Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 불완전하고 의미 전달에 혼란이 있습니다. 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤 구체적인 예시(어떤 요리, 얼마나 자주 준비하는지)를 연결어(with, and, for example)를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 발음/문법 오류로 보이는 부분(“They'll try you less ship fees...”)은 제거하고 의도한 내용을 명확히 표현하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy cooking. I usually cook on weekends for my family and friends, preparing dishes like Italian pasta or French stew. For example, last weekend I made lasagna and a green salad, which everyone liked.

Sugestão: 대체로 응답은 명확하지만 문장이 길고 약간 반복됩니다. 주제문을 유지한 뒤 이유를 간결히 설명하고 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 정리하세요.

Exemplo: Not really. When I was a child I had to focus on studying and attended an academy every day, so I didn't have much time for hobbies.

Sugestão: 답변의 표현과 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다(예: 'new hockey' 의미 불명). 질문에는 '어린 시절부터의 취미' 여부만 묻고 있으므로 간단히 답한 뒤 현재의 취미를 설명할 경우 정확한 어휘(traveling, hobby)를 사용하고 연결어로 비교하세요. 구체적인 활동과 이유를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: No, I don't have any hobbies from childhood. I started a new hobby of traveling at age 20, and I find travelling with friends and family both relaxing and fulfilling because we explore new places together.

Sugestão: 문장이 길고 문법적으로 어색한 부분(‘with my family members’, 'me and brother do not')이 있습니다. 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤 차이를 설명할 때는 비교 연결어(while, although, however)를 사용하고 구체적 예시(어디로, 얼마나 오래)를 제공하세요. 문장을 끝까지 완성하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, we share a love of travelling. While my parents prefer short trips, my brother and I like longer vacations, so we often plan week-long beach or mountain trips together.

× Additionally, I. They'll try you less ship fees such as Italian styles or French styles.

✓ Additionally, I like to try different cuisines such as Italian or French styles.

The original sentence is fragmentary and unclear. 'I.' is an incomplete clause and 'They'll try you less ship fees' is ungrammatical and makes no sense. This is a sentence structure error: rewrite into a complete idea that fits context. Suggestion: state the subject and verb clearly ('I like to try') and use 'cuisines' or 'styles' correctly ('Italian or French'), removing irrelevant words. Correction aligns tense and meaning with previous sentence about enjoying cooking.

× Not really, especially when I was a child I had to focus only on studying and went to the Academy every day so I couldn't do any hobbies as a child.

✓ Not really. Especially when I was a child, I had to focus only on studying and went to the academy every day, so I couldn't have any hobbies.

The sentence uses past events, so past tense is appropriate, but there is repetition ('as a child' twice) and slight awkwardness. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue; adjust punctuation, remove redundancy, and use 'have any hobbies' to sound natural. Also lowercase 'academy' unless it's a proper name.

× No, I don't have. But actually I have a new hockey since I was 20 years old.

✓ No, I don't. But actually I have taken up a new hobby, hockey, since I was 20 years old.

'I don't have' is incomplete without an object; this is a pronoun/ellipsis issue. Also 'a new hockey' is incorrect because 'hockey' is uncountable or a sport, so we say 'taken up a new hobby, hockey' and use present perfect 'have taken up ... since I was 20' to show action started in past and continues. The instruction asked to correct only listed grammar types; this combines pronoun and tense corrections but focuses on pronoun misuse and verb form.

× It is a traveling with my friends and families.

✓ It is traveling with my friends and family.

'A traveling' is incorrect: 'traveling' as a noun should be 'travel' or 'traveling' without 'a'. Also 'families' should be 'family' unless referring to multiple families. This is a preposition/noun form error — simplify to 'traveling with my friends and family.'

× I can find it both relaxing and fulfilling.

✓ I find it both relaxing and fulfilling.

Both 'can find' and 'find' are grammatical, but in this context the simple present 'I find' is more natural to express a general truth about the hobby. This is a present tense use issue: prefer simple present for habitual or general statements.

× Yes, I have the same hobbies with my family members.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobbies as my family members.

Use 'the same ... as' to compare; 'with' is incorrect here. This is a preposition error: replace 'with' by 'as.'

× My parents like traveling with me and brothers but actually my parents prefer traveling a short period but me and brother do not so we just go to.

✓ My parents like traveling with my brothers and me, but they prefer short trips, while my brother and I do not, so we sometimes go on longer trips.

Multiple pronoun errors: object pronoun order ('my brothers and me'), and subject pronoun 'my brother and I' for the subject. Also sentence is fragmented and unclear ('so we just go to' incomplete). This correction fixes pronoun forms and completes the idea. Use parallel structure and clarify preferences. Note: keep tense consistent and use 'short trips' instead of 'a short period.'