy swimming, so we often swim together at the weekend.'

Exemplo: Yes, both my parents enjoy swimming, so we often go to the pool together on weekends, which is a good time for family bonding.

× Yes, I like listening to music and watching the movies. I especially I listen to pop music while I work and I like to watch comedies on weekends to relax.

✓ Yes, I like listening to music and watching movies. I especially listen to pop music while I work, and I like to watch comedies on weekends to relax.

The phrase 'watching the movies' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the'; with a general activity use the plural noun without an article: 'watching movies'. There is also a duplicated 'I' before 'listen' and a missing comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: remove 'the', delete the extra 'I', and add a comma before 'and' to join the clauses correctly.

× When I was child, I like to outdoor activities such as go to hiking, go hiking, riding bikes or go swimming as my hobby.

✓ When I was a child, I liked outdoor activities such as hiking, riding bikes, or swimming as my hobbies.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'child' and tense mismatch—question asked past so use past tense 'liked' (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'Like to outdoor activities' is ungrammatical; use 'liked outdoor activities'. Verbal forms after 'such as' should be noun/gerund forms: 'hiking', 'riding bikes', 'swimming'. Also avoid repeating 'go hiking' and ensure plural 'hobbies' to match list. Suggestion: add 'a', change 'like' to 'liked', convert verbs to gerunds, and remove repetition.

× Yes, I swim since umm, since childhood because I I want to keep healthy and. Accumulate a habit to do exercise.

✓ Yes, I have been swimming since childhood because I want to stay healthy and have developed a habit of exercising.

The original uses simple present 'I swim since' which is incorrect for an action that began in the past and continues: use present perfect continuous or present perfect ('have been swimming' or 'have swum'). 'I I' is duplicated. 'Keep healthy' is understandable but 'stay healthy' is more natural. 'Accumulate a habit to do exercise' is ungrammatical; use 'have developed a habit of exercising' or 'have made exercising a habit'. Suggestion: use present perfect continuous for ongoing activity, remove duplicate words, and use natural collocations like 'stay healthy' and 'have developed a habit of exercising'.

× Yes, my father and my mother also like swim on weekends, so we often go to go swimming together on weekends.

✓ Yes, my father and mother also like to swim on weekends, so we often go swimming together.

'Like swim' is incorrect; after 'like' use the infinitive 'to swim' or the gerund 'swimming'. 'Go to go swimming' duplicates 'go'; use 'go swimming' instead. Repeating 'on weekends' twice is redundant. Suggestion: use 'like to swim' or 'like swimming', remove the duplicated 'go', and avoid repeating time expressions.