Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammatical mistakes (e.g., "when I was a child" and "school functions").

Exemplo: Yes, I have several hobbies. For example, when I was younger I enjoyed dancing and often took part in school functions, and I also like listening to music now.

Sugestão: Use past tense for childhood and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence about past hobbies, then contrast with the present using a linking word (e.g., "however"). Keep sentences short and specific.

Exemplo: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed acting and dancing in school plays. However, these days I prefer listening to music rather than participating in performances.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a topic sentence using present perfect or past for long-term hobbies, then give specific examples and a brief update. Remove fillers like "uh" and correct collocations ("take part in" not "take participate").

Exemplo: Yes, I have loved dancing since childhood and I took part in many school annual shows. Now, however, I enjoy listening to music more than performing.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct answer (yes/no) and then explain with specific comparisons. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect word order. Use linking words like "however" or "for example."

Exemplo: Not exactly. Some family members enjoy singing, while my sister prefers acting and does roles in local shows. However, most of us share an interest in music.

× Yes I have many hobbies as I am in childhood.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies from my childhood.

The original uses present continuous idea 'I am in childhood' which is ungrammatical. Use the present simple 'I have' with the prepositional phrase 'from my childhood' to indicate origin. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and use 'my childhood' not 'in childhood.'

× I have many hobbies like I usually prefer to do dance even I participate in many schools function also.

✓ I have many hobbies; usually I prefer to dance and I also participate in many school functions.

Problems include incorrect phrasing 'prefer to do dance' and 'schools function.' Use the verb 'prefer to dance' or 'prefer dancing.' Use plural 'school functions.' Replace 'like' with a connector and add 'also' in correct position. Use semicolon or conjunction to join clauses.

× Yes, in my childhood I have many hobbies.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I had many hobbies.

Referring to childhood requires past tense. 'Have' should be changed to past 'had.' Keep comma after 'Yes.'

× Like I usually prefer to go for acting or for dancing as well.

✓ I usually preferred acting or dancing as well.

Context is past (when you were a child), so use past tense 'preferred.' Also remove 'go for' which is unnatural; use 'preferred acting or dancing.'

× But in present I usually prefer to listen some songs.

✓ But at present I usually prefer to listen to songs.

Use the phrase 'at present' and the verb 'listen to' which requires the preposition 'to.' 'Some songs' is acceptable but 'songs' is more natural here.

× Nowadays I don't really prefer to go for a dance participation or any different activities.

✓ Nowadays I don't really prefer to participate in dances or other activities.

Use 'participate in' rather than 'go for a dance participation.' 'Different activities' should be 'other activities.' Use present simple 'don't prefer' is fine.

× Yes, in my childhood I have a hobby to dance.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I had a hobby of dancing.

Again, refer to past: use 'had.' Use 'a hobby of dancing' or 'my hobby was dancing' instead of 'a hobby to dance.'

× Even I took many activities regarding dance.

✓ I also took part in many dance activities.

The phrase 'took many activities' is incorrect. Use 'took part in' or 'participated in' and 'dance activities.' 'Even' is unnecessary; 'also' fits better.

× Even in my school annual functions, I usually prefer to take participate in dancing and acting.

✓ Even in my school's annual functions, I usually participated in dancing and acting.

Use possessive 'my school's annual functions.' 'Take participate in' is ungrammatical; use 'participated in.' Use past tense for childhood context. 'Dancing and acting' as nouns are fine.

× But uh, as I am adult, I usually prefer to listen some songs.

✓ But now, as an adult, I usually prefer to listen to songs.

Use 'now' for present reference, and 'as an adult' requires the article 'an.' 'Listen to songs' requires 'to.' Remove filler 'uh.'

× I have lived at noon because in my family members there are many persons who like singing and other but uh some of them not like dancing as my sister likes to do some acting and play a role.

✓ I come from a musical family because many of my family members like singing, while some of them do not like dancing; for example, my sister prefers acting and playing roles.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and confused. 'I have lived at noon' is meaningless. Replace with clear idea 'I come from a musical family.' Use 'many of my family members' and 'do not like dancing.' Clarify sister's preference with 'for example' and parallel verbs 'acting and playing roles.' Remove filler 'uh.'