Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples with brief details. Avoid run-on phrases and correct tense/grammar errors (e.g., "which I recently started" -> attach to photography; "which I have done since I was a child"). Use linking words to separate ideas.

Exemplo: I have several hobbies. For example, I recently took up photography and enjoy shooting landscapes on weekends, and I also practice boxing as a way to stay fit. I’ve enjoyed painting and drawing since I was a child, so I still do that sometimes.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give specific examples in coherent sentences. Correct awkward phrasing (e.g., "I got a lot of" -> "I did a lot of"). Use linking words like "for example" or "such as" to list activities and explain briefly why you enjoyed them.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I did a lot of arts and crafts as a child. For example, I spent hours painting, drawing, cutting and sticking paper to make collages, and I often made handmade greeting cards for family members.

Sugestão: Be decisive and avoid repeating phrases like "I think." Start with a clear statement that names the lifelong hobby, then give one or two specific supporting details. Fix grammar ("since I started" -> "since I was a child") and use linking words such as "also" correctly.

Exemplo: Drawing and creating art is a hobby I’ve had since I was a child. I also enjoy exploring nature — for instance, I often walk forest trails and sometimes swim in rivers when I go hiking.

Sugestão: Make a clear direct response and avoid uncertain language like "I think" and double negatives. State which hobbies you share and give brief details about how you share them (e.g., frequency or context). Correct phrasing ("me and my mother" -> "my mother and I").

Exemplo: Yes. My mother and I both enjoy painting and drawing, and we sometimes paint together on weekends. My father and I used to play tennis together regularly when I was younger, so playing tennis was a shared activity.

× Oh yes, I do have several hobbies such as boxing, surfing, photography which I recently started and painting or drawing which have been doing sometimes was a child and there are a few others which I cannot recall.

✓ Oh yes, I do have several hobbies such as boxing and surfing, photography, which I recently started, and painting or drawing, which I did sometimes when I was a child; there are a few others I cannot recall.

This sentence has incorrect verb forms and structure. 'have been doing sometimes was a child' mixes present perfect continuous and wrong tense; it should be 'did sometimes when I was a child' (simple past) because the activity occurred in childhood. Also list items need clear punctuation and conjunctions (use 'and' between items). Use commas to separate relative clauses and correct relative clause placement ('which I recently started' modifies photography). Use 'I cannot recall' without 'there are' repetition.

× Yes, but I was a child. I got a lot of painting, drawing and too much of art activities, cutting, sticking papers and putting all those things together. And I remember making greeting and other such things.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I did a lot of painting and drawing and many other art activities, cutting and sticking paper and putting things together. I also remember making greeting cards and similar things.

Pronoun and verb choice are incorrect. 'I got a lot of painting' is wrong; use 'I did a lot of painting' or 'I did a lot of paintings.' 'Too much of art activities' should be 'many other art activities.' 'Sticking papers' should be 'sticking paper' or 'sticking pieces of paper.' 'Greeting' needs a noun: 'greeting cards.' Rearranged sentence order for clarity and correct tense (simple past for childhood activities).

× I think drawing and creating art is one such hobby, which I think I've had since started, but also I think exploring in the nature and few trails in the forest and playing in the water.

✓ I think drawing and creating art is one hobby I have had since I was young, and I also enjoy exploring nature, walking a few trails in the forest, and playing in the water.

Tense and phrasing are incorrect: 'I've had since started' is ungrammatical; use 'I have had since I was young' or 'since childhood.' 'Exploring in the nature' should be 'exploring nature.' 'Few trails' needs an article: 'a few trails' or 'walking a few trails.' Use parallel gerund forms ('exploring,' 'walking,' 'playing') and present simple/present perfect appropriately for ongoing hobbies.

× I think the hobby of painting and drawing is one such hobby that me and my mother share.

✓ I think the hobby of painting and drawing is one that my mother and I share.

Pronoun case is incorrect: use 'my mother and I' (subjective case) rather than 'me and my mother.' Also remove redundancy ('hobby' repeated). 'One that' is a natural relative clause.

× And I would not say that it's a hobby, but that my father and I both used to play tennis.

✓ I would not call it a hobby, but my father and I both used to play tennis.

Unnecessary conjunction and wording issues: 'say that it's a hobby, but that my father and I...' is awkward. Use 'call it a hobby' and join clauses simply with 'but.' 'Used to play' correctly indicates past habitual action.

× So I think that's one hobby that my father wanted me to share.

✓ So I think that's one hobby my father wanted me to share with him.

Preposition/pronoun usage: 'wanted me to share' needs an object or prepositional phrase to indicate with whom the hobby was shared. Adding 'with him' clarifies meaning.