Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: correct grammar (listening to music), avoid redundant phrases (recharge my batteries / refresh my mind repeated), and limit to maximum 4–5 sentences. Add one specific example to make content concrete.

Exemplo: I enjoy listening to music and reading storybooks in my free time. For example, I usually listen to acoustic playlists while reading short novels on weekend evenings because it helps me relax after a busy day.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and word choice (use past tense: pursued, rode a bicycle), remove incorrect words (salaries, bone companions), and be specific about frequency or setting. Keep to a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. As a child I loved riding my bicycle around the village every afternoon with my friends, and we often played basketball at the school court on weekends.

Sugestão: Use clearer, more natural phrasing and correct vocabulary (nowadays, spare time, close friends). Avoid repetition and keep to 2–4 sentences. Give a brief example of when you ride now.

Exemplo: Yes. I have kept cycling since childhood, and nowadays I still ride whenever I have spare time. For instance, I cycle around the park with close friends two or three times a week to clear my head and stay active.

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise: use direct language (No, I don't usually share the same hobbies), correct phrasing (watching TV, read storybooks), and add a brief reason or contrast with a specific example.

Exemplo: No, I don't usually share the same hobbies. For example, my parents like watching TV dramas in the evenings, whereas I prefer reading short novels because it helps me learn new things and relax.

× Well, I'm absolutely passionate about listening music and reading story books as my hobbies in my leisure time.

✓ Well, I'm absolutely passionate about listening to music and reading story books as my hobbies in my leisure time.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object: 'listening to music'. This is a fixed verb + preposition collocation. Add 'to' to make the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× Moreover, it helps me to recharge my batteries and refresh my mind.

✓ Moreover, they help me recharge my batteries and refresh my mind.

The subject refers to two hobbies (listening to music and reading), which is plural, so use 'they' and the base verb form without 'to' after 'help' is preferred in this context: 'help me recharge'. Change pronoun and verb form for subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing.

× It also helps me to have a break from my hectic and motorous routine.

✓ It also helps me take a break from my hectic and monotonous routine.

Use 'take a break' rather than 'have a break' for more natural English. 'Motorous' is not correct; the intended word is 'monotonous'. Also, after 'helps' the base verb 'take' is more natural than 'to have'.

× Yes, I vividly remember that I pursue a riding of bicycle as a hobby in my formative years.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember that I pursued riding a bicycle as a hobby in my formative years.

This refers to past events, so use the past tense 'pursued' rather than present 'pursue'. Also, 'riding of bicycle' is unnatural; use 'riding a bicycle'.

× In my salaries, I like to enjoy riding a bicycle slowly with my friends in a village, and I also like to play basketball with my bone companions as a child.

✓ In my childhood, I enjoyed riding a bicycle slowly with my friends in the village, and I also liked to play basketball with my close companions.

'In my salaries' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'in my childhood'. Use past tense 'enjoyed' and 'liked' for childhood activities. 'Bone companions' is incorrect; 'close companions' or 'friends' is appropriate. 'In the village' is more natural for a past habitual context.

× Yes, definitely. As I mentioned earlier, riding a bicycle was my hobby in my formative years and furthermore, in present days I usually ride a bicycle whenever I have a lesser time with my bone companions because it also helps me to remember my childhood days and also refresh my mind.

✓ Yes, definitely. As I mentioned earlier, riding a bicycle was my hobby in my formative years and, nowadays, I usually ride a bicycle whenever I have a little time with my friends because it helps me remember my childhood and refresh my mind.

Use 'nowadays' instead of 'in present days'. 'A lesser time' is ungrammatical; use 'a little time'. 'Bone companions' should be 'friends'. After 'helps' use the base verb 'remember' and 'refresh' (no 'to'). Remove redundant 'also' for conciseness.

× Well, it's not really my thing of having same hobbies as my family members.

✓ Well, it's not really my thing to have the same hobbies as my family members.

The phrase should be 'to have the same hobbies' not 'of having same hobbies'. Include the definite article 'the' before 'same hobbies'. Use infinitive 'to have' after 'my thing'.

× For example, my family members have a hobby of watching television in their leisure time and I prefer to read story books in my free time because it helps to enhance my knowledge as well as to refresh my mind.

✓ For example, my family members enjoy watching television in their leisure time, and I prefer to read story books in my free time because it helps enhance my knowledge and refresh my mind.

Use 'enjoy watching' rather than 'have a hobby of watching'. After 'helps' the base verbs 'enhance' and 'refresh' are more natural than 'to enhance'/'to refresh'. Use 'and' instead of 'as well as' for simpler coordination. Also add a comma before 'and I' for clarity.