Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple), avoid filler words, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word when giving examples and be specific about what you read.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy reading in my free time. I usually read novels and comic books, and recently I’ve been interested in contemporary fiction and graphic novels. For example, I just finished a popular novel about urban life, which I found very engaging.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and add a specific detail or short reason. Remove fillers and repetitive words. Use linking words to connect your memory to its impact.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to love riding bicycles with my friends around my neighborhood. It was a memorable time because we explored nearby parks and felt very free, so those outings helped me become more independent.

Sugestão: Start with a concise topic sentence, use correct tense and avoid phrases like 'when I don't have anything to do.' Add a linking word to explain how often and what you draw, and include a specific example to show depth.

Exemplo: Yes, I have drawn since I was a child and I still enjoy it. Nowadays I often draw in the evenings, especially sketches and character designs, and for example last week I finished a charcoal portrait that I’m proud of.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly with correct grammar. Avoid fillers and awkward phrasing. Give a brief reason with a linking word and offer a small example of different hobbies to make your answer specific.

Exemplo: No, we don’t share the same hobbies because there is a large age gap. For example, my parents prefer gardening and cooking, while I prefer drawing and reading.

× I realize reading books when I have leisure time, I usually read a novel or. Read a comic books.

✓ I enjoy reading books when I have leisure time; I usually read a novel or a comic book.

The student used 'realize' incorrectly; the intended meaning is the habit/enjoyment, so use 'enjoy' and the gerund 'reading' correctly. Also punctuation and sentence join needed. 'comic books' should be singular with article 'a' to parallel 'a novel' or use plural consistently. Improve by using 'I enjoy reading books' and ensuring noun number and articles match.

× I realize reading books when I have leisure time, I usually read a novel or. Read a comic books.

✓ I enjoy reading books when I have leisure time; I usually read a novel or a comic book.

The phrase 'comic books' conflicted with the singular article pattern 'a novel or'. Use 'a comic book' to match the singular 'a novel', or change both to plurals. Ensure articles and plural nouns agree.

× When I was a little child, I used to love riding bicycle with my friends in my neighborhood.

✓ When I was a child, I used to love riding bicycles with my friends in my neighborhood.

Use 'a child' rather than 'a little child' for natural English, though 'little' is not strictly wrong. 'Riding bicycle' is ungrammatical; use plural 'bicycles' or 'a bicycle' depending on meaning. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit. Suggest saying 'riding bicycles' or 'riding a bicycle'.

× I think, uh, it's it, uh, it was a memorable time.

✓ I think it was a memorable time.

The original has disfluencies and redundant pronouns. Remove filler 'uh' and the repeated 'it's it' to produce a clear past-tense statement. Keep tense consistent with 'was'.

× Yes, it is drawing. I really love drawing since I was a child and I still have that hobby.

✓ Yes, it's drawing. I have loved drawing since I was a child, and I still have that hobby.

When referring to an action started in the past and continuing now, use present perfect 'have loved' not simple present 'really love ... since'. Also contractions are acceptable: 'it's drawing'. Ensure tense expresses continuity.

× Nowadays in my leisure time when I don't have anything to do, I usually draw.

✓ Nowadays, in my leisure time when I don't have anything to do, I usually draw.

Grammar is acceptable but needs a comma after 'Nowadays' for clarity. Tenses are consistent: present habitual 'usually draw' is correct. Suggest adding comma to improve flow.

× No, because the age gap between my family members and I are a huge, uh, quite huge, so we don't share the same hobbies with each other.

✓ No, because the age gap between my family members and me is quite large, so we don't share the same hobbies.

Use object pronoun 'me' after 'between'. The subject of 'is' is 'the age gap', which is singular, so use 'is' not 'are'. Phrase 'a huge, quite huge' is repetitive; use 'quite large' or 'very large'. Also 'share the same hobbies with each other' is redundant; 'share the same hobbies' suffices.