Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity: use correct verb forms and simplify sentences to avoid confusion. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant phrases like "I got my lights" which is unclear.

Exemplo: I have several hobbies, especially writing and kickboxing. I started writing in grade 10 and enjoy keeping a travel journal because visiting new places inspires my ideas. Additionally, I have done kickboxing since grade 6, which helps me stay fit and energetic.

Sugestão: Improve coherence and use linking words to make the timeline clear; correct minor grammar ("too much busy" -> "too busy"). Add a brief reason or example to make it more specific and natural, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoyed dancing as a child. I would watch tutorials on YouTube and practice the steps by myself. However, as I got older I became too busy with school, so I stopped, and now I sometimes miss practicing because it was a fun way to relieve stress.

Sugestão: Good structure and clear content; improve natural phrasing and add a concrete example or brief detail about training or achievements to make it more specific. Use linking words for flow (e.g., "because", "so").

Exemplo: Yes, I've practised kickboxing since childhood, mainly because my brother introduced me to it. Because of regular training, it not only keeps me physically fit but also improves my focus and discipline; for example, I train three times a week and follow a set routine.

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and coherent: begin with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific comparisons using linking words. Correct awkward phrasing ("tends to learn to do DIY time to time" -> "likes doing DIY projects occasionally"). Avoid filler phrases like "So yeah."

Exemplo: Yes, some of my hobbies are similar to my family's. For instance, my mother enjoys DIY projects and I learned several crafts from her. Also, my siblings and I all go to the gym regularly, so fitness is another shared interest.

× Yes, I have lots of hobbies and that includes writing too.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, and that includes writing.

Use 'many' with countable plural noun 'hobbies' in formal statements. 'Lots of' is informal; also add a comma and remove redundant 'too'. Suggestion: Use 'many' for countable nouns in formal speech and place commas for clarity.

× I'm very fond of writing and I learned it when I was in grade 10 and I got my lights and as soon as possible.

✓ I'm very fond of writing; I learned it when I was in grade 10 and took every opportunity to improve.

Original contains unclear phrase 'got my lights and as soon as possible' which is ungrammatical. Use past simple 'learned' for completed action, and rephrase to 'took every opportunity' to convey meaning. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use clear idiomatic expressions.

× I have went to many places and it keeps my mind fresh and I'm full of energy.

✓ I have gone to many places, and it keeps my mind fresh and makes me feel full of energy.

After 'have' use past participle 'gone' not 'went'. Present perfect 'have gone' is correct for experiences. Also ensure parallel verbs and add 'makes me feel' for clarity.

× I am also very keen of kickboxing which I learned since I was in grade 6.

✓ I am also very keen on kickboxing, which I have practiced since I was in grade 6.

Use the preposition 'keen on' (not 'keen of'). Also 'since' with a starting point requires present perfect 'have practiced' rather than simple past 'learned' to express ongoing activity since grade 6.

× I used to play songs on YouTube and learn steps by myself.

✓ I used to play songs on YouTube and learn steps by myself.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action. No correction needed.

× But as I grew older, I left dancing because I was too much busy in my studies and everyday activities.

✓ But as I grew older, I stopped dancing because I was too busy with my studies and daily activities.

Use 'stopped' rather than 'left' for ceasing an activity. 'Too much busy' is incorrect; use 'too busy' and the correct preposition is 'with' not 'in'. Use 'daily' instead of 'everyday' when used before a noun describing activities.

× But I miss that hobby.

✓ But I miss that hobby.

Sentence is correct and appropriately uses present simple to express current feeling. No correction needed.

× Yes, I have been doing kickboxing since I was a child and have continued to do so.

✓ Yes, I have been doing kickboxing since I was a child and have continued to do so.

Sentence is correct: present perfect continuous 'have been doing' with 'since' is appropriate to show an activity continuing from the past to present. No correction needed.

× It helps me keep my mind fresh and my body healthy and also helps me be disciplined.

✓ It helps me keep my mind fresh, keeps my body healthy, and helps me be disciplined.

Maintain parallel structure by using consistent verb forms for each coordinated phrase. Add commas for clarity. No tense change required.

× Well, that's quite interesting question.

✓ Well, that's quite an interesting question.

Missing article 'an' before the noun phrase 'interesting question'. Add 'an' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct.

× My hobby matches with my mother because she's a creative person and she tends to learn to do DIY time to time.

✓ My hobby matches my mother's because she's a creative person and tends to do DIY from time to time.

Say 'matches my mother's' to compare hobbies (use possessive). 'Learn to do DIY' is awkward; 'tends to do DIY' or 'does DIY from time to time' is idiomatic. 'Time to time' needs 'from' and hyphenation is unnecessary in speech.

× And I have also learned that hobby because of her and all my siblings and I go to gym for workouts.

✓ I also picked up that hobby from her, and all my siblings and I go to the gym to work out.

Use 'picked up' or 'learned' with 'from her' to indicate source. Word order 'all my siblings and I' is fine but 'go to gym' needs article 'the gym' and 'workouts' should be 'to work out' for verb form. Maintain parallel structure.

× So yeah, there are quite similarities between us.

✓ So yeah, there are quite a few similarities between us.

'Quite similarities' is incorrect; use 'quite a few similarities' or 'quite a lot of similarities'. 'Quite a few' is appropriate for countable plural 'similarities'.