Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g. “helps me to…” repeated) and correct word choice (use “some” not “few”, “binge-watch” or “watching films” rather than “watching binge movies”).

Exemplo: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading English books because they improve my vocabulary and help me learn new expressions; additionally, I like watching films to relax after a busy day.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and use correct tense and word forms. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a specific example. Correct mistakes such as “oftenly” -> “often”, and simplify phrases like “after completing my walk.”

Exemplo: I didn't have a particular hobby as a child, but I often played with my friends in the evenings after walking home from school. Playing games with them always lifted my mood and helped me relax.

Sugestão: Be direct and grammatically correct. Avoid repetition of previous points; if repeating, add a short new detail. Fix vocabulary errors (‘copy’ -> ‘hobby’, ‘really fond of’ needs restructuring) and use appropriate tense and linking words.

Exemplo: No, I haven't kept any hobby from childhood. As I said, I mainly played with friends back then, and although I still enjoy social activities, my current hobbies are reading and watching films.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and add a concise reason with a comparison. Use correct grammar (singular/plural agreement) and smoother phrasing. Replace awkward phrases like “did not find any exact hobbies” with “don’t share the same hobbies” and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: No, my family and I don't share the same hobbies. For example, I enjoy watching films to unwind after a busy day, whereas they prefer outdoor activities like gardening or walking.

× I have few hobbies as I am fond of reading English books and watching binge movies as it helps me to refresh my mind and also side by side it improves my vocabulary which helps me to do well in the English.

✓ I have a few hobbies: I am fond of reading English books and binge‑watching movies because they help me refresh my mind and, at the same time, improve my vocabulary, which helps me do well in English.

Error type 22 (Article errors) and 14 (Quantifier): 'few' without an article implies almost none; 'a few' indicates some. Also multiple style issues: 'watching binge movies' is incorrect word order—use 'binge‑watching movies'. Use plural verb references 'they' for plural hobbies and avoid unnecessary articles like 'the' before 'English'. Combine clauses with clearer connectors.

× When I was a kid, I remember I did not have any specific hobby, but I like to play with my friend oftenly in the evening time after doing after completing my walk.

✓ When I was a kid, I remember I did not have any specific hobby, but I liked to play with my friend often in the evenings after finishing our walk.

Error type 5 (Past tense issue): The sentence mixes past and present tenses; it should consistently use past tense 'liked' to match 'When I was a kid'. 'Oftenly' is not a word; use 'often'. 'In the evening time' is wordy—use 'in the evenings'. 'After doing after completing my walk' is redundant; use 'after finishing our walk'. Also use plural or consistent pronoun 'friend' vs 'friends' depending on context.

× It helps me to improve my mood.

✓ It helped me improve my mood.

Error type 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) and tense consistency: In context about childhood activities, maintain past tense 'helped'. Also drop the infinitive 'to' after 'helped' (both forms are possible, but 'helped me improve' is more natural).

× No, as I mentioned earlier, I did not have any specific copy which I was in my present but I really fond of playing with my friends which helped me to lift my spirits.

✓ No. As I mentioned earlier, I did not have any specific hobby in childhood, but I was really fond of playing with my friends, which helped lift my spirits.

Error type 26 (Sentence structure errors): The original contains wrong word 'copy' for 'hobby', awkward clause 'which I was in my present', and mixed tenses. Correct word choice and simplify: 'did not have any specific hobby in childhood' and 'was really fond of' (past). 'Which helped lift my spirits' is a reduced clause; remove extra 'to' after 'helped'.

× No, not really. I did not find any exact hobbies as my family members because I love to watch movies as they don't.

✓ No, not really. I do not share the same hobbies as my family members because I love to watch movies and they do not.

Error type 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) and tense consistency: 'I did not find any exact hobbies as my family members' is awkward. Use 'I do not share the same hobbies' for present habit. 'They don't' should be expanded to 'they do not' to match formality. Maintain present tense since question asks about current hobbies.

× Watching movies help me to refresh my mind from the hectic routine of my day.

✓ Watching movies helps me refresh my mind from the hectic routine of my day.

Error type 8 (Verb + -ing form) and subject-verb agreement: 'Watching movies' as a singular activity requires 'helps' (third person singular). Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' and 'from' is acceptable but consider 'escape from' for style.