Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence. Reduce redundancy (e.g., 'relaxed and unwind and comfortable' is repetitive). Use linking words to list hobbies and give a brief reason. Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: I don't have any hobbies at the moment, but I used to enjoy baking, reading and watching films. For example, baking helped me relax and try new recipes, while reading improved my vocabulary. Overall, these activities made my free time feel calm and enjoyable.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and simplify sentence structure. Use linking words to add a specific detail about frequency or reason. Correct small grammar issues ('on weekends', 'learn to swim').

Exemplo: Yes, I used to enjoy swimming when I was a child. I took regular lessons on weekends to learn to swim, so I improved quickly. Because of those lessons, swimming became one of my favorite activities.

Sugestão: Make the topic sentence natural and correct word order: 'Karate has been one of my hobbies since childhood.' Explain briefly how it helps you using cohesive linking and avoid repeating words ('makes me motivate' → 'motivates me').

Exemplo: Karate has been one of my hobbies since childhood. It motivates me and gives me discipline, which helps me focus when I study or tackle tasks I dislike. Because of karate, I feel more confident and productive.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific contrasts and a linking word (e.g., 'however', 'so'). Correct grammar ('the same hobbies', 'different kinds of hobbies', 'we enjoy'). Provide a brief consequence or personal feeling without repeating 'unfortunately'.

Exemplo: No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family. For example, my parents like gardening while I prefer sports, so we usually spend free time separately. However, we sometimes try each other's hobbies to spend time together.

× I don't have any hobbies right now but I used to have a lot of hobbies in the past, for example baking and reading books and watching movies because they made me feel relaxed and unwind and comfortable at the same time.

✓ I don't have any hobbies right now, but I used to have many in the past; for example, baking, reading, and watching movies because they made me feel relaxed, comfortable, and able to unwind.

The original sentence had run-on structure and awkward word choices. Use a comma before but to join independent clauses, replace 'a lot of hobbies' with 'many' for concision, use parallel lists ('baking, reading, and watching movies'), and use the correct adjective 'comfortable' and the verb phrase 'able to unwind' (or 'helped me unwind') for clarity. Also add punctuation to separate ideas. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× When I was a child, I used to like to swim in the pool because I had a lot of lessons in the weekends to learn swim and that was one of hobbies that I really enjoyed as a child.

✓ When I was a child, I used to enjoy swimming in the pool because I had many lessons on the weekends to learn to swim, and that was one of the hobbies I really enjoyed.

Issues: preposition 'in the weekends' should be 'on the weekends'; use gerund 'swimming' after 'enjoy'; 'learn swim' requires infinitive 'learn to swim'; use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' before countable noun 'lessons'; include article 'the' before 'hobbies' and remove redundant 'as a child'. This fixes sentence structure and collocation errors. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Doing karate is my one of the hobbies that I have had since childhood. It makes me motivate and makes me productive to study or to do things that I don't like. So I really love doing that.

✓ Karate is one of the hobbies I have had since childhood. It motivates me and makes me more productive when studying or doing tasks I don't enjoy, so I really love practicing it.

Problems: 'my one of the hobbies' is incorrect word order; 'doing karate' is acceptable but 'karate is one of the hobbies' is smoother. 'It makes me motivate' is incorrect — use the verb 'motivate' with 'it motivates me'. Use comparative 'more productive' and correct preposition 'when studying' or 'when doing'. 'Doing that' is vague; 'practicing it' is clearer. This addresses adjective/adverb choices and sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Unfortunately I don't have same hobbies as my family members because each of us have different kind of hobbies that they like and they really enjoy their own company.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because each of us has different kinds of hobbies that we like, and we really enjoy our own activities.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'same hobbies'; subject-verb agreement 'each of us have' should be 'each of us has' (each is singular); 'different kind of hobbies' should be 'different kinds of hobbies' or 'different types of hobbies'; avoid shifting pronouns — use 'we' consistently rather than 'they'. Also 'enjoy their own company' is odd for hobbies; 'enjoy our own activities' is clearer. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× So unfortunately it's really sad to not able to be shared. But I don't have same.

✓ So unfortunately it's sad that our hobbies cannot be shared, and I don't have the same hobbies as they do.

Original fragments: 'to not able to be shared' is ungrammatical — use 'cannot be shared' or 'are not shared'. 'But I don't have same' is incomplete; include noun and article: 'I don't have the same hobbies.' Combine into one coherent statement or two complete sentences. This fixes sentence structure and clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 26