Hobby— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 비교적 명확하지만 유창성과 자연스러움, 문법적 정확성, 구체성에서 향상이 필요합니다. 예: 불필요한 발화 중단(Uh)과 복수형 오류(every weekends → every weekend)를 고치고, 주제문 뒤에 이유와 예시를 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 또한 한두 문장으로 핵심을 전달하고 추가로 어떤 요리를 좋아하는지 구체적으로 말하면 좋습니다.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy cooking. I usually cook at the weekends because I like preparing homemade meals, and I often try new recipes like Italian pasta or stir‑fry to improve my skills.

Sugestão: 문장의 의미 전달은 되지만 문법적 오류와 논리적 연결이 흐트러져 이해하기 어렵습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고 이유나 상황을 연결어로 명확히 설명하세요. 예: 'used to ride a bike'를 중심으로, 부모님이 야외 활동을 권장했음을 'because'로 연결하고 스티커 관련 부분은 정확히 표현하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to ride a bike a lot as a child because my parents encouraged me to play outside. They even gave me stickers as rewards, so I often rode around the neighborhood.

Sugestão: 내용은 적절하지만 유창성, 시제 및 문법(문장 연결, every weekends → every weekend)에서 개선이 필요합니다. 주제문 뒤에 구체적인 빈도나 활동을 연결어로 덧붙이고 왜 계속하는지 이유를 말하세요. 불필요한 중간 발화를 제거하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I've enjoyed swimming since I was a child. I still go to the local pool with friends most weekends to practice different strokes and stay fit.

Sugestão: 의미가 모호하고 문법적 오류가 많아 전달력이 떨어집니다. 가족 구성원의 취미를 비교할 때는 주제문으로 명확히 시작하고, 각각의 취미를 간결하게 나열한 뒤 차이점을 설명하세요. 불필요한 단어와 중복(our swimming, liking)을 제거하고 주어·동사 일치를 바로잡으세요.

Exemplo: Not really. I enjoy swimming and sometimes leading community booths, while my parents prefer watching TV and my brother likes playing video games, so we usually have different interests.

× I enjoy cooking every weekends because I love eating my meals that I make.

✓ I enjoy cooking every weekend because I love eating the meals that I make.

'Every' is followed by a singular noun, so use 'weekend' not 'weekends'. Also use the definite article 'the' before 'meals that I make' to refer to specific meals you prepare. Suggestion: Learn countable noun rules with 'every' and article usage.

× The stickers my parents bought to eat for me to play outside without reading books, so I usually went outside with my bike.

✓ My parents bought stickers to encourage me to play outside instead of reading books, so I usually went outside with my bike.

Original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect verb phrases ('bought to eat for me'). Rewriting clarifies purpose: 'bought stickers to encourage me' and uses 'instead of' for contrast. Suggestion: Use clear purpose phrases like 'to encourage' and contrast structures 'instead of'.

× Umm, still go to local pools with my friends every weekends and always practice my swimming skills.

✓ Umm, I still go to local pools with my friends every weekend and always practice my swimming skills.

As above, 'every' requires singular 'weekend'. Also sentence lacked subject 'I' which is required. Suggestion: Always include the subject in full sentences and use singular with 'every'.

× Not really actually my hobby is our swimming and leading booths when my parents like watching TV and liking and even my brother like playing games indoors.

✓ Not really. Actually, my hobby is swimming and running booths, while my parents like watching TV and my brother likes playing games indoors.

Pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'our swimming' is odd; 'leading booths' unclear so 'running booths' is better. Also verbs must agree: 'my parents like' (plural) is okay, but 'my brother like' should be 'my brother likes'. Suggestion: Use correct subject-verb agreement and choose appropriate noun phrases (e.g., 'swimming' not 'our swimming').

× So actually we're not sharing our hobbies each other.

✓ So actually we don't share our hobbies with each other.

Incorrect reflexive/reciprocal phrase: use 'share X with each other' not 'share X each other' and negative present simple 'we don't share'. Suggestion: Learn common verb patterns with 'share' and the preposition 'with' for reciprocity.