Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Corrige errores gramaticales y usa frases más naturales. Evita redundancias y mantén un máximo de 5 oraciones. Sé más específico sobre qué tipo de baile y cómo te beneficia. Usa conectores para enlazar ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy dancing. I take contemporary dance classes twice a week, on Mondays and Fridays, which I find both fun and social. As a result, I've made many friends at the studio. Moreover, dancing is a great way to stay fit and relieve stress.

Sugestão: Corrige tiempos verbales y reduce muletillas como 'uh'. Señala ejemplos específicos y conecta ideas con palabras como 'however' o 'unfortunately'. Mantén la respuesta clara y directa.

Exemplo: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child, such as painting, swimming and learning the piano. My mother invested a lot of time and money to support these activities; however, I no longer continue them because of school commitments.

Sugestão: Usa tiempos correctos y estructura más natural. Empieza con una oración directa y añade causa y efecto con conectores como 'because' o 'since'. Evita frases largas y repetitivas.

Exemplo: No, I haven't kept any childhood hobbies. Since middle school I became very busy with my studies, so I gradually stopped painting and playing instruments.

Sugestão: Mejora la claridad y corrige la gramática. Evita repeticiones y expresiones inadecuadas ('broken their arms'). Sé más cortés y natural; usa conectores como 'because' y 'so'.

Exemplo: Not really. My main hobby is dancing, but my parents are usually too busy with work to join me. My grandparents are elderly, so it's not suitable for them to dance; instead, we spend time together in gentler activities like talking or watching TV.

× My hobbies recently is sensing.

✓ My hobby recently is dancing.

The subject 'hobbies' and the verb 'is' do not agree and the word 'sensing' is incorrect for the intended activity. Use singular 'hobby' with 'is' or plural 'hobbies' with 'are'. Also use the correct noun 'dancing'. Suggested: 'My hobby recently is dancing.' This keeps present tense and subject-verb agreement.

× I took dance courses twice a week, so I went to dance club every Monday and Friday.

✓ I took dance courses twice a week, so I went to the dance club every Monday and Friday.

The sentence mixes past-tense activity correctly but lacks the definite article before 'dance club'. Add 'the' for a specific place. Tense is fine (past), so keep past verbs 'took' and 'went'.

× That was really enjoyable and I made a lot of friends there.

✓ That was really enjoyable, and I made a lot of friends there.

Grammatically the sentence is acceptable; punctuation improvement: add a comma before coordinating conjunction 'and' connecting two independent clauses. This does not change tense.

× And also it's kind of good way to exercise.

✓ Also, it's kind of a good way to exercise.

Missing article 'a' before 'good way'. Also 'kind of' is informal; in speaking it's acceptable. Correct form: 'it's kind of a good way to exercise.'

× Yes, of course, when I was a child I have a lot of hobbies like painting, swimming and also playing instruments.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a child, I had a lot of hobbies like painting, swimming, and playing instruments.

The time marker 'when I was a child' requires past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'have'. Also add commas for clarity and parallel structure.

× My mum spent a lot of money and uh, time to cultivate my habits, but unfortunately none of them was continuously my hobby now.

✓ My mum spent a lot of money and time to cultivate my hobbies, but unfortunately none of them continued to be my hobbies now.

Problems: plural nouns and tense. 'Habits' intended as 'hobbies'; use plural 'hobbies'. 'None of them was continuously my hobby now' is ungrammatical: use past 'continued' with 'to be' and adjust time reference: 'now' conflicts with 'continued'; better: 'none of them continued to be my hobbies.'

× As I mentioned before, none of these hobbies were continuously in my adulthood because of the busy school work and lack of time, so I don't cultivate my hobbies since I was in middle school.

✓ As I mentioned before, none of these hobbies continued into my adulthood because of busy schoolwork and lack of time, so I haven't cultivated my hobbies since I was in middle school.

Use past 'continued' to show transition into adulthood and present perfect 'haven't cultivated' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present ('since I was in middle school'). Also 'schoolwork' is one word and 'since' requires present perfect.

× Now as I mentioned before my my hobbies mainly now is dancing but my parents are too busy with their works so they barely have time to dance with me and besides that besides like that my grandparents were are too old to dance with me that may broken their arms or cause any accident.

✓ As I mentioned before, my main hobby now is dancing, but my parents are too busy with work so they barely have time to dance with me, and my grandparents are too old to dance with me because it might break their arms or cause an accident.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement 'hobbies... is' should be 'hobby... is' or 'hobbies... are'; choose singular 'hobby' with 'main' adjective. Remove duplicate words and use 'work' (uncountable) not 'works'. Use 'might break' (modal + base verb) instead of 'may broken' which incorrectly uses past participle. Use 'cause an accident' and proper punctuation to separate clauses.