Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar and word choice, and organise the answer with a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Use linking words (for example, “and” or “also”) to connect ideas and give concrete examples of what you grow.

Exemplo: I enjoy gardening. I have a small garden on my veranda where I grow a variety of flowers and vegetables. For example, I grow tomatoes and chillies to use in our family meals, and marigolds and roses to decorate the house.

Sugestão: Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, start with a clear topic sentence, then provide a specific detail or example. Keep sentences short and avoid grammar errors like “does have” or “was to collect.”

Exemplo: Yes, I had a hobby as a child: collecting toys. I especially liked small toy cars and I kept them on a shelf, arranging them by colour and size.

Sugestão: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer first, then briefly explain how your interests changed over time with one or two specific examples. Avoid unfinished sentences and redundancy.

Exemplo: No, I don’t still have a childhood hobby. My interests changed over the years: as a child I collected toys, then I enjoyed reading, and now I spend most of my free time gardening.

Sugestão: Answer directly, correct grammar (e.g. ‘my mother’s hobby is cooking’), and give brief specific examples of family members’ hobbies. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use linking words like ‘but’ or ‘however’ only when needed.

Exemplo: No, we have different hobbies. For example, my mother enjoys cooking, my father likes reading and fixing things, while I prefer gardening.

× Yes, I do have my hobbies, my hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have hobbies.

Redundant article/possessive and repetition. Use 'have hobbies' or 'have a hobby'. Remove 'my' and duplicate 'my hobbies' for clarity.

× My hobby is gardening.

✓ My hobby is gardening.

Sentence is correct; 'hobby' and 'gardening' agree in number. No change needed.

× I have a little garden garden in my Baranda.

✓ I have a small garden on my veranda.

Article and word choice: use 'a' with singular noun 'garden' and use 'small' rather than 'little garden garden'. Preposition 'on' is standard for veranda and correct spelling is 'veranda'.

× There is I planted various kind of flowers at the same time, vegetables.

✓ There I planted various kinds of flowers and vegetables at the same time.

Original mixes 'There is' with past action and has noun number error. Use past tense 'I planted' and plural 'kinds'. Also combine 'flowers and vegetables' for clarity.

× I grow vegetables out there, uh, which fulfill my family needs eligible and uh, flowers, yes.

✓ I grow vegetables out there which fulfill my family's needs, and I also grow flowers.

Need possessive 'family's' and remove incorrect word 'eligible'. Maintain present tense 'grow' and improve sentence structure by splitting ideas with 'and'.

× Yes I does have a hobbies when I was child and at that time my hobbies was to collect different types of toys.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies when I was a child, and at that time my hobby was collecting different types of toys.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'does have' is wrong for past; use 'had'. 'a hobbies' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'hobby' or 'hobbies'. 'when I was child' needs article 'a child'. Use 'was collecting' or 'was collecting' can be 'was collecting' but 'was collecting' replaced by gerund 'collecting' after 'was'. Also 'hobbies was' should be 'hobby was'.

× Basically cars was my most favorite.

✓ Basically, cars were my most favorite.

Subject 'cars' is plural so verb must be 'were' not 'was'. Alternatively say 'My favorite was cars' or 'Cars were my favorite'.

× No, I do not carry a hobby which from my childhood to till date.

✓ No, I have not carried a single hobby from my childhood until now.

Tense and verb choice: use present perfect 'have not carried' to indicate continuity to present. 'Carry a hobby' is unnatural; use 'carry' -> 'carried' or better 'have not had a single hobby'. Change 'to till date' to 'until now'.

× However, I had different hobbies in my childhood and my hobbies change over years and years.

✓ However, I had different hobbies in my childhood and my hobbies changed over the years.

Maintain past tense 'changed' for actions in the past. Use 'over the years' for idiomatic expression and remove redundancy.

× Sometimes it started with collecting toys and now I'm.

✓ Sometimes it started with collecting toys, and now I have different hobbies.

Original ends abruptly without a verb after 'I'm'. Complete the sentence by stating what 'I am' or use 'I have' to indicate current situation.

× No, uh, my family members have different hobbies according to their interest.

✓ No, my family members have different hobbies according to their interests.

Pluralize 'interests' to agree with 'family members'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× However, I perceived a different hobbies as I told you that my hobby is gardening, however my mom uh, hobbies is cooking and my dad hob.

✓ However, I have different hobbies; as I told you, my hobby is gardening. My mom's hobby is cooking and my dad's hobby is [missing].

Pronoun and possessive errors: use 'have' not 'perceived'. 'a different hobbies' mixes article with plural. Use possessive 'my mom's hobby' and 'my dad's hobby'. Original 'hob' is incomplete; indicate missing word. Also split into clear sentences and remove 'uh'.