Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your hobby, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (when/how often you practice, why you enjoy it). Keep sentences short and use correct tense and simple linking words (for example, “also”, “because”, “so”). Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases (e.g., “I have answered her”).

Exemplo: I enjoy dancing. I practice every morning and again from 7:00 to 9:00 PM. I like it because it keeps me fit and helps me relax. Also, on weekends I sometimes work at IKEA, which is good for my family’s income.

Sugestão: Correct obvious mistakes and be specific. Begin with a clear statement (e.g., “Yes, I did”). Avoid strange word choices ("when I was a dog"). Mention specific activities and how you learned them, using past tense and linking words such as “because” or “so”.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved dancing and I used to watch dance videos on YouTube to learn moves. Because I practised a lot, I became more confident performing in school shows.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use consistent tense. Say that dancing has been your long-term hobby, then add a clear reason and one specific detail (for example, how often you practise or a memory). Use linking words like “since” and “because”.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. I have loved dancing since I was a child because it makes me happy and energetic. I practise three times a week and I still take part in local performances.

Sugestão: Be clearer and avoid unrelated or confusing words. Directly state whether your family shares your hobby. If not, give one or two specific reasons and use linking words such as “but” or “however”. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

Exemplo: No, my family members do not share my hobby. They prefer watching films and working, while I enjoy dancing. However, some relatives do not fully accept my dancing because they worry about others’ opinions.

× Yes, I have already.

✓ Yes, I do.

The student used present perfect 'have' without an object incorrectly. The question asks about current hobbies so simple present 'I do' is appropriate. Use 'I have' with a noun (e.g., 'I have some') or 'I do' to mean 'I have hobbies'.

× I have answered her in some time.

✓ I have answered her several times.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. If the student means they replied to someone repeatedly, use present perfect with a plural time expression: 'have answered her several times.' This fits the present context and clarifies frequency.

× I love working also in IKEA's weekend are always good news for my family and I love dancing.

✓ I also love working at IKEA; weekends are always good news for my family, and I love dancing.

Use preposition 'at' with company names (work at IKEA). The sentence run-on needs punctuation and conjunctions. 'IKEA's weekend' is incorrect; 'weekends' is plural. Break into clauses and use 'also' before the verb phrase for clarity.

× I am a dancer also.

✓ I am also a dancer.

Word order: 'also' usually precedes the adjective or comes after the subject; 'I am also a dancer' is natural in English.

× I always practice to do morning and seven to 9:00 PM.

✓ I always practice in the morning and from 7:00 to 9:00 PM.

Use 'in the morning' for times of day. Use 'from ... to ...' for time ranges and include 'PM'. 'Practice to do' is incorrect; use 'practice' followed by a time expression.

× Yes, uh, when I was a dog I loved, I loved dancing.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I loved dancing.

'When I was a dog' is wrong word choice—use 'child'. Maintain past simple 'I loved dancing' for childhood habits.

× I always watching videos on uh videos are YouTube, uh, when I was a child.

✓ I always watched videos on YouTube when I was a child.

Use past simple 'watched' for habitual actions in the past. Remove filler words and redundant phrases; 'on YouTube' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Yes I do when I visit I always loved dancing, dancing and I when I am becoming young then I also love the dancing because dancing is my best hobby in my life.

✓ Yes, I do. Since I was young I have always loved dancing; it has been my favorite hobby.

The original mixes tenses and uses awkward phrasing. Use present perfect 'have always loved' to express a hobby that began in the past and continues now. 'When I am becoming young' is incorrect; use 'since I was young'. Simplify repetition.

× No, we don't have the same office because of the stimulation.

✓ No, we don't have the same hobbies because of different interests.

'Office' and 'stimulation' are incorrect word choices. The question asks about hobbies; correct pronoun/word selection: 'hobbies' and 'different interests'.

× I always been the dance lover boy.

✓ I have always been a boy who loves dancing.

Use present perfect 'have been' for a state continuing to the present. Also adjust noun phrase to natural English: 'a boy who loves dancing' or 'a dance lover.'

× But my friend, you are worried about the same movie position and what people are saying about me.

✓ But my friends worry about my career choices and what people say about me.

Original contains second-person 'you' incorrectly and unclear phrase 'same movie position.' 'Friends' plural fits context, 'worry about my career choices' or 'what people say about me' is natural.

× And so we they did not accept me as a dancer.

✓ So they did not accept me as a dancer.

Remove redundant pronoun 'we' and keep subject 'they'. Use simple past 'did not accept' to describe past rejection. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatical.