Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repeating 'a lot' twice and use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'enjoy' instead of 'have').

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy several hobbies in my spare time. For example, I read contemporary novels to relax and I often listen to jazz while doing housework; I also like playing with my cat because it helps me unwind.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and improve grammar and specificity. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details and a linking word. Correct article usage ('a small garden') and consider describing an activity or feeling.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I grew up with a small garden, so I used to spend hours exploring plants and catching insects; this helped me become curious about nature.

Sugestão: Good clear answer and strong detail. Improve coherence by linking childhood interest to current achievement and vary sentence structure slightly. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I've painted since childhood and my early interest led me to study art formally; in fact, I now hold a master’s degree in painting.

Sugestão: Be more fluent and remove fillers like 'uh'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to compare family members and give specific examples. Avoid repeating 'hobbies' and try varied vocabulary (e.g., 'share' instead of 'have similar').

Exemplo: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. For instance, my father enjoys painting like me, and both my brother and I are avid readers, so we often recommend books to each other.

× When I was a child we had small garden and I used to play with plants and bugs in that garden.

✓ When I was a child we had a small garden and I used to play with plants and bugs in that garden.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'small garden'. Use 'a' to indicate one non-specific garden. Suggestion: always include 'a' or 'the' before singular countable nouns when needed.

× Reading books, playing with my cat, listening to music are my favorite hobbies at the moment.

✓ Reading books, playing with my cat, and listening to music are my favorite hobbies at the moment.

This sentence mainly needed the Oxford comma for clarity; however it could be misread because the list items are gerund phrases that function as plural subjects, which is correct. No plural/singular form change required. Suggestion: add 'and' before the last item to make the list structure clear.

× Yes, I think I do have similar hobbies with my family.

✓ Yes, I think I have similar hobbies to my family.

Incorrect preposition 'with' after 'hobbies' and unnecessary auxiliary 'do' here. Use 'have similar hobbies to my family' or 'share hobbies with my family.' Suggestion: say 'I have similar hobbies to my family' or 'I share hobbies with my family.'

× For example, my dad also likes to paint and uh, reading is one of my hobbies and my brother reads a lot.

✓ For example, my dad also likes to paint; reading is one of my hobbies, and my brother reads a lot.

Run-on sentence and informal filler 'uh' should be removed. Use appropriate punctuation to connect independent clauses. Suggestion: separate ideas with a semicolon or period and remove fillers for clarity.

× Yes, and it's painting.

✓ Yes, and it's painting.

This sentence is acceptable grammatically, but for greater naturalness you could say 'Yes, it's painting' or 'Yes, I have been painting since childhood.' No article error here; included for completeness.